Issue51 [Chasing For "6" Score]第一次作业

chongxinlaiUID: 2235209

Issue51 [Chasing For "6" Score]第一次作业
【题目】Education will be truly effective only whenit is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of eachstudent.
【翻译】只有针对每个学生的需要和兴趣，教育才真正的有意义。
【题纲】
1.Admittedly, meeting needs and interests of students would help themstudy more effectively to some extent.

2.However, what is meaningless and unrealistic is that catering to eachone of needs and interests of students.
3.Moreover, the most important object of education is preparing studentsfor future careers.

WORDS: 656         TIME: 3 hour          DATE: 2007-1-30

根据意见修改过，大家再帮忙看看。

Iseducation meeting  every student’s needsand interests   truly effective, as the  speaker asserts? As far as I am concerned ,proper satisfaction of student’s wants is in favor of education. However,However, it is impossible and harmful to specifically be designed to cater forthe individual’s needs and interests of each students.



Admittedly, student would study interesting lesson well. As a great scientistonce said "Great interest is the best teacher". As a general rule,people will be more easily to concentrate all of their energy on an interestingthing which greatly contributes to assimilation and digestion of mass of newknowledge and information. Consider, for instance, many famous scientists suchas Newton and Edison, who had made great contribution to human society in spiteof their terrible grade during their early childhood .Thank goodness，they still had interests in some scientificfields，otherwise，  it is impossible for us to enjoy ourselvesfrom a large number of science and technology. Deep down, the education’sefficiency will be enhanced strikingly when it meets certain  genius‘s  needs and interests as possibleas he can.

However, what is meaningless and unrealistic is that catering to student‘s every  needs and interests .Firstly, a university hasno ability to provide enough sources to satisfy each one. For example, teachercan not understand each member's idea and make relevant plan of education foreach of them for his limited energy, even if he may make friends with hisstudents and they are willing to tell him what they like and dislike. What ismore, even though a university’s managerhas known a lots lot of students' interests and needs, many objective factorssuch as lacking of financial support and limited by geographic circumstances remainmajor problems .This is very common in some poor countries or regions wherestudents who care for physic and chemistry can't gain enough materials for theirexperiments .The same is true of those students who are interested in kinds ofmarine lives but lived in a desert country. At the even worse some students’ideas are immature or even dangerous. Were they received enough education fittingtheir interests, the student s would be most likely to grow into anineffectual, perhaps seven an anti-social, adult.

Moreover,the most important duty of education is training students for their futurecareers. Over placing emphasis on an individual's needs and interests apparentlyhampers this essential object aim. Though for satisfying those students, ouruniversity prepares them of some liberal arts included literature, history,music and so forth, they distinguished from prevocational or preprofessionalstudies used to refer to unspecialized and nonscientific. Prevocational orpreprofessional courses which include subjects as health sciences, engineering,computer programming and architecture constitute an increasing majority ofhigher education programs worldwide. In the USA fewer less than a third of allcollege students graduate with bachelor's degrees in liberal arts subjects. Thedevelopment of new technologies and the globalization of the world economy havecreated high demands for workers with computer, communication, and otheroccupational skills that can be acquired at colleges or universities. Forexample, computer has reduced many jobs only require low-skilled in a varietyof fields, however it also has  created new opportunities for those whohave the proper training .To be sure, the university should provide morelessons about prevocational and paraprofessional to increase graduates' ratioof employment.


In sum, while a lesson specifically designed for student is beneficial for himto develop his potential and go to success.  We should not lose sight of the fact thatattempting to satisfy every needs is futile ,or even risky when those needs andinterests are illegal. Besides, to make education truly effective, theuniversity should try his best to develop prevocational and paraprofessionalcourses rather than pay close attention to meet students' needs and interests.



[ 本帖最后由 chongxinlai 于 2007-2-1 17:58 编辑 ]

susan8940UID: 160449

楼主写到凌晨两点阿？好用功！真是佩服！！:handshake

[ 本帖最后由 susan8940 于 2007-1-30 13:46 编辑 ]

chongxinlaiUID: 2235209

老大们向我开炮阿，通宵熬夜不容易啊

stonesundlutUID: 2235257

I agree with speaker insofar as that meeting appropriately student's needs help helps university enhance efficiency of education. However, it is impossible and harmful to specifically designed be designed to cater for the individual individual’s needs and interests of each students.


