argument170 <米国有米寒假作业 >

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170.consumers in California,oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast
170For the past five years, consumers in California have been willing to pay twice as much for oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast as for Gulf Coast oysters. This trend began shortly after harmful bacteria were found in a few raw Gulf Coast oysters. But scientists have now devised a process for killing the bacteria. Once consumers are made aware of the increased safety of Gulf Coast oysters, they are likely to be willing to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeastern Atlantic Coast oysters, and greater profits for Gulf Coast oyster producers will follow.


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In this argument, the arguer tends to convince us that the cost of the Gulf Coast oyster will increase and Gulf Coast oyster producers will gain great profits.To support this argument, the augers points out the increase price trend of oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast happened after harmful bacteria were found in Gulf Coast oysters,and now scientist have devised a process for killing the bacteria. As it stands, however, this argument is hardly convincing due to following crucial fallacious.

In the first place, the arguer unfairly assumes that the fact that consumers have been willing to pay twice as much for oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast as for Gulf Coast oysters dues to the harmful bacteria which were found in raw Gulf Coast oysters. Yet, the arguer fails to provide no evidence to substantiate it. Perhaps it is because the total number of oyster from the northeastern Atlantic Coast is fewer than Gulf Coast oysters in market. Perhaps a majority of consumers prefer the taste of oysters from the northeastern Alantic Coast. Perhaps the producers of oysters from the northeastern take effective way to promote the sales of their oysters. Perhaps customers believe that some materials involved in oysters from the northeastern are more benefit people compared with Gulf Coast oysters. In short, without ruling out these or other factors which would contribute to higher price of oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast, the arguer can not convince me that the bacteria found in Gulf Coast is responsible for the lower price of Gulf Coast.

Secondly, even if it is the bacteria found in Gulf Coast causes the lower price of it, the arguer asserts that price of Gulf Coast will increase since scientists have now devised a processing for killing the bacteria. However, it might not be this case. Firstly, whether this process will bring negative effects to Gulf Coast is uncertain. It is entirely possible that this process introduces other bacteria or harmful materials to Gulf Coast. In addition, even if this process of killing bacterial is safe, whether people are likely to trust these produces this time? Whether the reputation of these producers can be rebuilt quickly?

The last but not the least, the arguer assumes that the produces of Gulf Coast oyster would gain greater profits is unwarranted. The arguer fails to inform us that the clear number about demands of Gulf Coast oyster now. Perhaps, there are only a few customers who are willing to buy Gulf Coast oyster. In that case, the produce still can not make great profits.

To sum up, the conclusion is not well supported. To bolster it the auger must provide clear evidence that the bacteria found in Gulf Coast oyster contributes to its lower price and the new processing of killing bacteria will serve to increase its price.

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argument170 <米国有米寒假作业 >
170.consumers in California,oystersfrom the northeastern Atlantic Coast
170For the past five years, consumers in Californiahave been willing to pay twice as much for oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coastas for Gulf Coast oysters. This trend began shortlyafter harmful bacteria were found in a few raw Gulf Coastoysters. But scientists have now devised a process for killing the bacteria.Once consumers are made aware of the increased safety of GulfCoast oysters, they are likely to bewilling to pay as much for Gulf Coast as for northeastern AtlanticCoast oysters, and greater profits forGulf Coast oyster producers will follow.


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In this argument, the arguer tends to convince us that the cost[花费吗？应该是价格吧] of the Gulf Coast oyster willincrease and Gulf Coast oyster producers will gain great profits. To supportthis argument, the augers points out the increase[首先这里应该用increasing,其次这里作者根本没有说涨价了]price trend of oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast happenedafter harmful bacteria were found in Gulf Coast oysters, [断句]and now scientist have devised aprocess for killing the bacteria. As it stands, however, this argument ishardly convincing due to following crucial fallacious.

In the first place, the arguer unfairly assumes [怎么不公平的假设了]that the fact thatconsumers have been willing to pay twice as much for oysters from thenortheastern Atlantic Coast as for Gulf Coast oysters dues to the harmfulbacteria which were found in raw Gulf Coast oysters. Yet, the arguer fails to provide no evidence to substantiate it. Perhaps it is because the total number of oyster from thenortheastern Atlantic Coast is fewer than GulfCoast oysters in market.[这个例子举的不符合要求，因为作者之前已经提出This trend began shortly after harmful bacteriawere found in a few raw Gulf Coast oysters.] Perhaps a majority of consumers prefer the taste of oysters fromthe northeastern Alantic Coast. Perhaps theproducers of oysters from the northeastern take effective way to promote thesales of their oysters. Perhaps customers believe that some materials involvedin oysters from the northeastern are more benefit [beneficial for]people compared with Gulf Coastoysters. In short, without ruling out these or other factors which wouldcontribute to higher price of oysters from the northeastern Atlantic Coast, thearguer can not convince me that the bacteria found in Gulf Coast is responsiblefor the lower price of Gulf Coast.
[攻击点找的还可以，请不要一次性用这么多perhaps好不好？]

Secondly, even if it is the bacteria found in GulfCoast causes the lower price of it,the arguer asserts that price of Gulf Coast will increase sincescientists have now [delete]deviseda processing [process]forkilling the bacteria. However, it might not be this case. Firstly, whether thisprocess will bring negative effects to Gulf Coastis uncertain. It is entirely possible that this process introduces otherbacteria or harmful materials to Gulf Coast. In addition, evenif this process of killing bacterial is safe, whetherpeople are likely to trust these produces this time? Whether the reputation of these producers can be rebuiltquickly? [这两句话根本不是问句，请不要打问号]

The last but not the least, the arguer assumes that the produces of Gulf Coastoyster would gain greater profits is unwarranted. Thearguer fails to inform us that the clear number about demands of Gulf Coastoyster now.[影响利润的东西应该不只是你说的吧] Perhaps, there are only a fewcustomers who are willing to buy Gulf Coast oyster. In thatcase, the produce still can not make great profits.

To sum up, the conclusion is not well supported. To bolster it the auger mustprovide clear evidence that the bacteria found in Gulf Coastoyster contributes to its lower price and the new processing of killingbacteria will serve to increase its price. [总结懂得不够全面，各段的攻击还是没有联系起来]