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TOPIC: ARGUMENT170 - For the past five years, consumers in California have been willing to pay twice as much for oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast as for Gulf Coast oysters. This trend began shortly after harmful bacteria were found in a few raw Gulf Coast oysters. But scientists have now devised a process for killing the bacteria. Once consumers are made aware of the increased safety of Gulf Coast oysters, they are likely to be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeastern Atlantic Coast oysters, and greater profits for Gulf Coast oyster producers will follow.
WORDS: 368          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-2-14

The seemingly sound argument draw the conclusion that Since the advent of the newly devised process for killing bacteria in  the raw Gulf Coast oysters,the consumers are likely to be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeaster Atlantic Coast oysters which are bacterialess and thus greater profits for gulf Coast oyster producers will step up.However,based on dubious evidence and illogical reasoning,the argument is far from perfect.

To begin with,the arguer assumes too hastily that for the newly devised process for killing the bacteria of Gulf Coast oysters,the consumer will be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeastern Atlantic Coast oysters.However,it is not neccessarily the case.On one hand,the newly devised process itself may have various disadvantages which would be no good and even harmful to people's health.The process for killing the bacteria may destroy the taste and nutrition of oysters,besides,it may also produce other bacteria which are more harmful to human body.On the other hand,people's minds may be stereotyped,they may fear the health problem with the Gulf Coast oysters and get used to the taste of the oysters of Atlantic Coast,which will not lead to immidiate predilection change to Gulf Coast Oysters.What's more,since the people's predilections sometimes are so irrational that they just prefer the Atlantic Coast oysters but not any others' for no reason.These reasons all can render the not happening of people to pay the same on gulf Coast oysters compared to those of Atlantic coast.

Even if the people are willing to double pay the Gulf Coast oysters because of the newly devised process for killing the bacteria,the Gulf Coast oyster producers may have no chance to get greater profits.Perphaps the process itself cost too much,for instance,the devices,the materials used may need lots of money.As a result,though the price of Gulf Coast oysters are doubled,the cost may be tripled or more,which in turn render the in sum profitless of the Gulf Coast oyster.

After careful consideration,the argument lacks sufficient evidence as well as precise reasoning to make an reasonable anticipation.The argument can be improved if the arguer provide more detailed evidence to prove that the process are economically available as well as no harm to the human body.

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT170 - For the past five years, consumers in California have been willing to pay twice as much for oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast as for Gulf Coast oysters. This trend began shortly after harmful bacteria were found in a few raw Gulf Coast oysters. But scientists have now devised a process for killing the bacteria. Once consumers are made aware of the increased safety of Gulf Coast oysters, they are likely to be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeastern Atlantic Coast oysters, and greater profits for Gulf Coast oyster producers will follow.
WORDS: 368          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-2-14

The seemingly sound argument draw the conclusion that Since the advent of the newly devised process for killing bacteria in  the raw Gulf Coast oysters,the consumers are likely to be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeaster Atlantic Coast oysters which are bacterialess这个信息题名没有吧 and thus greater profits for gulf Coast oyster producers will step up .总的来说，复述比较简洁However,based on dubious evidence and illogical reasoning,the argument is far from perfect.

To begin with,the arguer assumes too hastily that for the newly devised process for killing the bacteria of Gulf Coast oysters,the consumer will be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeastern Atlantic Coast oysters.However,it is not neccessarily the case.On one hand,the newly devised process itself may have various disadvantages which would be no good and even harmful to people's health.The process for killing the bacteria may destroy the taste and nutrition of oysters,besides,it may also produce other bacteria which are more harmful to human body.On the other hand,people's minds may be stereotyped,they may fear the health problem with the Gulf Coast oysters and get used to the taste of the oysters of Atlantic Coast,which will not lead to immediate predilection change to Gulf Coast Oysters.What's more,since the people's predilections sometimes are so irrational that they just prefer the Atlantic Coast oysters but not any others' for no reason.These reasons all can render the not happening of people to pay the same on gulf Coast oysters compared to those of Atlantic coast.这段写得不错，层次清楚，攻击全面

Even if the people are willing to double pay the Gulf Coast oysters because of the newly devised process for killing the bacteria,the Gulf Coast oyster producers may have no chance to get greater profits.Perphaps the process itself cost too much,for instance,the devices,the materials used may need lots of money.As a result,though the price of Gulf Coast oysters are doubled,the cost may be tripled or more,which in turn render the in sum profitless of the Gulf Coast oyster.

After careful consideration,the argument lacks sufficient evidence as well as precise reasoning to make an reasonable anticipation.The argument can be improved if the arguer provide more detailed evidence to prove that the process are economically available as well as no harm to the human body.
文章写得不错，理由什么的找得好，但是觉得你只找了两个方面的理由，而且第二个方面的理由也比较少，最好再加一个方面的

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