Admittedly, meeting needs and interests of students would help them study more effectively to some extent. As a great scientist once said "Great interest is the best teacher", the saying is used to point out 直接用points out 不是更简洁吗 that a an individual can learn much more information and knowledge interested he/she is interested. As a general rule, people will be more easily to concentrate all of his their energy on an interesting thing which greatly contribute contributes to assimilation and digestion of mass of new knowledge and information.感觉这句话表达有问题 Consider, for instance, many famous scientists such as Newton and Edison, who had make made great contribution to human society in spite of their too bad 个人认为这么表达不好，用terrible怎么样？ grade during their early childhood .Without regard to their curious pursuit of scientific knowledge and explore of some unknown fields,这句话表达不清楚，而且语法也有错误 it is impossible for us to enjoy ourselves from a large number of science and technology. Deep down, the education’s efficiency will be enhanced strikily strikingly when it meets student's needs and interests as much as possible.

However, what is meaningless and unrealistic is that catering to each one of needs and interests of students 这句话很拗口，不知道能不能改的简单点用 it is meaningless and unrealistic to cater to each student’s needs and interests. First Firstly, a university is unable to provide enough sources to meet satisfy meet 和satisfy是不是应该去掉一个 every student's need. For example, teacher can not understand each member's idea and make relevant plan of education for each of them because of his limited energy, even if he may has become his student's friend he may make friends with his students and they are willing to tell him what they like and dislike.感觉even if 没有必要 What is more, even though a university has known university 怎么会know 呢 a lots lot of students' interests and needs, many objective factors such as lacking of adequate financial support and limited by geographic circumstances remains remain an major problem major problems .This is very common in some poor countries or regions where student who cares for physic and chemistry can't gain enough materials for his experiments he 用they替换比较好. The same is true of So do those students who are interested in kinds of去掉 marine life lives but lived in a desert country. At the even worse some student's students’ ideas are immature or even dangers dangerous. Were they received many education according to his their interests, the student s would be most likely to grow into an ineffectual, perhaps seven an anti-social, adult.不太明白这句话，并且觉得没用

Moreover, the most important object duty of education is preparing training students for their future careers. Over placing emphasis on an individual's needs and interests apparently hampers this essential object aim. Though for satisfying those students, our university prepare prepares them of some liberal arts included literature, history, music and so forth, they distinguished from prevocational or preprofessional studies used to refer to unspecialized and nonscientific. Prevocational or preprofessional courses which include subjects as health sciences, engineering, computer programming and architecture constitute an increasing majority of higher education programs worldwide. In the USA fewer less than a third of all college students graduate with bachelor's degrees in liberal arts subjects. With没用吧 the development of new technologies and the globalization of the world economy have created high demand demands for workers with computer, communication, and other occupational skills that can be acquired at colleges or universities. For example, computer has reduced many jobs only require low-skilled in a variety of fields, however it also has  created new opportunities for those who have the proper training .To be sure, the university should provide more lessons about prevocational and preprofessionall to increase graduates' ratio of employment.


In sum, While while a lesson specifically designed for student is beneficial for him to develop his potential and go to success. we We should not lose sight of the fact that attempting to satisfy every needs is futile ,or even risky when those needs and interests are illegal. Besides, to make education truly effective, the university should try his best to develop prvocational prevocational and preprofessional courses rather than pay close attention to meet students' needs and interests.
感觉整体思路还不错。
个别例子用处不大。
作者应该在表达和语法上下下功夫。写完以后可以在word中检查一下拼写错误，和格式错误。（有的地方我改的也不一定对 欢迎讨论 呵呵）

[ 本帖最后由 stonesundlut 于 2007-1-30 19:16 编辑 ]

coetzeeUID: 2274747

首先感谢楼主改我的文章.
今天认真看了楼主的文章和stonesundlut的修改.
觉得语法句式上改得非常详细了,没必要再改了,楼主在语法句式上还要努力(我也要努力!).
总体来说,觉得第四段写的有点太冗长了,可以简练一点,更深入的分析就更好了.

