issue147【076G－背水一战小组】skysijie第三次作业

SkysijieUID: 2233317

Issue147: “Tradition and modernization areincompatible. One must choose between them.”
       传统与现代化是不相容的。人们必须从这两者中做出选择

1.承认传统与现代化在某些方面是不相容的
2．但是现代化在某些时候是依赖于传统的
3．人们也不必要从两者中做出选择

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I basically agree with this opinion that insome respects tradition and modernization hardly can be merged. However, do wehave to choose between tradition and modernization, though the author assertsthat the two of them are incompatible?

Admittedly, in certain cases modernizationand tradition are incompatible especially when they referred to people’sattitude and aspects toward our behaviors. Set Europe as an example , beforethe era of technology, women and men were not allow to touch while dancing, andladies should not drink or smoke in any where. At that time, people cannotimagine and accept this steadfast belief will be changed after Europe step into technology times. In the age oftechnology, women were allowed to buy a new car, drink, smoke, wore cosmeticsand partake in their leisure time. It reveals a strongly difference between theold ways of tradition and the new ways of the modernization in some sense.

Nevertheless, one thing we have to awarethat modernization is derived from and relies on tradition. This is especiallyobvious when it comes to architecture and language. Many people, myselfincluded, agree with the assertion that a beautiful historic buildings can alsooffer modern amenities. Muséedu Louvre, one of the most celebrated architectures inthe world, which built in 1xxx, has several times renovated that peopleconstrainedly merge modern elements into it. Until nowadays, it still worthy toview and admire whether its aspects or the collection it collected. Turn ourattention to language, which has a long history in every country. For instance,English, which existed for many years long, is appended new words incessantly tokeep the pace with social developing. The word of “Internet”, which appears inrecent years because of the evolution of the digital technology, is one memberin this old and tradition family of language.

Furthermore, populace doesn’t need to havea choice between tradition and modernization due to the fact that tradition canbe consistent with modernization and the latter can embrace the former.Nowadays, people live under pressure and keep a rapid rhythm with thedeveloping society. In their few leisure times, many people may choose teaceremony, a traditional mode appeared in Tang Dynasty in 618, to relax anddecline the rapid rhythm down. Besides, those ancient buildings, like the GreatWall, are totally harmonious with the modern skyscrapers.

To sum up, we should find the balancebetween tradition and modernization but not separate them, though they areincompatible in some cases.

jw84UID: 2283839

I basically agree with this opinion that in some respects tradition and modernization hardly can be merged. However, do we have to choose between tradition and modernization, though the author asserts that the two of them are incompatible? (我觉得第一段还是把自己观点摆出来好，不要用疑问句）

Admittedly, in certain cases modernization and tradition are incompatible especially when they (are) referred to people’s attitude and aspects toward our behaviors. Set Europe as an example , before the era of technology, women and men were not allow(ed) to touch while dancing, and ladies should not drink or smoke in any where. At that time, people cannot imagine and accept this steadfast belief will be changed after Europe step into technology times. In the age of technology, women were allowed to buy a new car, drink, smoke, wore cosmeticsand partake in their leisure time. It reveals a strongly difference between the old ways of tradition and the new ways of the modernization(有点累赘) in some sense.

Nevertheless, one thing we have to aware(这是adj be aware of) that modernization is derived from and relies on tradition. This is especially obvious when it comes to architecture and language. Many people, my self included, agree with the assertion that a beautiful historic buildings can also offer（不太准确） modern amenities. Muséedu(担心考试打不出那一撇，法语打不出来 Louvre, one of the most celebrated architectures in the world, which built in 1xxx, has several times renovated that people constrainedly merge modern elements into it. Until nowadays, it still worthy to view（用appreciate好些） and admire whether its aspects or the collection it collected(多余）. Turn our attention to language, which has a long history in every country. For instance,English, which existed for many years long, is appended new words incessantly to keep the pace with social developing. The word of “Internet”,（再多举两个词好些） which appears inrecent years because of the evolution of the digital technology, is one member in this old and tradition family of language.

Furthermore, populace doesn’t need to have a choice between tradition and modernization due to the fact that tradition can be consistent with modernization and the latter can embrace the former.Nowadays, people live under pressure and keep a rapid rhythm with the developing society. In their few leisure times, many people may choose tea ceremony, a traditional mode appeared in Tang Dynasty in 618, to relax and decline the rapid rhythm down. Besides, those ancient buildings, like the GreatWall, are totally harmonious with the modern skyscrapers.（要么论证多点，要么索性就不写，好些）

To sum up, we should find the balancebetween tradition and modernization but not separate them, though they areincompatible in some cases.
你问过结尾怎么写是吧，我觉得就是把观点再说遍，分论点，总论点阿　谈一下　其实结尾一点不重要
看出来你真的有进步了　语法有改进　论证也不错了　
注意词语运用的准确