issue83 <米国有米寒假作业 2.14>

blackswitchUID: 2110679

issue 83 以前写过的

I strongly agree with the speaker’s assertion that government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, because wilderness would benefit to the living of plants and animals, to the scientific research.

To begin with, preserving publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state can is the most favorable places for the living of plants and animals .Because the nature has the ability to maintain its balance. Among plants and animals, it exists a complex supply food chain which human is hard to understand thoroughly and control. Human interference would destroy this balance more or less. In fact, many human actions have destroyed the living surrounding of plants and animals thereby causing their the death ,even extinction. In my home town ,there was ever a wilderness areas with a river in which we can see all kinds of fish when I was a child. But, now, with increasing number of waster and poisonous water being pushed into it , we never find fish in there. Excessive deforestation also brings hazard to the survive of some animals there. The destruction of Brazil’s tropical rain forest is an aptly example, vast tracts of forests are cut down in this area, thereby turning the former mountains covered by forests into only rocks and surface soil . Following the disappearance of plants that some species of animals depend on , these animals also die out.

Reserving wilderness has significant meaning for researchers of biology and ecology. Firstly,  Wilderness provide a ideal place for researchers to observe the behaviour of animals . In order to research the animals’ character and habits deeply, many scientists go into wilderness. Jane Goodall, a famous zoologer in England, observed chimpanzee in African virgin forest for twenty years. She lived with chimpanzee, eat the same food as chimpanzee did . Through this way ,she did great contribution to the research of chimpanzee .  Besides Jane, there are many scientist made their research and experience in virgin forest. We can imagine that if the virgin forset was destroyed ,these significant research and observation would be less likely to go on. In addition ,wilderness is also a huge treasury of gene . Scientist find new species in wilderness again and again. This new discoveries benefit to the development of biology. Some new found plants species are rare medical material and provide a good treatment for disease.  The found of new animal species give important clues for the origination and evolution of life.  

Further, We would not reduce our attention to wilderness areas because these areas are remote and accessible to only a few people. There are two reasons for this point. In one hand, some natural disasters threaten wilderness area such as conflagration . Given this, government should adopt appreciate mechanism to detect dangerous condition thereby avoiding the disaster. On the other hand, some avaricious people hunt wild animals for economical sake in remote wilderness areas, considering their activities in these areas would be harder to be found. Thus, government should enact relevant laws against environmental destruction and put it into effect. Certainly, public propaganda is also indispensable.  

To sum up, due to above analysis and discussion, I can safely draw the following conclusion that government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their original states whether these places are remote and inaccessible to most people .

云之翼UID: 2114898

I strongly agree with the speaker’s assertion that government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, because wilderness would benefit to the living of plants and animals, according to the scientific research.

To begin with, preserving(去掉) publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state can is（be） the most favorable places for the living of plants and animals .Because the nature has the ability to maintain its balance. Among plants and animals, it(there) exists a complex supply food chain which human find is hard to understand thoroughly and control. Human interference would destroy this balance more or less. In fact, many human actions have destroyed the living surrounding of plants and animals thereby causing their the(去掉) death ,even extinction. In my home town ,there was ever a wilderness areas with a river in which we can see all kinds of fish when I was a child. But, now, with increasing number of（water不可数，可以改成more and more） waster and poisonous water(重复) being pushed（poured） into it , we never(can no longer) find fish in there. Excessive deforestation also brings hazard to the survive(survival) of some animals there. The destruction of Brazil’s tropical rain forest is an aptly example, vast tracts of forests are cut down in this area, thereby turning the former mountains covered by forests into only rocks and surface soil . Following the disappearance of plants that some species of animals depend on , these animals also die out.

Reserving wilderness has significant meaning for researchers of biology and ecology. Firstly,  Wilderness provide a ideal place for researchers to observe the behaviour of animals . In order to research the animals’ character and habits deeply, many scientists go into wilderness. Jane Goodall, a famous zoologer in England, observed chimpanzee in African virgin forest for twenty years. She lived with chimpanzee, eat the same food as chimpanzee did . Through this way ,she didA(made) great contribution to the research of chimpanzee .  Besides Jane, there are many other scientist who made their research and experience in virgin forest. We can imagine that if the virgin forset was destroyed ,these significant research and observation would be less likely to go on. In addition ,wilderness is also a huge treasury of gene . Scientist find new species in wilderness again and again. This new discoveries benefit to(去掉) the development of biology. Some new found plants species are rare medical material and provide a good treatment for disease（有些别扭）.  The found of new animal species also give important clues for the origination and evolution of life(再加一句带一下，我感觉有些突兀).  

