issue4 <aspire互改小组>第一次作业

kooyiiUID: 2177986

ISSUE4."No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
Outline:
1.knowledge from other field of study has indeed make significant advance in many subjects
2.differ fields of study is needed to advance by the other realm
3.however，it don't seems exactly correct in some subject


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       The speaker asserts that If any field of study can advance significantly, outsiders must bring their knowledge and experience to this field of study. I basically agree with it to some current subjects, however, there are also significant advance had been made in some field of study without outsiders' knowledge and experience. Moreover, those knowledge and experience may useful in some study, but not all advance necessary  need it.

      Admittedly, borrowing knowledge and experience from other field of study has indeed make significant advance in many subjects. New scientific fields often emerge in the interaction among different disciplines, biochemistry and molecular biology,for example, are undoubtedly the hybrid of diverse subject. The combine of such subject bring them inexhaustible power to new cross-disciplines, which plays more and more crucial roles in our quotidian lives.

       More over, differ fields of study is needed to advance by the other realm.Considering medicine, it arises on the basis of combination between biology and chemistry, which is support by mechanics  ,material and electronics technology, besides, psychology and medical rely heavily on each other. An even more striking example is ,with the invent of computer，there will be significantly development in all fields, not only in engineering, but also in literature and economy ,etc. Similarly, it appeals indispensable in human progress that knowledge and experience from various field should be conditionally and assuredly   combined to further the research of any given field.
    However, it is inaccurate for us to over emphasis the importance of the outsiders in the scientific research.。The speaker ignores the contributions coming from the development of a subject itself, which is also a immense power in the development of study. Classical physics, for example ,merely relates to outsiders. Like the occurrences of Newton’s Law of Gravitation and Einstein’s Theory of Relativity , are absolutely hail from the genius’ wisdom, little of which is borrowed from other subjects. The other example is the mathematicians  , they make their big achievement by a pen, and a  piece of paper. Did they have to
appreciate to the manufacturer of pencil and the printing technology? The factors contributing to an academic subjects' significant growth，may include many apart from sharing the outsiders' intelligence, such as the long-term academic accumulation ,the appropriate social and economic support ,the  geniuses and so on.
     Generally speaking, for most study, the knowledge and experience outside that field is quite important which play a signify role,. Other wise, however, with respect to some field，I find the claim to be an unfair generalization.
     

参考了很多范文,才挤出来这么一篇,有很多地方都写得很不连贯~
  处男作....第一次....很痛......苦,大家就狠狠的打击我吧!
谢谢~



[ 本帖最后由 kooyii 于 2007-1-31 18:13 编辑 ]

kooyiiUID: 2177986

第一次作业(07.01.29)提纲:ISSUE31,43&56
ARG26&42
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Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial."
花在研究上的资金基本上都是不错的投资，即使研究的结果是有争议的。（现实和理想）
1.我们在研究中可以得到很多新的东西，to understand ourselves and the world around us,bring investor a huge profit（大把例子)
2.即使有时候研究失败了，after all ,they are of greater benefit in the short or long term（失败让我们知道了更多的不可行的路）
3.有些研究是meaningless的，在投资前必须要谨慎认真的对待
Position：基本支持部分反对。
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"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."
一个政府官员要想成为一位有成效的领导者，必须有极高的伦理和道德修养。（政治类）
1.正直的品格跟道德修养是很重要的。（林肯）
2.事实上，道德高尚有时候会跟领导者的位置相冲突。
3.为了国家或社会利益，即使disobey了道德伦理，也是reasonable的（为了国家发动战争）。
3.过分的违反，只能是自取灭亡（必将背钉在历史的耻辱柱上，被后人所唾骂--希特勒）

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"Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."（当务之急与百年大计）
政府应该把更多的精力放到解决眼前实际的问题中，而不要放到未来可能会产生的问题中
1.immediate problem肯定是很urgen的problem，要给与足够的focus。
2.however,一个不关心未来的政府，是一个没有目标没有生命力的政府，很容易失去人心。
3.emergencies 需要attention跟immediate activity,要prevent，就要有足够的关注跟相应的策略。
position:Both are important!

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The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda.
"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."