乱说一气,楼主别见怪.

chongxinlaiUID: 2235209

嗯,写第四段的时候看了gter上的一片资料不想多动脑子了,就抄成了这样......

myclover_vipUID: 2291487

拜读了楼主的issue，文章结构紧凑，论证也清晰，不错啊~~喜欢楼主第三段的论述，虽然例子简单，但是与文章的论证结合；不过个人觉得第四段中论证教育的最重要的责任是为了学生的career稍有偏颇，局限了教育的目的使得它有些功利性
      以上属个人愚见，若有不妥，欢迎共同探讨啊~~
   
     P.S谢谢楼主对于偶处女作的意见，我会好好努力的~~也祝楼主更上一层楼啊~~

绝望的人流浪UID: 2188756

Is　education meeting  every student’s need　sand interests   truly effective,（sand?） as the  speaker asserts? As far as I am concerned, proper satisfaction of student’s wants is in favor of education. However, However, it is impossible and harmful to specifically be designed to cater for　the individual’s needs and interests of each students.



Admittedly, student would study interesting lesson well. As a great scientist once said "Great interest is the best teacher". （准备的时间可以详细的有人名，这样好像更好一些吧)As a general rule, people will be more easily to concentrate all of their energy on an interesting　thing which greatly contributes to assimilation and digestion（这两个词什么关系？递进？） of mass of new　knowledge and information. Consider, for instance, many famous scientists such　as Newton and Edison, who had made great contribution to human society in spite　of their terrible grade during their early childhood .Thank goodness，they still had interests in some scientific　fields（这个Issue是说的Specified教育的作用。举一个没有受良好教育的例子好像不太合适虽然是用来说明兴趣的作用），otherwise，  it is impossible for us to enjoy ourselves　from a large number of science and technology. Deep down, the education’s　efficiency will be enhanced strikingly when it meets certain  genius‘s  needs and interests as possible　as he can.
（感觉这个和主题不是太相合。没有突出教育！）
However, what is meaningless and unrealistic is that catering to student‘s every  needs and interests .Firstly, a university（school更好些？） has　no ability to provide enough sources to satisfy each one. For example, teacher　can not understand each member's idea and make relevant plan of education foreach of them for his limited energy,（这句好像不太流畅啊。不过我也改不好。请DX来） even if he may make friends with his　students and they are willing to tell him what they like and dislike. What is　more, even though a university’s manager　has known a lots lot of students' interests and needs, many objective factors　such as lacking of financial support and limited by geographic circumstances remainmajor problems .This is very common in some poor countries or regions wherestudents who care for physic and chemistry can't gain enough materials for theirexperiments .The same is true of those students who are interested in kinds of　marine lives but lived in a desert country. At the even worse some students’ideas are immature or even dangerous. Were they received enough education fittingtheir interests, the student s would be most likely to grow into anineffectual, perhaps seven an anti-social, adult.
（这一段的说明好像不够简洁）
Moreover,the most important duty of education is training students for their futurecareers. （这一段的主题）Over placing emphasis on an individual's needs and interests apparentlyhampers this essential object aim. Though for satisfying those students, ouruniversity prepares them of some liberal arts included literature, history,music and so forth, they distinguished from prevocational or preprofessional　studies used to refer to unspecialized and nonscientific. Prevocational orpreprofessional courses which include subjects as health sciences, engineering,computer programming and architecture constitute an increasing majority ofhigher education programs worldwide. In the USA fewer less than a third of allcollege students graduate with bachelor's degrees in liberal arts subjects. The development of new technologies and the globalization of the world economy have created high demands for workers with computer, communication, and other occupational skills that can be acquired at colleges or universities. For example, computer has reduced（这里Reduce一词的感情色彩是中性的？换个词会不会好些，比如rob?） many jobs only require low-skilled in a varietyof fields, however it also has  created new opportunities for those whohave the proper training .To be sure, the university should provide morelessons about prevocational and paraprofessional to increase graduates' ratio of employment.


In sum, while a lesson specifically designed for student is beneficial for him to develop his potential and go to success.  We should not lose sight of the fact that attempting to satisfy every needs is futile ,or even risky when those needs andinterests are illegal. Besides, to make education truly effective, theuniversity should try his best to develop prevocational and paraprofessionalcourses rather than pay close attention to meet students' needs and interests.
(由于水平有限，也做不出好的具体的修改，这个文章是Issue可以自由发挥。但是否在整个论证过程中应该更贴近一些主题)