Arugument17【0706G－CRUSADE小组】第3次作业 by Dremacasaer

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Argument17（353）不好意思。。字数仍然不够。不管了  
  
1虽然EZ収两次垃圾，但是也许这个城市只需一次收集便可足够清理垃圾
2而且我们并不知道EZ的新车什么时候到货，会不会投入使用。
3虽然EZ订了更多的车，但是我们不清楚这些车的承重量，也许EZ所有的车加起来仍然没有abc现有的车的载重量大。
4虽然百分之八十的人反应不错，但是这并没有任何对比，这份调查没有可信度，说不定再用了abc以后，百分之九十的人认为好，所以需要把abc和ez同时供人们对比。

      The speaker asserts that the town should still use the EZ Disposal(E) , and he cites some reasons to support this point. However, there has not enough evidence to demonstrate this recommendation. In my point of view, there are four main flaws which I will discuss in following four paragraphs.

       To begin with, the speaker fails to take into account that how often the town need to collect trash. If Walnut Grove town is a small town and does not have lots of rubbish. Under such circumstance collecting trash once a week, like ABC Waste(A) doing, may be enough for Walnut Grove town, and collection for twice a week, like E doing, may be a waste of money.

       In second place, although E has ordered additional trucks, yet there is no evidence to suggest that when these cars start to use and how they use these cars. It is fully possible that these new trucks will not use immediately, or these cars may be used as standby cars . If so, ordering additional cars may not improve efficiency of collecting trash, and in such case, the town does not have to choose E company.

       In addition, the argument does not shows that the load of E’s trucks is equal to A’s. Providing that the load of A’s trucks is bigger, A’s cars might more efficient than E’s. Even if the E’s amount of cars are larger, it is entirly possible that E company is less efficient than A.

       Moreover, though the survey shows that eighty percent of respondents were satisfied with E’s performance, the speaker fails to give sufficient evidence to illustrate that this result is dawn from the comparison with A. Consequently, this survey may be not reliable enough for judging the people like E more than A. Perhaps more than eighty percent people in this town were satisfied with A.

       All in all, it is unreasonable to judge the town should choose EZ according to mere these evidence speaker stated in the argument. Because there have at least four main problem, the speaker should provide us sufficient evidence to convince us.

[ 本帖最后由 lastangel 于 2007-2-24 15:15 编辑 ]

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      The speaker asserts that the town should still use the EZ Disposal(E) , and he cites some reasons 【搭配 cite some data/statistics  或者说 list out some reasons】 to support this point. However, there has not enough evidence to demonstrate this recommendation. In my point of view, there are four main flaws which I will discuss in following four paragraphs.

       To begin with, the speaker fails to take into account that how often the town need to collect trash. If Walnut Grove town is a small town and does not have lots of rubbish. 【句子不完整, if 后面呢If Walnut Grove town is a small town, then does not have lots of rubbish.】 Under such circumstance collecting trash once a week, like ABC Waste(A) doing 【删doing】, may be enough for Walnut Grove town 【节省时间的话，可以考虑简写，前面这个词出现过一次】, and collection for twice a week, like E doing, may be a waste of money.

       In second place, although E has ordered additional trucks, yet there is no evidence to suggest that when these cars start to use and how they use these cars. It is fully possible that these new trucks will not use immediately, or these cars may be used as standby cars . If so, ordering additional cars may not improve efficiency of collecting trash, and in such case, the town does not have to choose E company.

       In addition, the argument does not shows that the load of E’s trucks is equal to A’s. Providing that the load of A’s trucks is bigger, A’s cars might more efficient than E’s. Even if the E’s amount of cars are larger, it is entirly【entirely】 possible that E company is less efficient than A.

       Moreover, though the survey shows that eighty percent of respondents were satisfied with E’s performance, the speaker fails to give sufficient evidence to illustrate that this result is dawn from the comparison with A. Consequently, this survey may be not reliable enough for judging the people like E more than A. Perhaps more than eighty percent people in this town were satisfied with A.

       All in all, it is unreasonable to judge the town should choose EZ【简写要统一，要么统一用EZ，要么统一用E】 according to mere these evidence speaker stated in the argument. Because there have at least four main problem, the speaker should provide us sufficient evidence to convince us.
字数ok吧，都过了350了；
逻辑的批判我自己也在提高中，找不出很大的问题；
言语方面楼主可以多背写句式，多看看总结些北美里面的好句子和一些同义词（btw，也在痛苦学习中），加油！

[ 本帖最后由 yyyfff 于 2007-2-24 15:16 编辑 ]