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SkysijieUID: 2233317

字数好像太少了，但是实在是不知道说些什么了。。。辛苦帮我改的同志们了。。。

Issue50 "In order to improve the quality of instruction atthe college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend timeworking outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses theyteach."
为了改善大学的教学质量，所有的教员都应该被要求花一定时间到学术领域以外去参加和他们所教科目相关的工作。

1.      承认教员到学术领域以外去参加与专业相关的工作是能够提高大学的教学质量的
2.      但是，并不是教员参加学术领域以外的活动才能提高教学质量
3.      而且，并不需要所有的教员都要参加

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How to improve the quality of instruction at the college anduniversity level is still an issue in education area. I don’t agree with thestatement that all faculty should be demanded to take time working outside theacademic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, however.

I consent the quality of instruction will be raised up through thework instructors participate outside the academic area. Understandably, he willhave strongly objective, which acknowledge students have to learn and what isthe latest technology nowadays, during his teaching, if the computer teachertake part in the Microsoft campaign. Or he probably meet more learned person,who can provide chance to students to have exercitation in the firm or to givea course of lectures to students, in the academic world. It is a good way,require faculty to work outside the academic world, to improve the quality ofinstruction.

But many people, including myself, are disbelieving that workingoutside the academic area is the only effective way to improve the teachingquality. Perhaps the instructors can spend more time attending the dissertationin the worldwide, which have the same effect compared with working outside theacademic world. Or perhaps universities or colleges organize meeting that specialisticinstructors have to participate to discussing how to improve the quality ofteaching relevant the courses. Consequently, working outside the academic areais not the exclusive method to improve the quality.

Furthermore, I don’t think every faculty has to working outsideschool. Firstly, the teacher who teach basis of mathematics, physics andchemistry, which is verity for hundred years, have no need to find job outschool. Secondly, if an instructor who instructs theoretics shouldn’t workingoutside, which will distract from his research or his teaching. In a word,demand all teachers to find a job outside school is not a wise choose.

To sum up , require all faculty to working outside the academicworld in professions relevant to the courses they teach is not the best decideand not the best way to improve the quality of instruction.

lourryUID: 2157624

呵呵，这个我来改改吧~~

duduhahaUID: 2273118

How to improve the quality of instruction at the college anduniversity level is still an issue in education area. I don’t agree with thestatement that all faculty should be demanded to take time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, however.

I consent(consent是不及物动词，应该加to或当名词用？） the quality of instruction will be raised up through thework instructors participate outside the academic area. Understandably, he willhave strongly objective, which acknowledge students have to learn and what isthe latest technology nowadays（不知道啥意思？）, during his teaching, if the computer teachertake part in the Microsoft campaign. Or he probably meet more learned person,who can provide chance to students to have exercitation in the firm or to givea course of lectures to students, in the academic world. It is a good way,(to?)require faculty to work outside the academic world, to improve the quality ofinstruction.

But many people, including myself, are disbelieving that workingoutside the academic area is the only effective way to improve the teachingquality. Perhaps the instructors can spend more time attending the dissertationin the worldwide, which have the same effect compared with working outside theacademic world. Or perhaps universities or colleges organize meeting that specialisticinstructors have to participate to discussing how to improve the quality ofteaching relevant the courses. Consequently, working outside the academic area is not the exclusive method to improve the quality.

Furthermore, I don’t think every faculty has to working（work) outside school. Firstly, the teacher who teach basis of mathematics, physics andchemistry, which is verity for hundred years, have(前面是单数的teacher) no need to find job outschool. Secondly, if an instructor who instructs theoretics shouldn’t working outside, which will distract(distract是及物动词） from his research or his teaching. In a word,demand（demanding) all teachers to find a job outside school is not a wise choose.
可以再讲讲老师出去工作可能的坏处。

To sum up , require all faculty to working outside the academicworld in professions relevant to the courses they teach is not the best decide(?) and not the best way to improve the quality of instruction.

