ARGUMENT137 米国有米寒假1号第六次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT137 - The following appeared in an editorial in the Mason City newspaper.

"At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby MasonRiver for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up MasonRiver. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the MasonRiver."
WORDS: 439          TIME: 0:35:33          DATE: 2007-1-5

Outline：
1，             水质不一定是人们不去Mason River（MR）玩的原因
2，             没有证据证明水质清理计划实施以后，人们会在娱乐方面增加使用MR
3，             即使人们增加使用MR，也不一定要增加经费

In the editorial, a recommendation emerges that the Mason City council should increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the MasonRiver. The suggestion is drown from the following reasoning: (1) the residents in the region consistently rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation, but they seldom use the nearby Mason River for ant kind of recreational activity; (2) there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river; (3) plans to clean up the Mason River have been announced. Though the reasoning seems to be plausible, it is not indefensible in three aspects.

Firstly, the complaints about the quality of the water in the river do not necessarily suggest that water quality is the reason of the seldom use of Mason river for recreational purpose. The complaints about water quality in the MasonRiver do not rule out that other reasons for the low use of the river for recreational purpose. At some interval of the river might be of low water quality, however, there can be other areas of the river are of adequate water quality of recreational use. In addition, people may complain the water quality for reasons rather than recreational, such as water drinking.

Secondly, there is insufficient evidence suggests that after the plans of cleaning up MasonRiver are carried out, the recreational use of the river should increase. Even though plans will work to improve the water quality in MasonRiver, people may still not go the MasonRiver for swimming, fishing and so on. There can be other rivers or seacoast nearby the region that they are of superior value for recreational purposes, such as safer environment, richer fish stock, or nicer landscape.

Finally, even if in the case that the recreational use of MasonRiver increases, it does not mean that the council needs to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the river. There is not evidence provided suggest that the facilities in the publicly owned lands along the MasonRiver are only satisfying the current recreational use of the river. In the case that the facilities there are under used currently, then there is no need to increase budget to improve them.

In sum, due to logical defects mentioned above, I believe that the recreational usage of the MasonRiver after the cleaning up is still uncertain. Therefore, it is inadvisable to draw a conclusion about the budget raise, given the limited information on hands. More geographic information along with detail survey about the reluctance in using MasonRiver for recreation is desired for a sophisticated advice.

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT137 - The following appeared in an editorial in the Mason City newspaper.

"At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby MasonRiver for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up MasonRiver. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the MasonRiver."
WORDS: 439          TIME: 0:35:33          DATE: 2007-1-5

Outline：
1，             水质不一定是人们不去Mason River（MR）玩的原因
2，             没有证据证明水质清理计划实施以后，人们会在娱乐方面增加使用MR
3，             即使人们增加使用MR，也不一定要增加经费

In the editorial, a recommendation emerges that the Mason City council should increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the MasonRiver. The suggestion is drown from the following reasoning: (1) the residents in the region consistently rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation, but they seldom use the nearby Mason River for ant kind of recreational activity; (2) there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river; (3) plans to clean up the Mason River have been announced. Though the reasoning seems to be plausible, it is not indefensible in three aspects.开头稍微长了点，对题目的复述可以再简要点

Firstly, the complaints about the quality of the water in the river do not necessarily suggest that water quality is the reason of the seldom use of Mason river for recreational purpose. The complaints about water quality in the MasonRiver do not rule out that other reasons for the low use of the river for recreational purpose. At some interval of the river might be of low water quality, however, there can be other areas of the river are of adequate water quality of recreational use. In addition, people may complain the water quality for reasons rather than recreational, such as water drinking这段论证不够深入，.

Secondly, there is insufficient evidence suggests that after the plans of cleaning up MasonRiver are carried out, the recreational use of the river should increase. Even though plans will work to improve the water quality in MasonRiver, people may still not go the MasonRiver for swimming, fishing and so on. There can be other rivers or seacoast nearby the region that they are of superior value for recreational purposes, such as safer environment, richer fish stock, or nicer landscape.这段的论证比上段好，但还需要再深入一些

Finally, even if in the case that the recreational use of MasonRiver increases, it does not mean that the council needs to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the river. There is not evidence provided suggest that the facilities in the publicly owned lands along the MasonRiver are only satisfying the current recreational use of the river. In the case that the facilities there are under used currently, then there is no need to increase budget to improve them.这段要好些

In sum, due to logical defects mentioned above, I believe that the recreational usage of the MasonRiver after the cleaning up is still uncertain. Therefore, it is inadvisable to draw a conclusion about the budget raise, given the limited information on hands. More geographic information along with detail survey about the reluctance in using MasonRiver for recreation is desired for a sophisticated advice.
总得来说我认为作者应该加强论证的深入性，和表述的流畅性