Further, We would not reduce our attention to wilderness areas because these areas are remote and accessible to only a few people. There are two reasons for this point. In one hand, some natural disasters threaten wilderness area such as conflagration . Given this, government should adopt appreciate mechanism to detect dangerous condition thereby avoiding the disaster. On the other hand, some avaricious people hunt wild animals for economical sake in remote wilderness areas, considering their activities in these areas would be harder to be found（这个词用的太多了，最好换下，可以改为detected,traced?）. Thus, government should enact relevant laws against environmental destruction and put it into effect. Certainly, public propaganda is also indispensable.  

To sum up, due to above analysis and discussion, I can safely draw the following conclusion that government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their original states whether these places are remote and inaccessible to most people

论证的比较充分，例子举的也很好，destruction of Brazil’s tropical rain forest 和Jane Goodall都是我不知道的，学习了，呵呵。不过语言还有待提高，句子再流畅一些，表达再多样化一些，会更好。

ntmlgszUID: 2235666

issue 83 以前写过的
Issue83"Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas intheir natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote andthus accessible to only a few people." 83．政府应该保护那些疆域范围内的偏远地区，尽管这些地区人烟稀少

I strongly agree with the speaker’s assertion that government should preservepublicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, because wildernesswould benefit to the living of plants and animals, to the scientific research.

To begin with, preserving publicly owned wilderness areas in their naturalstate can is the most favorable places for theliving of plants and animals [我不明白你要表达什么意思].Because the nature has the abilityto maintain its balance. Among plants and animals, it exists a complex supply food chain which human is hard to understandthoroughly and control. Human interference woulddestroy this balance more or less. In fact, many human actions havedestroyed the living surrounding of plants and animals thereby causing theirthe death, even extinction. In my home town ,there was ever a wilderness areaswith a river in which we can see all kinds of fish when I was a child. But,now, with increasing number of waster and poisonous water being pushed into it, we never find fish in there. Excessive deforestation also brings hazard tothe survive of some animals there.[你们家乡应该不属于人迹罕至的地方吧，这样和主题不符] The destruction of Brazil’stropical rain forest is an aptly example, vast tracts of forests are cut downin this area, thereby turning the former mountains covered by forests into onlyrocks and surface soil. Following the disappearance of plants that some speciesof animals depend on, these animals also die out. [你本段的主题是要说明自然能调节环境还是人为破坏导致物种灭绝呢？]

Reserving wilderness has significant meaning for researchers of biology andecology. Firstly,  wilderness provide a ideal place for researchersto observe the behavior[+s]of animals . In order to research the animals’ character [+s]andhabits deeply, many scientists go into wilderness. Jane Goodall, a famous zoologyin England,observed chimpanzee in African virgin forest for twenty years. She lived withchimpanzee, eat the same food as chimpanzee did. Through this way ,she did [+a]great contribution to the research of chimpanzee.  Besides Jane, there are many scientist[+s]made their research[+s]and experience in virgin forest. We canimagine that if the virgin forest was destroyed, these significant research andobservation would be less likely to go on. In addition, wilderness is also ahuge treasury of gene. Scientist find [+s]new species in wilderness again and again. Thisnew discoveries benefit to the development of biology. Some newfound plantsspecies are rare medical material and provide a good treatment fordisease.  The found of new animal species give important clues forthe origination and evolution of life.  
[除了语法错误很多以外，本段的论述还是很全面的]

Further, we would not reduce our attention to wilderness areas because theseareas are remote and accessible to only a [去掉]few people. There aretwo reasons for this point. In[on] one hand, some natural disasters threatenwilderness area such as conflagration. Given this, government should adoptappreciate mechanism to detect dangerouscondition thereby avoiding the disaster. On the other hand, some avariciouspeople hunt wild animals for economical sake in remote wilderness areas,considering their activities in these areas would be harderto be found.[hardly found] Thus,government should enact relevant laws against environmental destruction and putit into effect. Certainly, public propaganda is also indispensable.  

To sum up, due to above analysis and discussion, I can safely draw thefollowing conclusion that government should preserve publicly owned wildernessareas in their original states whether these places are remote and inaccessibleto most people . [这个样子的总结和开头亮出观点没什么区别]
总评：除了第一段论述缺乏方向以外，其它论点都掌握的不错，总结应该是前面论证段的内容连贯才对