issue83【米国有米】小组 第十次作业

Silence0706UID: 2289145

With the increasing population on the earth, the space is becoming narrower and smaller. It is high time that people protect the nature and environment. In some countries, there are still some wildness areas that haven't be exploited by people, and is accessible to only a few people. However, governments should not neglect the protection of these wild areas, which plays an important role to balance the environment and to be useful to people in the future.

Wildness areas are important to people in the country now and also in the future. People are booming and will find some new area to live in, there wild areas will be good choice in the future. History test to us this trend, for centuries people are keep finding new area to producing and living, today, these wild areas are decreasing, so it is even more important for the government to protect them for the exploit in the future. Furthermore, in these areas there are primitive forests, huge mountains, broad meadows and lots of wild animals, the scenes of many wild areas can be used as the places for many tourists. To make this, the government should firstly protect the environment and creature of these areas.

Furthermore, the more important, the destroys of environment of the wild areas, even remote and accessible to only a few people, will bring great bad influence to a much larger environment. In China, the high section of the yellow river, which is relatively wild and remote to the population, was ever not protected well by the government, lead to the soil loss in these area, when the river flows to the lower section, the bad environment with the soil loss in the higher section, the river become so turbid that the sand accumulate year after year, enhancing the water level, threaten the river dam and the safety of many people in the lower section. The destroy of the Amazon forests in some extent even affect the environment of the world. We should see the environments in the wild areas is keeping important balance of the country and the world, so every country should emphasis the protection of the areas to avoid the worsen of a larger environment.

Without the protection of the government, even these areas are remote and accessible to only a few people, the environment and creature of the wild areas may be easily to destroyed. Firstly, now people terrible, even a few people may destroy a forest or kill thousands of animals for the individual advantage. Secondly, without the people interruption, the environment may be worsen itself, because the whole environment of the earth is becoming worse, and more and more places is full of people and under the control of the people, so it is now difficult for the nature to balance itself now. As the environment is already greatly influenced by human being, they must do some protection the keep the balance of nature.

In sum, wild areas are important for people to live and to keep balance of the environment, and they are also become fragile under the influence of human being and need protect by people. So every government undertake the important duty.

bluecathyUID: 2231215

With the increasing population on the earth, the space is becoming narrower and smaller. It is high time that people protect the nature and environment. In some countries, there are still some wildness areas that haven't be[been] exploited by people, and is accessible to only a few people. However, governments should not neglect the protection of these wild areas, which plays an important role to balance the environment and to be useful to people in the future.开头点题很好。

Wildness areas are important to people in the country now and also in the future. People are booming and will find some new area[areas] to live in, there[these] wild areas will be good choice in the future. History test to us this trend[history experience tells the trend that ], for centuries people are keep finding new area to producing[produce] and living,[live.] today, these wild areas are decreasing, so it is even[much] more important for the government to protect them for the exploit in the future. Furthermore, in these areas there are primitive forests, huge mountains, broad meadows and lots of wild animals, the scenes of many wild areas can be used as the places for many tourists.[这些地区可作旅游胜地，那么接下来呢，是因此它容易被破坏而政府需加强保护，还是因此可以作将来的旅游资源开发而需现在加强保护？你这句话并没有表明具体的意思，和后面一句衔接在一起容易产生歧义。应该再补充一句，因此而有可能怎样怎样，下面to make ] To make this[this是什么呢，具体些], the government should firstly protect the environment and creature of these areas.

Furthermore, the more important, the destroys[destroy是动词，换成destruction] of environment of the wild areas, even remote and accessible to only a few people, will bring great bad influence to a much larger environment. In China, the high section of the yellow river, which is relatively wild and remote to the population, was ever not protected well by the government,[从in china到government，是一个完整的复合句，写得很好，但是后面的lead to是从哪里导致来的] lead to the soil loss in these area, when the river flows to the lower section, the bad environment with the soil loss in the higher section, the river become so turbid that the sand accumulate year after year, enhancing[动词的分词形式] the water level, threaten[动词原形，这两个并列的句子里面出现两种动词形态，我不得不说，你的句法实在有些许问题] the river dam and the safety of many people in the lower section.[没有过度，加一个another example之类的] The destroy [destruction] of the Amazon forests in[to] some extent even affect the environment of the world. We should see[realize that] the environments in the wild areas is keeping important balance of the country and the world[modern cities and environment], so every country should emphasis the protection of the areas to avoid the worsen of a larger environment[avoid the whole environment getting worse].

Without the protection of the government, even these areas are remote and accessible to only a few people, the environment and creature of the wild areas may be easily to [be] destroyed. Firstly, now people terrible[现代人很可怕？now people are terrible?], even a few people may destroy a forest or kill thousands of animals for the individual advantage. Secondly, without the people[’s] interruption, the environment may be[get] worsen itself, because the whole environment of the earth is becoming worse, and more and more places is full of people and under the control of the people, so it is now difficult for the nature to balance itself now. As the environment is already greatly influenced by human being, they[写明具体是谁，人还是政府，否则这样的从句关系容易产生歧义] must do some protection the keep the balance of nature.

In sum, wild areas are important for people to live and to keep balance of the environment, and they [are also become两个动词] fragile under the influence of human being and need protect[need to be protected] by people.[and they are easy to become fragile under the influence of human being and necessary to be protected by people] So every government [should] undertake the important duty.

改了作者三篇文章，也许作者想象不到，这一篇我改了整整一个小时。说实话，作者的语病实在是不少。前面我都改过了，这里就不再多说了。个人认为作者若是还有大量时间才去考试，应该先看看英语语法书或者写作书。还有你的表达有些中文化，很多句子，逐字逐句的翻译能够理解，但是英语是不可以那样表达的，建议你找在版内找200句背诵，找找英语语感。虽然没看到你的提纲，但是感觉你还是心里有谱的，所以文章结构还是很清晰的。你的错误，每个人最开始都有，大家都是这么走过来的。所以多多练习吧，肯定很快会有提高的。我今天说的重了些，你别放在心上，无视于我就好了，相信自己很快就会提高的！加油！