Argument2 graduate06--Hamming组 自己的模考Argument第1篇

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."

WORDS: 400          TIME: 28:00          DATE: 2007-2-5

我自己改了错字，红色的是错字，绿色的是他因方便看；

Restrictions

The conclusion of the argument that they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting so as to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres seems an apparent conclusion at first glance. However, careful scrutiny the evidence and the line of reasoning reveal that the author provides no firm support to the conclusion.

To begin with, the precondition of the argument is that the homeowners in nearby Brookvile community implemented the set of restrictions. Without such evidence, it is entirely possible that the residents have not implemented the set of regulations. If so, any reasoning on the basis of it is untenable.

有没有好的他因建议！！！？？？

//Implement 过去式和过去分词是相同的；

Secondly, even if the residents applied the regulations, another problem of the argument is that the author assumes the set of restrictions were responsible for the raise of Brookvile community's average property values. However, without enough evidence it is equally possible that there were others reasons led to the raise of property values in Brookvile community. Perhaps, as a large number of empleyees came to the city for finding jobs, the property values increased greatly. Or perhaps, the supply of houses in Brookvile community reduced in the past, so the price of the houses increased. Without examining and ruling out such cases, the author cannot convince me the conclusion is persuasive.

//led: lead的过去式和过去分词

Even if the author can substantiate the cause-and-effect relationship above, the author also assumes that if Deerhaven Acres adopted the same method, they will raise their property values as expected. First, the author fails to take into account the inherent differences between the potential home-buyers in Deerhaven Acres and the ones in Brookvile community. Perhaps, the consumers of Brookvile community pay much attention to the houses' out faces (exterior appearance), and the consumers of Deerhaven Acres pay much attention to the location, house size and quality of houses. If so, the regulations will useless in Deerhaven Acres. Secondly, even if the potential home-buyers in Deerhaven Acres are same as the ones in Brookvile community, perhaps, the economic situation of Deerhaven Acres is very bad, many potential home-buyers have not enough money, in this case, the regulations will not work as well.

//房屋的外表：home’s exterior appearance ;易错

In sum, the argument, although it seems logical at first, has several fallacies as discussed above. To strengthen it the author needs to provide that whether or not the residents of Brookvile community had implemented the regulations. We also need to know the differences between the two cities.

liquidshileUID: 2254332

TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.
"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."


The conclusion of the argument that they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting so as to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres seems an apparent conclusion at first glance. However, careful scrutiny the evidence and the line of reasoning reveal that the author provides no firm support to the conclusion.
To begin with, the precondition of the argument is that the homeowners in nearby Brookvile community implemented the set of restrictions. Without such evidence, it is entirely possible that the residents have not implemented the set of regulations.实在想不出可以把这丰富一下，大多数人因为不愿自己花钱都保持了原来的风格。也可能这里很多建筑是哥特式或者其他随便写什么模式的建筑风格，外观是固定的随意更改非常影响美观度，根本不可能采用它们的统一政策 If so, any reasoning on the basis of it is untenable.
有没有好的他因建议！！！？？？
//Implement 过去式和过去分词是相同的；
Secondly, even if the residents applied the regulations, another problem of the argument is that the author assumes the set of restrictions were responsible for the raise of Brookvile community's average property values. However, without enough evidence it is equally possible that there were others reasons led to the raise of property values in Brookvile community. Perhaps, 这里发现了石油或者金矿或者国家投资新建了大型什么工厂所以… as a large number of empleyees came to the city for finding jobs, the property values increased greatly. Or perhaps, the supply of houses in Brookvile community reduced in the past, so the price of the houses increased. 由于当地特殊的税收和教育政策越来越多的人来这定居Without examining and ruling out such cases, the author cannot convince me the conclusion is persuasive.
//led: lead的过去式和过去分词
Even if the author can substantiate the cause-and-effect relationship above, the author also assumes that if Deerhaven Acres adopted the same method, they will raise their property values as expected. First, the author fails to take into account the inherent differences between the potential home-buyers in Deerhaven Acres and the ones in Brookvile community. Perhaps, the consumers of Brookvile community pay much attention to the houses' out faces (exterior appearance), and the consumers of Deerhaven Acres pay much attention to the location, house size and quality of houses.这个他因很好！有理有力！ If so, the regulations will useless in Deerhaven Acres. Secondly, even if the potential home-buyers in Deerhaven Acres are same as the ones in Brookvile community, perhaps, the economic situation of Deerhaven Acres is very bad, many potential home-buyers have not enough money, in this case, the regulations will not work as well. 这段很好，想的全面而且这些都不容易想到
//房屋的外表：home’s exterior appearance ;易错
In sum, the argument, although it seems logical at first, has several fallacies as discussed above. To strengthen it the author needs to provide that whether or not the residents of Brookvile community had implemented the regulations. We also need to know the differences between the two cities.

要说字数这个完全够了，限时结果非常好！后面两段写的不错，特别是最后那段他因，找得极好


[ 本帖最后由 liquidshile 于 2007-2-5 16:30 编辑 ]

graduate06UID: 2223299

多谢了，第一个他因我在写提纲时就没有想好，见了题目还是没话说。
你的建议很好，thanks a lot.

liquidshileUID: 2254332

仅供参考，今天我还和江波说过你的A绝对是>5.0的