Issue51 [四海一家] 第一次作业 谢谢指教

dream191919UID: 2245981

Issue51 "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student." [05/90; 06/7]
只有针对每个学生的需要和兴趣，教育才真正的有意义。



提纲：
1)先评论一下现状，流行观点（题中提到的）
2)下面具体分析：
       1，分析education
       2，分析knowledge（分三个方面：具体科学[社会和自然]；道德修养；艺术感知）
       3，针对知识的不同方面进行对题目观点的分析
3)从实际角度分析
4)从学生自身生角度分析
5)结论要具体问题具体分析，作全面的全衡（这是王道[哈哈！！！]）






When it comes to the hot topic of education, people'opinions are divided. Recently the belief that education is only truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student is becoming a more and more popular thinking. In my view whether this conclution is that correct as majority thought is all counted on the further analysis.

Firet of all, we have to make clear of the conception of education. As we all know, education is a form of method whose function is to make student acquaint to the knowledge and finally master them skillfully. Apparently the form of education plays a most crucial part in the effect of process of learning. Making the education designed to meet the individual needs and interets to some extent makes the learning ploy added more light of creation and provides an access of discovery. Moreover, student will accomplish the craftsmanship, fufil the goals he or she is chasing, master the knowledge more comprehensive.

It is the case that we can never ignore the knowledge, the main body in the course of exchange ideas between student and teacher, in the one particular modality of education. Every single stuff who engages in the course of education will rarely avoid initiate knowledge from three part: basic technology, including the espects of science and sociaty, morality and art. Admittedly, for basic technology, the effect of education especially desiged to each student is remarkable inasmuch as it meet their appetite. On the contrary, this tactic is no longer fit for the education of morality and art. For one thing, morality is composed by severl elements admit by the commonalty, so course of learning morality seems like understanding and accepting it without question and parochial mind, much the way one citizen has the accountablity to obey the sociaty rules and laws. As a result, any variability will ruin the real system of morality knowledgy, especially the education just caters to only one individual. For another, art is pretty much the thing asoccisted with cultrue or accomplishment. It seems that one can only learn and feel this sort of knowledge through his own attempt and experience. After taking above into account, whether this popular thinking aims at improving the effect of education is still in doubt.

Further more, school is still the main place to carry education to execution, and its traditional pattern is to gather group of learners together to carry on the project of teaching. If we give up our founded teaching from and turn to the new pattern of education, there are some critical problems we have to face up to. First, It is really hard to realize and make idiographic plan of education to meet every single student. Second, any plan have to fit the condition at the present time. If we haste to expand this new opinion without pondering the resource of faculties and equipments, I will bet that result will surely make us down. Last but not the end, every coin has two side, we should realize while we are executing the opinion in that topic we also give up the primary merits such as sharing the questions and points of veiw, discussion, communication at the same time.

Finally, not every needs and interests of one learner is fit to offer encouragement. Age, experience and backgroud can be the key factors in the course of shaping one's mind ,attitude and concept of the world. So teacher who carry on the education has great responsibility to recify and cultivate one's needs and interest.

All in all, according to analysis above, the point of view that education is only truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student should be accepted as the case may be. In my view, the actual content of knowledge, present circumstance and real meaning needs of learners should all be taken into account when it comes to the discussion about making our education more effective.




第一次没计时,自己检查了几遍,恭候赐教,万分感谢！！（垮垮拿砖拍吧）thxthxthxthxthxthxthxthxthxthxthxthx

yuzhongwumeiUID: 2155222

When it comes to the hot topic of education, people's opinions are divided (disparate, diverse). Recently the belief that education is only truly effective (truly effective only) when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student is becoming a more and more popular thinking.(这句话怎么这么别扭啊？！改成这样好不好：Recently, it becomes an increasingly popular belief that only through special designing to meet individuals’ interests can education be truly effective.) In my view whether this conclution(conclusion) is that correct as majority thought is all counted on the further analysis. (Whether this assertion is correct, as the majority think, depends on further analysis.)

