issue51【076G－背水一战小组】第四小组skysijie第二次作业 求拍

SkysijieUID: 2233317

Issue51  "Education will be truly effective onlywhen it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests ofeach student."
只有针对每个学生的需要和兴趣，教育才真正的有意义。


1．               承认兴趣在教育过程中很重要
2．              但是，如果一味的强调学生的兴趣也是不好的，一定要有老师的指导  
3．              况且，教育不可能满足每个学生

WORDS:543
Education, broadlydefined as the transmittal to one only the accumulated knowledge of the racebut also the accumulated experience of social living. I questioned whether one’sinterest can guide he\she to complete education perfectly? I have suspicionabout the assertion that unless to address each students’ needs and interests,education have no truly effective.

I agree with the Einstein’ssaying “One’s interesting is his\her best instructor.” A steadfast belief,interest is the most essential factor of education, was occurred for thousandsof years. A reality we have to do with our awareness that we are individual,with different character, ideology, habitat and fancy. Student will displaytheir unique advantages, as long as educators pay more attention to students’interest, which will contribute society in variety fields.  On the contrast, there are some disadvantagesobviously basis on the assumptionthat educationignores students’ interest. Firstly, educators are using the same teachingmethod to all of students, whose particular strong suit will be neglected.Probably, our society may be retarded without an contributor in a specialismsuch as Einstein、Newton、Columbus.Secondly, the process of learning may become students’ burden in case of theyhave no interest on the courses what they have to learn. Many people, myselfincluded, are querying the effect that basis on the situation that students arecompelled to study. Perhaps, young students may skip classes. Or perhaps, theydon’t study the subject hardly and even hate the teacher who teaches thesubject they have no interesting. In a word, interest is significant ineducation, which guide student to learn, to get together.

However, emphasizethe interest of students merely without the guidance of educator, students canhardly obtain a satisfying result. Though primary and secondary students haveinterests in any area, they have no aimless and the process of their learningis not systematic without any instructions. Set myself as an example: whenstudied in high school, I had interesting in archaeology, which promote me toread numerous magazines and newspapers have relevant to it, and looking for thevestiges that left by ancestors. Unfortunately, I was just look for theinformation about archaeology till now, without any experiences to research itdue to have any no guidance. Students cannot learn well in the subject whichthey are interested in, let alone students have no interesting in the basicsubject, such as mathematics, chemistry, geography and physics, even withoutthe guidance of instructors. Besides, he\ she have difficult to associate withan evil person. Partly because he\she merely pay attention to what he\sheinterested in. The result probably make the student separates from society.

Furthermore,education is helluva to satisfy every student’s interest. Firstly, theresources of education are insufficient. Society doesn’t have abundant teachers,textbooks, practical factory, laboratory and library to address each student’sfancy and interest. Secondly, school will in turmoil due to the situation that eachstudent have a specialties curriculum schedule, and have to employ teachers invariety professional fields. In short, it will a complex circs if the school isattempting to address the interest of each students.

To sum up, Idisagree with the proposal that education should satisfy the needs andinterests of each student to make education more effective.

[ 本帖最后由 Skysijie 于 2007-2-3 21:32 编辑 ]

muerghqUID: 2272725

Issue51  "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
只有针对每个学生的需要和兴趣，教育才真正的有意义。

