Issue11 【Persistence小组】第3次作业

Andy85UID: 2250503

I11"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving
the world's most persistent social problems." 所有的国家都应该协助建立全球性的大学，用来培养学生来解决世界上最顽固的社会问题。

my position: agree
A many of the most persistent social problems that exist in all over the world cannot be solved by only one nation.
B a global university can serve to help those young people who will lead their nations soon to comminucate and understand
each other, and then come to learn how to cooperate with others.
C Of course many problems about the establishment of the global university need solving

正文：
Nowadays there is a growing concern over whether all nations should help establish a global university in order to engage students
in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. In my opinion, although the establishment of a global university
will bring mass of problems in its construction, it will be meaningful for the world and all the nations included in the long run.

On the one hand, many of the world's social problems that are difficult to get rid of exist not merely in one nation, and also
cannot be solved by the effort of the one nation only. A case in point is the pollution of air. When the air of one area in the
world has been contaminated, the pollutant in the polluted air transfers to the rest of the world because that air is a kind of
liquid which has an attribution of liquidity. Then it is unreasonable for us to expect that the country that contaminates the air
take measures to improve its air condition will eliminate the problem of air pollution thoroughly.

On the other hand, the establishment of a global university in which students from all nations on the surface of earth can study
and communicate with others would serve at a large sense to enhance the communication between different nations and cultures.
If those young students who will be a new generation of leaders and citizens of their nation obtain a better understanding of the
cultures, social system and values of other nations, it would be much easy for them to cooperate and reach a common ground and
reasonable consensus.

Finally, we have to admit that there are still many problems about the pragmatic procedures of the establishment of the global
university, such the location of the university, the curriculums that the students are going to take, the language that will be used
in the university. However, such problems will not serve as so untoward an obstacle that we have to give up the idea of encouraging
all nations to support the development of the global university that will benefit the entire world significantly and lastingly.

In conclusion, while some people may still remain unconvinced, the reason that I have analyzed above should at least make them
aware of the complexity of the issue under discussion, and more people will come to realize that the benefit of a global university
is far more overwhelming than the cost and effort it takes.
还是400多字，崩溃啊！

小驴子UID: 2222683

Nowadays there is a growing concern over whether all nations should help establish a global university in order to engage students
in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. In my opinion, although the establishment of a global university
will bring mass of problems in（during） its construction, it will be meaningful for the world and all the nations included in the long run.
大部分人都会采用否定或中立的态度进行这篇文章开篇采用肯定的态度非常新颖

On the one hand, many of the world's social problems that are difficult to get rid of exist not merely in one nation, and also
cannot be solved by the effort of the one nation only. A case in point is the pollution of air. When the air of one area in the
world has been contaminated, the pollutant in the polluted air（感觉稍微有点重复可否改为in it） transfers to the rest of the world because that air is a kind of liquid（液态 air好像是气态的吧gaseous） which has an attribution of liquidity. Then it is unreasonable for us to expect that the country that contaminates the air take measures to improve its air condition will eliminate the problem of air pollution thoroughly. 整个段落采取了举例的方法很明了但是如果多一些支持性的语句将更出彩

On the other hand, the establishment of a global university in which students from all nations on the surface of earth（on the surface of the earth 这个不恰当 on the earth即可） can study and communicate with others would serve at a large sense to enhance the communication between different nations and cultures. If those young students who will be a new generation of leaders and citizens of their nation obtain a better understanding of the cultures, social systems and values of other nations, it would be much easy for them to cooperate and reach a common ground and reasonable consensus.（几乎没有语病支持句运用较好）

Finally, we have to admit that there are still many problems about the pragmatic procedures of the establishment of the global
university, such the location of the university, the curriculums that the students are going to take, the language that will be used
in the university. However, such problems will not serve as so untoward an obstacle that we have to give up the idea of encouraging
all nations to support the development of the global university that will benefit the entire world significantly and lastingly.（让步写法是文章更加完整和客观）

In conclusion, while some people may still remain unconvinced, the reason that I have analyzed above should at least make them
aware of the complexity of the issue under discussion, and more people will come to realize that the benefit of a global university
is far more overwhelming than the cost and effort it takes.
文章思路非常清晰很流畅而且观点很新在末尾让步结构很好
但是简单句较多感觉整体较分散如果多加连接词＆变换句式将是一篇很出色的文章
加油！