Firet (first) of all, we have to make clear of (不用of) the conception of education. As we all know, education is a form of method (methods)whose (of which the) function is to make student acquaint (acquainted)to (with) the knowledge and finally master them skillfully. Apparently the form of education plays a most (extremely) crucial part in the effect of (去掉effect of) process of learning. Making the（去掉making the）education designed to meet the individual needs and interest to some extent makes the learning ploy added more light of creation and provides an access of discovery. (Education designed to meet the individual needs and interests, to some extent, endows the learning process more inspiration of creativity and imagination of discoveries)                 Moreover, student will accomplish the craftsmanship, fufil the goals he or she is chasing, master the knowledge more comprehensively.

It is the case that we can never ignore the knowledge, the main body in the course of exchange (exchanging) ideas between students and teachers, in the one(去掉) particular modality of education. Every single stuff who（？） engages in （be engaged in）the course of education will rarely(hardly) avoid initiate knowledge from three parts: basic technology, including the espects(aspects) of science and sociaty(society), morality and art. Admittedly, for basic technology, the effect of education especially desiged(designed) to each student is remarkable inasmuch as it meet their appetite. On the contrary, this tactic is no longer fit for the education of morality and art. For one thing, morality is composed byseverl elements admit by the commonalty, so course of learning morality seems like understanding and accepting it without question and parochial mind,much the way one citizen has the accountablity to obey the sociaty rules and laws. As a result, any variability will ruin the real system of morality knowledgy, especially the education just caters to only one individual. For another, art is pretty much the thing asoccisted with cultrue or accomplishment. It seems that one can only learn and feel this sort of knowledge through his own attempt and experience. After taking above into account, whether this popular thinking aims at improving the effect of education is still in doubt.

Further more, school is still the main place to carry education to execution, and its traditional pattern is to gather group of learners together to carry on the project of teaching. If we give up our founded(established) teaching from(form) and turn to the new pattern of education, there are (will be) some critical (crucial) problems we have to face up to. First, It is really hard to realize and make idiographic plan of education to meet every single(individual) student. Second, any plan have to fit the condition at the present time. If we haste to expand this new opinion without pondering the resource of faculties and equipments, I will bet that result will surely make us down. Last but not the end(least), every coin has two side, we should realize while we are executing the opinion in that topic we also give up the primary merits such as sharing the questions and points of veiw, discussion, communication at the same time.

Finally, not every needs and interests of one learner is fit to offer encouragement. Age, experience and backgroud can be the key factors in the course of shaping one's mind ,attitude and concept of the world. So teachers who carry on the education has(have) great responsibility to recify and cultivate one's needs and interest.

All in all, according to analysis above, the point of view that education is only truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student should be accepted as the case may be. In my view, the actual content of knowledge, present circumstance and real meaning needs of learners should all be taken into account when it comes to the discussion about making our education more effective.

总的来说吧,我觉得楼主是一个很有思想的人, 文章的思路是没有问题的,注重分析,注重逻辑,值得我们学习
但是楼主也要注意语言的运用.我认为, 楼主对抽象名词的使用不到位,实际上,正确使用抽象名词是英语语言运用的极高境界,而楼主却极力把抽象名词具体化,一来很罗嗦,其实能用简洁的语言表达深层次的意思才是高水平的表现 二来根本不必,让人反倒看不懂
而且,楼主有些地方语言过于随意.并且对冠词的使用不正确,
我不是什么行家,就是这么说说,要是有说错的欢迎批评指教的~~~~