看得出，你这篇文章展开得还不够，不妨看看网上的文章来找找论证资料。

lourryUID: 2157624

How to improve the quality of instruction at the college anduniversity level is still an issue in education area. I don’t agree with thestatement that all faculty should be demanded to take time working outside theacademic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, however.（however用这感觉怪怪的呵，虽然它可以做副词，但是没见这么用的呵，而且，这句和前一句的转折关系实在是有点弱呵）

I consent the quality of instruction will be raised up through thework instructors participate （in）outside the academic area. Understandably, he willhave strongly objective, which acknowledge students have to learn and what isthe latest technology nowadays, during his teaching, if the computer teachertake part in the Microsoft campaign. （这句话看不太懂呵）Or he probably meet （a）more learned person,who can provide chance to students to have exercitation in the firm or to givea course of lectures to students, (不用，)in the academic world. It is a good way,require（requiring） faculty to work outside the academic world, to improve the quality ofinstruction.（感觉你是想学插入语的用法呵，不过你用的不是很合适呵~）

But many people, including myself, are disbelieving that workingoutside the academic area is the only effective way to improve the teachingquality. Perhaps the instructors can spend more time attending the dissertationin the worldwide, which have the same effect compared with working outside theacademic world. Or perhaps universities or colleges organize meeting that specialisticinstructors have to participate to discussing how to improve the quality ofteaching relevant the courses. Consequently, working outside the academic areais not the exclusive method to improve the quality.（感觉你是想用argument 的思路来写issue呵，这两个一个立论一个驳论，不一样的呵~）

Furthermore, I don’t think every faculty has to working （work）outsideschool. Firstly, the teacher who teach（teaches） basis of mathematics, physics andchemistry, which is verity for hundred years, have no need to find job outschool. Secondly, if an instructor who instructs theoretics shouldn’t workingoutside, which will distract from his research or his teaching. In a word,demand(ing) all teachers to find a job outside school is not a wise choose.

To sum up , require(ing) all faculty to working(work)outside the academicworld in professions relevant to the courses they teach is not the best decide(decision)and not the best way to improve the quality of instruction.
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建议多看点范文先模仿一下呵~~另外，注意语法问题呵，特别是词性。还有语言也要加强呵~
skysijie加油呵！~~~

SkysijieUID: 2233317

今天实在是不行了，明天来改改。谢谢同志们的指点;) :handshake

jw84UID: 2283839

How to improve the quality of instruction at the college anduniversity level is still an issue in education area. I don’t agree with the　statement that all faculty should be demanded to take time working outside theacademic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, however.

I consent the quality of instruction will be raised up through the work instructors participate outside the academic area. Understandably, he willhave strongly objective, which acknowledge students have to learn and what isthe latest technology nowadays, during his teaching, if the computer teachertake part in the Microsoft campaign（呵呵，又是micorosoft:) ) . Or he probably meet more learned person,who can provide chance to students to have exercitation(感觉表达可以更简洁一些） in the firm or to givea course of lectures to students, in the academic world. It is a good way,require（语法有点问题） faculty to work outside the academic world, to improve the quality ofinstruction.

But many people, including myself（可以不要这句）, are disbelieving that workingoutside the academic area is the only effective way to improve the teachingquality. Perhaps the instructors can spend more time attending the dissertationin the worldwide, which have the same effect compared with working outside theacademic world. Or perhaps universities or colleges organize meeting that specialisticinstructors have to participate to discussing how to improve the quality ofteaching relevant the courses. Consequently, working outside the academic areais not the exclusive method to improve the quality.这段思路挺好的

Furthermore, I don’t think（有点口语化） every faculty has to working outsideschool. Firstly, the teacher who teach basis of mathematics, physics andchemistry, which is verity for hundred years, have no need to find job outschool. Secondly, if an instructor who instructs theoretics shouldn’t workingoutside, which will distract from his research or his teaching. In a word,demand（demanding) all teachers to find a job outside school is not a wise choose.

To sum up , require all faculty to working outside the academicworld in professions relevant to the courses they teach is not the best decideand not the best way to improve the quality of instruction.

