issue38 【076G－背水一战小组】skysijie第三次作业

SkysijieUID: 2233317

Issue38:"In the age of television, readingbooks is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watchingtelevision as they can by reading books."
电视时代的读书已经不像以前那么重要了。人们通过看电视学到的和他们读书所能学到的一样多。

1.      人们是可以通过电视获得很多信息
2.      但是电视是不能取代书本的
3.      并且无论在过去还是现在，书本都一样重要

As the development of television, someinformation transmitted by television in a more immediately and vivid way.Nevertheless, reading books still plays an irreplaceable and essential role inlearning and people cannot obtain the same effect through television. So, I don’tagree with the author said that people can learn as much as by watchingtelevision as they can by reading book in the age of television due to readingbooks is not as important as it once was.

Admittedly, some information, whether theyare important or no-important, interesting or no-interesting, happened or beinghappened, can be reported to public more quickly and accurately by televisionin the era of television. Weather report, provides situation of weather aroundthe worldwide in the two or three days, really do convenience to populace. Arts programs，which presents information offashion, super stars and the interview about some celebrated person, makepeople feel relax and clam down in such a fast developing society. News broadcast, which report matters about ourcountry or foreign country and the relationship with other countries, providesa area for populace to know what happened or will happened in the world. Inbrief, television do good to people to obtain more communication of every fieldin the worldwide.

However, the importance of reading bookscannot be replaced by television. Firstly, people can get more acknowledge,which television have no capability to supply, through reading books. The basicsubjects, such as mathematics, physics, chemistry, and relevant subjects, suchas astrology, computer science, genetics, are totally illustrate and descriptclearly and pellucid in the text books; meanwhile, we can hardly get theseacknowledge through TV. Secondly, what we can learn from books is totally differfrom the knowledge obtained through television. Through reading books, we getinformation more specialization and know more details about it. On thecontrast, the information is more general and often only a concept of it. Forinstance, when we are reading a story, we can feel the emotion and the thoughtsof each character strongly and expressly. But, when we are watching the samestory through television, we merely know the mainly content what the story tryto express to us.

Moreover, theunique and significantstatus that books acted nowadays is the same with it once was. Before the ageof television, public, whether adult or child, student or educator, urbanite orcountryside, were getting acknowledge what they thought are indispensably intheir life by reading books. In the era of television, though we can get someinformation through television and Internet, we still willing to learnacknowledge useful to our daily life by reading books. For example, people, especiallyhouse-working women, prefer to learn some skills of cooking by reading books inthe past times. Compared with it, people still prefer to learn cooking skillsby reading book but not by watching TV program.

To sum up, reading books is important topeople to obtain information either before the television times or in the eraof television, although populace can also get some information by watchingtelevision.

[ 本帖最后由 Skysijie 于 2007-2-7 16:15 编辑 ]

duduhahaUID: 2273118

As the development of television, someinformation(少个系动词吧？） transmitted by television in a more immediately（这个词是副词，应该用形容词形式吧） and vivid way.Nevertheless, reading books still plays an irreplaceable and essential role inlearning and people cannot obtain the same effect through television. So, I don’tagree with the author said（应该用author's assertion或者类似的） that people can learn as much as by watchingtelevision as they can by reading book in the age of television due to(due to好像不能跟句子，应该用because) readingbooks is not as important as it once was.

Admittedly, some information, whether theyare important or no-important, interesting or no-interesting, happened or beinghappened, can be reported to public more quickly and accurately by televisionin（少个介词） the era of television. Weather report, provides situation of weather aroundthe worldwide in the two or three days, really do convenience to populace. Arts programs，which presents information offashion, super stars and the interview about some celebrated person, makepeople feel relax（应该用形容词） and clam down in such a fast developing society. News broadcast, which report matters about ourcountry or foreign country and the relationship with other countries（这句话比较别扭吧？）, providesa(?) area for populace to know what happened or will happened(happen) in the world. Inbrief, television do good to people to obtain(for obtaining?) more communication of every fieldin the worldwide.

