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COVER LETTER：

Dear Human Resources Manager:
I am really interested in the Mechanical Engineer position.

I have confidence that I have the capacity to fulfill your duty as a mechanical engineer, and would like to be considered for the position.

I had been working in a famous Aircraft Institute of China by the end of September of 2006 since my graduation in 2004. During the two years, I had been developing a proficient mechanical design skill. In addition, I enjoy mechanical designing.

I have been devoting my attention to your company since about seven years ago. GE is the corporation that I respect most. Interestingly, ARJ21, which consists of my effort in its structure design, will soar in blue sky by the draw of two motors supplied by GE. More amazingly, GE, which similarly is the motor of the entire world, is heading this world to go forward and reforming the life of people.

To contribute for GE and grow up together is one of my dreams. I hope it come true sincerely.

I have enclosed my resume. I look forward to speaking with you personally. I can be reached at the above mobile phone number. However, I’ll devote my attention to your company the same as before, and best wishes to you.

Sincerely,
X X

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RESUME：

XXX
Dayuncun XXX, 29# Zhichun Road
Haidian District, Beijing 100083, China
XXX@hotmail.com
(86) 1381-XXX-XXXX

JOB OBJECTIVE: MECHANICAL ENGINEER
History: 2+ years of consistent achievements in aircraft structure designing
and providing sustaining support in a big institute.

CORE COMPETENCIES
        Responsibility
        AUTOCAD drawing skills
        CATIA and SOLIDWORKS 3D-designing and 2D-drawing skills

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE
The First Aircraft Institute of AVIC(Aviation Institute of China)-1                           Xi’an
Assistant Engineer, Wing Structure Design Division                       Aug, 2004-Sep, 2006
Designed structures and took drawings for assigned components，worked with various divisions，tracked the manufacture process, settled the related problems，optimized designs and manufacturability and took improvements.
                                                    Key Projects & Results
        ARJ21 (the fresh feeder airliner of China): Accomplished 3D structure design and 2D drawings of four wing rib components.
        XXX(a new layout composite material airplane): Accomplished 3D structure design and 2D drawings of seven wing rib components.
        LE-500(an ultra-light airplane): Accomplished modifying the drawings and creating the technical documents of elevators and rudders.
        ARJ21, FY-25, XXX(Chinese FeiBao): Settled parts of problems which appeared in the production and manufacturing processes.
        Training: the using of aviation sheetmetal design software and composite material structure design software.

ACTIVITIES & REWARDS
        Apr, 2002-Jun, 2003 Accomplished designing a new pattern tower-clambering machine, which was awarded one of the Innovational Exercising Excellent Items, and was invited by CCTV (China Central Television) for the Tower-clambering Machine Competition.
        Feb, 2004-May, 2004 Accomplished designing and analyzing the wing flap mechanism of ARJ21 in The First Aircraft Institute of AVIC-1.

EDUCATION
Beijing University of Aerospace and Astronautics                                         Beijing
Bachelor of Engineering，Spacecraft Design and Engineering                            Jul, 2004

PERSONAL INFORMATION
Native speaker of Chinese, fluent in English, and passed CET-4. Be Practiced in MS Office. Be thirsty desire for new knowledges and like city-travel and digital products.

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谢谢了，

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