issue131 【自由女神小组第十次作业】

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131 "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
艺术（绘画、音乐、文学等）展现了那些隐藏的观点和社会的脉动。
Position: agree
The arts reveal the inner world of the human beings.
a.       The arts which the great treasure of human beings reveal the some hidden ideas.\\give the beauty, the Mona Lisa. \\ paint of some famous painter Picasso.
b.       At the same time the arts also represent the impulses of  society.\\ a novel of American reveals the impulses of society.
c.       Although the art act in hidden ways, we should pay more attention on art.
Conclusion: to sum up, arts play crucial roles in the society, while we should place the same emphasis on the art.

题目：ISSUE131 - "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
字数：439          用时：0:44:27          日期：2007-2-1

Nowadays, there is a controversy over the issue of function of arts in our society. While some people claim that the arts just depend the whole trend of society. Others, on the other hand, assert that arts reveal the inner world of human beings and impulses of a society.

In the first place, the arts, one of the most important treasure of human beings, give the beauty  and reveal the inner world of the our society . Take the famous canvas Mona Lisa for example, which depicts a lady smiling but flowing sadness from her eyes, let people know the complexity of the human's sprits world. Another example is the fresco in canvas in China, primitive art words, though bold but a slightly rough, obvious recur to the audience about the vivid picture at that time. It might be true in that age the institution of artistry predates that of criticisms. Therefore it is quite natural to find few formal critics offering help for current understanding the culture of the time and reveal the inner world of the people of that time.

In the second place, the arts also reflect major ideal which are impulses of a society. After all, most art works that can be passed by one generation to the other are the most representative ones in a certain age. "Gone with wind", which is a world famous novel on the war between the state in American, reflects the major ideas which are held by the most people at that time, and these ideas are just the impulses of society which affects the society and shape it as what we see today in the historical books.


In addition, although the arts act in hidden ways, we should pay more attention on the arts. with the existence of arts, we not only can reveal out hidden ideas and impulses but also indirectly do well to the stable and healthy develop of our society. To administrators, it is axiomatic for them to know and understand how people think, what will people say, which is the direct bridge to keep good and close relation ships between them and people. After that, they will make a good and right decision that people agree and courage.

To sum up, the conceal thoughts of people and impulses of our society are manifest by the arts, and the arts reveal the thing that we do not express. Therefore, we claim that the arts play crucial role in our society, we should place the same emphasis as well as the technology. Only in this way we will have a bright future and an stable society.

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Nowadays, there is a controversy over the issue of function of arts in our society. While some people claim that the arts just depend(depends) the whole trend of society. Others, on the other hand, assert that arts reveal the inner world of human beings and impulses of a society.
[开头只是给出了存在的两种观点，但是自己到底是什么观点呢？还是明确说出来的好。]

In the first place, the arts, one of the most important treasure of human beings, give the beauty  and reveal the inner world of the our society . Take the famous canvas Mona Lisa for example, which depicts a lady smiling but flowing sadness from her eyes, let people know the complexity of the human's sprits(spirits) world. Another example is the fresco in canvas(这个是什么意思？) in China, primitive art words, though bold but a slightly rough, obvious recur to the audience about the vivid picture at that time. It might be true in that age the institution of artistry predates that of criticisms. Therefore it is quite natural to find few formal critics offering help for current understanding the culture of the time and reveal the inner world of the people of that time.
[前面部分还不错。后面几句话好像有问题。为什么又提critics呢？和本文的论点无关吧？]

In the second place, the arts also reflect major ideal which are impulses of a society. After all, most art works that can be passed by one generation to the other are the most representative ones in a certain age. "Gone with(the) wind", which is a world famous novel (on the Civil War)on the war between the state in American, reflects the major ideas which are held by the most people at that time, and these ideas are just the impulses of society which affects the society and shape it as what we see today in the historical books.
[该段没有什么问题]

In addition, although the arts act in hidden ways, we should pay more attention on the arts. With the existence of arts, we not only can reveal out(去掉) hidden ideas and impulses but also indirectly do well to the stable and healthy develop of our society. To administrators, it is axiomatic for them to know and understand how people think, what will people say, which is the direct bridge to keep good and close relation ships between them and people. After that, they will make a good and right decision that people agree and courage.
[这段有跑题之嫌，用“应该”去证“。。。是。。。”这样恐怕不行。]

To sum up, the conceal thoughts of people and impulses of our society are manifest by the arts, and the arts reveal the thing that we do not express(后半句有语病，揭示那些不能表达的东西？). Therefore, we claim that the arts play crucial role in our society,(两个句子之间一定要有连接词或分号) we should place the same emphasis as well as the technology. Only in this way we will have a bright future and an(a) stable society.
[整个文章语言表达上没有什么大问题了，逻辑论证方面可能还需要再推敲推敲。]