However, the importance of reading bookscannot be replaced by television. Firstly, people can get more acknowledge,which television have no capability to supply, through reading books. The basicsubjects, such as mathematics, physics, chemistry, and relevant subjects, suchas astrology, computer science, genetics, are totally illustrate and descriptclearly and pellucid in the text books; meanwhile, we can hardly get theseacknowledge through TV. Secondly, what we can learn from books is totally differfrom the knowledge obtained through television. Through reading books, we getinformation more specialization and know more details about it. On thecontrast, the information is more general and often only a concept of it（这句话好像没有交待清楚）. Forinstance, when we are reading a story, we can feel the emotion and the thoughtsof each character strongly and expressly. But, when we are watching the samestory through television, we merely know the mainly(这个是副词噢） content what（应该用that吧?) the story tryto express to us.

Moreover, theunique and significantstatus that books acted nowadays is the same with it once was. Before the ageof television, public, whether adult or child, student or educator, urbanite orcountryside, were getting（不该用进行时态吧？） acknowledge what（that) they thought are indispensably intheir life by reading books. In the era of television, though we can get someinformation through television and Internet, we(are) still willing to learnacknowledge useful to our daily life by reading books. For example, people, especiallyhouse-working women, prefer to learn some skills of cooking by reading books inthe past times. Compared with it, people still prefer to learn cooking skillsby reading book but not by watching TV program.(这个例子好像举得不是很好，做菜通过电视学好像也不错。）

To sum up, reading books is important topeople to obtain information either before the television times or in the eraof television(是否改用both和and), although populace can also get some information by watchingtelevision.(结尾苍白了点）

我觉得你应该多注重下语法错误，不要写得太随意，论证地还不错，继续努力!

jw84UID: 2283839

As the development of television, some information transmitted by television in a more immediately and vivid way.Nevertheless, reading books still plays an irreplaceable and essential role inlearning and people cannot obtain the same effect through television. So, I don’tagree with the author said that people can learn as much as by watchingtelevision as they can by reading book in the age of television due to reading books is not as important as it once was.(这两句反过来好点，先说作者的观点，however 你的观点+简单的阐述）

Admittedly, some information, whether the yare important or no-important, interesting or no-interesting, happened or being happened, can be reported to public more quickly and accurately by televisionin the era of television. Weather report, provides situation of weather aroundthe worldwide in the two or three days, really do convenience to populace. Arts programs，which presents information offashion, super stars and the interview about some celebrated person, makepeople feel relax and clam down in such a fast developing society. News broadcast, which report matters about ourcountry or foreign country and the relationship with other countries, providesa area for populace to know what happened or will happened in the world. Inbrief, television do good to people to obtain more communication of every fieldin the worldwide.列举的几个方面之间缺少衔接，简单点就First Second....)

However, the importance of reading bookscannot be replaced by television. Firstly, people can get more acknowledge,which television have no capability to supply, through reading books. The basicsubjects, such as mathematics, physics, chemistry, and relevant subjects, suchas astrology, computer science, genetics,（感觉罗列的多了点） are totally illustrate and descriptclearly and pellucid in the text books; meanwhile, we can hardly get theseacknowledge through TV. Secondly, what we can learn from books is totally differfrom the knowledge obtained through television. Through reading books, we getinformation more specialization and know more details about it. On thecontrast, the information is more general and often only a concept of it. Forinstance, when we are reading a story, we can feel the emotion and the thoughtsof each character strongly and expressly. But, when we are watching the samestory through television, we merely know the mainly content what the story tryto express to us.论证的不错

Moreover, theunique and significantstatus that books acted nowadays is the same with it once was. Before the ageof television, public, whether adult or child, student or educator, urbanite orcountryside, were getting acknowledge what they thought are indispensably intheir life by reading books. In the era of television, though we can get someinformation through television and Internet, we still willing to learnacknowledge useful to our daily life by reading books. For example, people, especiallyhouse-working women, prefer to learn some skills of cooking by reading books inthe past times. Compared with it, people still prefer to learn cooking skillsby reading book but not by watching TV program.

To sum up, reading books is important topeople to obtain information either before the television times or in the eraof television, although populace can also get some information by watchingtelevision.
语法错误duduhaha改的很详细了，我就没有给你改了
感觉论证的还不错 结构也还清晰 加油！ ps:不要罗列太多的单词i，比如绿色的部分