[ 本帖最后由 yuzhongwumei 于 2007-2-2 12:19 编辑 ]

huorUID: 2278377

楼主写得很有气势，可惜观点我一上来没看懂。第一个that用得太随意了。

rny82UID: 2293947

“As we all know, education is a form of method whose function is to make student acquaint to the knowledge and finally master them skillfully.”
既然acquaint改成acquainted with了，那么master是不是也改成mastering啊？

rny82UID: 2293947

第三段“ Every single stuff who engages in the course of education will rarely avoid initiate knowledge from three part:”其中avoid doing是不是更好？

dream191919UID: 2245981

非常感谢大家热心帮助，我一定好好总结
再次感谢。

新的一步UID: 2194020

When it comes to the hot topic of education, people' 空格opinions are divided. Recently the belief that education is only truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student is becoming a more and more popular thinking这句话改成 is becoming more and more popular, 感觉更顺. In my view whether this conclutionconclusion is that 这个that的用法我不太懂,如果有把握可以,不然的话as也是可以的correct as majority thought is all counted on the further analysis.

FiretFirst of all, we have to make clear of the conception of education. As we all know, education is a form of method whose function is to make student acquaint to应该是acquaint with 吧 the knowledge and finally master them skillfully. Apparently the form of education plays a most crucial part in the effect of process of learning. Making the education designed to meet the individual needs and interestinterests to some extent makes the learning ploy added more light of creation and provides an access of discovery. Moreover, student will accomplish the craftsmanship, fufilfulfill the goals he or she is chasing, master the knowledge more comprehensively.这一段对于教育概念的理论论述非常不错,作者的长句水平很好啊, 碍于自己水平,有些都没怎么看懂.

It is the case that we can never ignore the knowledge, the main body in the course of exchange ideas between student and teacher, in the one particular modality of education. Every single stuff who engages in the course of education will rarely avoid initiate knowledge from three parts: basic technology, including the espectsaspects of science and society, morality and art. Admittedly, for basic technology, the effect of education especially desigeddesigned to each student is remarkable in as much as it meet their appetite. On the contrary, this tactic is no longer fit for the education of morality and art. For one thing, morality is composed by severlseveral elements admitadmitted by the commonalty, so course of learning morality seems like understanding and accepting it without question and parochial mind, much the way one citizen has the accountability to obey the society rules and laws. As a result, any variability will ruin the real system of morality knowledgyknowledge, especially the education just caters to only one individual. For another, art is pretty much the thing asoccistedassociated with culture or accomplishment. It seems that one can only learn and feel this sort of knowledge through his own attempt and experience. After taking above into account, whether this popular thinking aims at improving the effect of education is still in doubt. 这一段作者主要想表达知识在教育的有效性中所起的作用, 论述总体上是比较好的,只是能用一两个例子来说明就更好了

Further more, school is still the main place to carry education to execution, and its traditional pattern is to gather group of learners together to carry on the project of teaching. If we give up our founded teaching from and turn to the new pattern of education, there are some critical problems we have to face up to. First, It is really hard to realize and make idiographic plan of education to meet every single student. Second, any plans have to fit the condition at the present time. If we haste to expand this new opinion without pondering the resource of faculties and equipments, I will bet that result will surely make us down. Last but not the end, every coin has two side这里两句用得不错, we should realize while we are executing the opinion in that topic we also give up the primary merits such as sharing the questions and points of view, discussion, communication at the same time.我觉得这一段对于新的教育模式的弊端还应该讨论得更多些

Finally, not every needs and interests of one learner is fit to offer encouragement. Age, experience and backgroud background can be the key factors in the course of shaping one's mind, attitude and concept of the world. So teacher who carry on the education has great responsibility to recify rectify and cultivate one's needs and interest.这一段略显单薄,如果能加上点例子就更好了,另外,可以分析一下如果对某些不需要鼓励的兴趣爱好进行鼓励的话可能产生的不良影响

All in all, according to analysis above, the point of view that education is only truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student should be accepted as the case may be. In my view, the actual content of knowledge, present circumstance and real meaning needs of learners should all be taken into account when it comes to the discussion about making our education more effective.这句总结很简练,不错
作者的开头和结尾写的不错,我的就很程式话,这里可以借鉴一下.
理论论述方面没有问题,分析得很透彻,逻辑也比较缜密,只是论据偏少了些.
我水平有限,哪里有说得不对的大家在讨论讨论!