每段要论证的观点很明确。分析的力度和深度再加大一些就更好了
语法还是有些小问题

elliexiaUID: 2142462

Nowadays, more and more complaints from college students were noticed by people. Students complain that they cannot employ what they learned in college and university for the real and practical application of working. They even say that they cannot really learn something useful and helpful in college and university. Some people think that is because of the low quality of instruction at college and university level, therefore they encourage all the faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the course teacher teach in order to improve the quality of instruction. Can this approach guarantee and ensure the improvement of instruction? I would argue that it may be not always a wise decision and measure to essentially help students improve their academic performance as well as the quality of instruction.

There is no deny that college and university are built up for the development of society and the dissemination of civilization as well. The courses designed in college and university are not all required by the applied job market, while some of them simply focus on the academic and theoritical researches aiming at improving the spiritual and emotional level and development of human's society. Take history for example, we can seldom find the approapriate applied jobs about history, which cannot produce the direct productivity in the materialistic world. But we cannot deny its importance in society' development. Therefore, all faculty teaching history will find no professions relevant to the historical research. These faculties need simply research and investigate various historical materials and documents so as to summarize their thoughts and restore the original history image before the public. Their opinions may guide and mentor the proper developmental path for the whole society. There are also other subjects, such as philosophy, religion and language, all of which provide the spiritual support for the advancement and enhancement of whole society, cannot find the specific professions outside the academic world. Thus, requiring all faculty to spend time working outside may be not a realistic approach.

In addition, the purpose of education of college and university level is not simply produce technicians, architectors and engineers, but great thinkers, researchers and philosophers. Teachers' primary task is to cultivate students' critical and logical ability and should focus on the teaching task. All faculty taking the professions outside the academic world will ultimately dilute the quality of academic experience and progress. For my experience, it hardly exist. The major task for faculties is to promote the instructional level in order to cultivate more talents for society. The result of spending too much time working outside college and university maybe naturally oppose to the initial educational purpose and task. Working outside will possibly distract teachers from the normal teaching process and procedure. As we all know that the teaching loads in college and university are rather heavy, and teachers are in need of giving lessons, supervising students, completing the academic paper, essays and attending colloquiums and discourese. Working outside not only are detrimental for their own teaching and research work, but also detaches the attention and energy of teahcers. Besides that, some of teachers may find that working outside is another effective way to accumulate wealth, which may lead to disatrous consequence for the academic improvement and atmosphere. Further, it also may begender the disorder and difficulties in management of faculties for administrators, which will finally lead to the deterioration of students' academic performances and the quality of instruction.

Admittedly, there are definitely some subjects closely related to the applied job markets which requires graduates master both theoritical and practical knowledge. For instance, law and business, some distinguished professors and scholars are experienced and from the professions relevant to the course they teach. Some colleges and universities invite the successful businessmen and lawyers or judges to give lessons to their students and entitle them in order to give speeches and share the latest information and first-hand cases for their students regularly. This method really works in helping students update the students' knowledge structure. Consequently, the faculties teaching the courses that are more liable to the market and application may possibly spend some time working outside the academic world to experience the real and practical market in order to refresh and exchange their thoughts with the people in those applied fields. To remain their research and academic achievement cutting the edge, it is necessry for some of the faculty to spend some time working outside college and university. However, this action of working outside must be monitored by executive administrations. Provided that the limitation does not  have a negative impact on teaching task and academic atmosphere.

We should always bear in mind that the major educational purpose of college and university, which develop and cultivate critical, logical and emotional talents, instead of souless, feckless and efficient laborers. The real improvement of instructional level is to help students think for themselves and form their own original creativity. To improve the instructional level at college and university, teachers should pay much attention to the basic knowledge and research, dedicate to seeking the original and interesting teaching approaches and provide students more beneficial thinking power. Requiring all faculty can possibly undermine the quality of instruction. And, of course, some faculty are necessarily required to familiarize themselves with practical knowldge.  As long as they can keep themselves within the boundary of not affecting the normal teaching tasks, this approach may work in some extend. College and university can possibly set rules to manage and monitor it.