1.设备得到改善，难道跟这家伙有关？那应该是学校的事~
2.过去5年他领导的乐队得了3次奖，谁知道这个学校以前怎么样？可能以前天天拿奖他来了后5年才拿3次。
3.这个学校以前有没有这个职位？是谁在做？有没有什么东西可以证明cs这个人可以做得更好的？
（从这个arg可以学到，如果你是领导者，想推荐一个自己人，应该怎么措辞才能骗到那帮委员会的人~）

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The following appeared in a proposal from the economic minister of the country of Paraterra.
"In order to strengthen its lagging economy, last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began an advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism (ecotourism). This year the number of foreign visitors arriving at Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increased by ten percent. To provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of our tiny country, we too should begin to promote ecotourism. To ensure that our advertising campaign is successful, we should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign."

1.两个地区的情况不同，paraterra这个地方是否适合开展生态旅游呢？有什么好的生态环境么？
2.BE的旅游局顾问，可能对广告完全没有感觉，为什么请他？他来了也未必了解我们的国情~
3.我们的经济发展迅速，没必要靠旅游来增加收入。想保护自己的天然资源，那就更不能增加旅游阿，人多了会破坏生态滴~
4.人家BE本来落后的经济，人均收入增加10%，可能只是在10的基础上加上1~如果是货币贬值通货膨胀之类的，可能反而少了~

[ 本帖最后由 kooyii 于 2007-1-30 19:55 编辑 ]

adamli629UID: 2230674

The speaker asserts that If （if小写）any field of study can advance significantly, outsiders must bring their knowledge and experience to this field of study. I basically agree with it to some current subjects, however, there are also significant advance had been made in some field of study without outsiders' knowledge and experience. Moreover, those knowledge and experience may useful in some study, but not all advance necessary  need it.      Admittedly, borrowing knowledge and experience from other field of study has indeed make significant advance in many subjects. New scientific fields often emerge in the interaction among different disciplines, biochemistry and molecular biology,for（格式问题，应该在,号后面空一格）example, are undoubtedly the hybrid of diverse subject. The combine of such subject bring them inexhaustible power to new cross-disciplines, which plays more and more crucial roles in our quotidian lives.       More over, differ（different） fields of study is needed to advance by the other realm.Considering（同样格式问题） medicine, it arises on the basis of combination between biology and chemistry, which is support by mechanics  ,material and electronics technology, besides, psychology and medical rely heavily on each other. An even more striking example is ,with the invent of computer，(我觉得这地方写的不错)there will be significantly development in all fields, not only in engineering, but also in literature and economy ,etc. Similarly, it appeals indispensable in human progress that knowledge and experience from various field（fields） should be conditionally and assuredly   combined to further the research of any given field.    However, it is inaccurate for us to over emphasis the importance of the outsiders in the scientific research.。The speaker ignores the contributions coming from the development of a subject itself, which is also a（an） immense power in the development of study. Classical physics, for example ,merely (格式问题) relates to outsiders. Like the occurrences of Newton’s Law of Gravitation and Einstein’s Theory of Relativity , （一样是格式问题）are absolutely hail from the genius’ wisdom, little of which is borrowed from other subjects. The other example is the mathematicians , （格式问题）they make their big achievement by a pen, and a  piece of paper. Did they have to appreciate to the manufacturer of pencil and the printing technology? The factors contributing to an academic subjects' significant growth，may include many apart from sharing the outsiders' intelligence, such as the long-term academic accumulation ,the appropriate social and economic support ,the  geniuses and so on.     Generally speaking, for most study, the knowledge and experience outside that field is quite important which play a signify role（a signify role不是特别明白）,.（格式问题） Other wise, however, with respect to some field，I find the claim to be an unfair generalization.

第一次改作文，不知道该怎么改，可能改的不是很好。请kooyii兄弟多见谅了。
1、格式上面有些小问题。标点后面应该加个空格。
2、觉得论述上能够围绕一个中心展开论述，论点比较明确，举的几个例子也比较合适，但个人感觉例子比较多，但没有深入，没有足够的侧重点，都比较平。是否应该找一个具体例子深入下呢？
3、我觉得你第一次写的已经很不错了。至少比我那个强多了。能围绕一个观点集中论述。大家加油吧！
4、我水平比较差，改的不是很好，希望kooyii兄弟见谅。

kooyiiUID: 2177986

adam改得不错啊~~~呵呵~你的建议很有必要价值
例子的问题确实是一个问题....举得多并且没有侧重点,下次会改进的
格式的是从word弄过来后才产生的吧~
倒数第二句写得很不好,犯了好多错误~我再改改~

谢谢ADAM的修改~~

[ 本帖最后由 kooyii 于 2007-2-1 16:11 编辑 ]

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adam组长,kooyii,我持外卡加入了你们组,我尽快赶上你们的进度.希望你们给我转正啊