1．承认兴趣在教育过程中很重要
2．但是，如果一味的强调学生的兴趣也是不好的，一定要有老师的指导  
3．况且，教育不可能满足每个学生
WORDS:543
Education, broadly defined as the transmittal to one only（应该是not only吧？呵呵，笔误） the accumulated knowledge of the race but also the accumulated experience of social living. I questioned whether one’s interest can guide he\she to complete education perfectly? I have suspicion about the assertion that unless to address each students’ needs and interests, education have no truly effective.
I agree with the（the多余了） Einstein’s saying “One’s interesting is his\her best instructor.” A steadfast belief, interest is the most essential factor of education, was occurred for thousands of years. A reality we have to do with our awareness that we are individual,（这句缺谓语，这句话是不是要表达“我们必须意识到一个现实……“但英语里是这么说吗？感觉怪怪的，你自己求证一下） with different character, ideology, habitat and fancy. Student will display their unique advantages, as long as educators pay more attention to students’ interest, which will contribute society in variety fields. （这句感觉是在凑上句子，最后的which是修饰谁的?有歧义） On the contrast, there are some disadvantages obviously basis on the assumption that education ignores students’ interest. Firstly, educators are using the same teaching method to all of students, （all the students）whose particular strong suit will be neglected. （suits are neglected）Probably, our society may be retarded without an contributor in a specialism such as Einstein、Newton、Columbus. Secondly, the process of learning may become students’ burden in case of they have no interest on(in) the courses what they have to learn. Many people, myself included, （include me）are querying the effect that basis on the situation that students are compelled to study. Perhaps, young students may skip classes. Or perhaps, they don’t study the subject hardly and even hate the teacher who teaches the subject they have no interesting（interesting是有趣的意思，这里应该是have no interest in）. In a word, interest is significant in education, which guide student to learn, to get together.（这里的get together什么意思？？）
However, emphasize the interest of students merely without the guidance of educator, students can hardly obtain a satisfying result. Though primary and secondary students have interests in any area, they have no aimless（they are aimless或者they have no aim） and the process of their learning is not systematic without any instructions. Set myself as an example: when studied in high school, I had interesting in archaeology, which promote me to read numerous magazines and newspapers have（不用加have） relevant to it, and looking for the vestiges that left by ancestors. Unfortunately, I was just look for the information about archaeology till now, without any experiences to research it due to have any（不用加any，而且这里直接due to no guidance是不是更好） no guidance. Students cannot learn well in the subject which they are interested in, let alone students have no interesting in the basic subject, such as mathematics, chemistry, geography and physics, even（这里的even是干什么的？？应该去除吧） without the guidance of instructors. Besides, he\ she have difficult to associate with an evil person. Partly because he\she merely pay attention to what he\she interested in. The result probably make the student separates from society.（从Besides到本段结尾这几句没看懂，是要表达学生可能变坏吗？）
Furthermore, （However，这段跟上段形成转折关系）education is helluva to satisfy every student’s interest. Firstly, the resources of education are insufficient. Society doesn’t have abundant teachers, textbooks, practical factory, laboratory and library to address each student’s fancy and interest. Secondly, school will in turmoil due to the situation that each student have a specialties curriculum schedule, and have to employ teachers in variety professional fields. In short, it will a complex circs if the school is attempting to address the interest of each students.
To sum up, I disagree with the proposal that education should satisfy the needs and interests of each student to make education more effective.（结尾太简短了吧:））
总结：
词与词之间漏了很多空格
总体结构可以，论证过程中缺乏有利的论据，一直在说理，应该怎么怎么样，而没有提供论据，所以给人一种肤浅的感觉
段内各句的承接做的不错，很紧凑，值得肯定^_^
最后一段太简短了

总体感觉不错，加油^_^

jw84UID: 2283839

Education, broadly　defined as the transmittal to one(not) only the accumulated knowledge of the race but also the accumulated experience of social living. I questioned whether one’s interest can guide he\she to complete education perfectly? I have suspicion about the assertion that unless to address each students’ needs and interests,education have no truly effective. (直接了当的说你的观点，好一点）

I agree with the Einstein’ssaying “One’s interesting is his\her best instructor.” A steadfast belief,interest is the most essential factor of education, was occurred for thousandsof years. A reality we have to do with our awareness that we are individual,with different character, ideology, habitat and fancy（缺谓语，表达欠妥）. Student will display their unique advantages, as long as educators pay more attention to students’interest, which（指代什么？） will contribute society in variety fields.  On the contrast, there are some disadvantages obviously basis on（短语的用法对吗?) the assumption that education ignores students’ interest. Firstly, educators are using the same teaching method to all of students, whose particular strong suit will be neglected.Probably, our society may be retarded without an contributor in a specialismsuch as Einstein、Newton、Columbus.Secondly, the process of learning may become students’ burden in case of theyhave no interest on the courses what they have to learn. Many people, myselfincluded, are querying the effect that basis on the situation that students arecompelled to study. Perhaps, young students may skip classes. Or perhaps, theydon’t study the subject hardly and even hate the teacher who teaches thesubject they have no interesting.(可以另起一段写，因为这几句集中在讲忽视兴趣会带来的后果，而不是直接在讲兴趣的总要性了） In a word, interest is significant ineducation, which guide student to learn, to get together.

However, emphasize the interest of students merely without the guidance of educator, students can hardly obtain a satisfying result. Though primary and secondary students have interests in any area, they have no aimless and the process of their learningis not systematic without any instructions. Set myself as an example: when studied in high school, I had interesting in archaeology, which promotes me toread numerous magazines and newspapers have relevant to it, and looking for the vestiges that left by ancestors. Unfortunately, I was just look for the information about archaeology till now, without any experiences to research it due to have any no guidance. Students cannot learn well in the subject which they are interested in, let alone students have no interesting in the basic subject（没有怎么看懂）, such as mathematics, chemistry, geography and physics, even without the guidance of instructors. Besides, he\ she have difficult to associate withan evil person. Partly because he\she merely pay attention to what he\sheinterested in. The result probably make the student separates from society.

Furthermore,education is helluva to satisfy every student’s interest. Firstly, there sources of education are insufficient. Society doesn’t have abundant teachers,textbooks, practical factory, laboratory and library to address each student’sfancy and interest. Secondly, school will in turmoil due to the situation that eachstudent have a specialties curriculum schedule, and have to employ teachers invariety professional fields. In short, it will a complex circs if the school isattempting to address the interest of each students.

To sum up, Idisagree with the proposal that education should satisfy the needs andinterests of each student to make education more effective.

没记错的话 这是你字数最多的一篇文章了吧 呵呵 不错
有些语句表达的不够清楚，中文表达的遗迹尚存，呵呵 大家的通病 以后多注意
接着加油！！