issue130 argument199 【小鸡快跑组】我碰到最困难的一个ARGU..来拍偶先谢了

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ISSUE终于有写不完的感觉，ARGUMENT真崩溃...

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 563          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-2-22

This statement consists of two claims: (1) The destiny of a society is determined by how well the children are socialized; (2) It is quite a disappointing thing that we have not known how to raise children to better the society. However, I cannot agree either the former or the latter one, for reasons discussed below:

First of all, socialization is a process that people, especially children learning which behavior is acceptable to the generality and which is not during communicating, playing, and studying with other people. It is more a nature procedure in developing both moral and faculties of an individual rather than a special lesson that should be imposed on one by teachers or parents. Everyone learn to socialize all through his life, and how well one has socialized does not exert extremely significant influence on society.
Consider Martin Luther King Jr. and Roosevelt; the former never subdued to the discrimination existed hundreds of years towards American Blacks. And the latter has ascended to social-activist presidency despite the aloofness, odd manner and isolation throughout his childhood.
Besides, neither too socialized nor standing out will benefit a society as the common sense tells us. Too much emphasize on socialization leads to compromising. People merely agree upon each idea which the majority think so and no innovations can be put up. And underscoring non-socialization probably results in confusion of whole society, which will crack the relationship that bonds each other. Therefore, we cannot conclude that how children are socialized today indicates how well the society will be.

Then turn to the next claim that we do not know how to make children to better society, which is considered unfortunate by the speaker. If we hastily generalize the idea of socialization in educating children without regard of the status quo of each society, the outcome is entirely possible to be unexpected or even astonishing.
Two sharply contrasted examples can bolster my sentiments: America and Japan as illustrations; All Japanese have been brought up in almost the same atmosphere. Since the government allocates money to each school, they receive the same idea, the same knowledge, and even the same way to behavior, they can be considered completely socialized from the very early age. In the business realm, every decision is made from the rank and file to the top of companies, no one will be neglected or his supposition been ignored. Such socialized atmosphere around Japan ends up a distinctly united and competitive country.
Yet  the American do the opposite: Suspicion to the authority is always the pillar of American life, and every young man has been taught to asserts themselves, to stick out and excel in whatever area they are specially gifted. Few will deny a characterizing feature of America is diversity. However the result of such non-socializing concept, instead of something "unfortunate", is hard working people in every workplace, boundless and innovative ideas abound in both laboratories and business field, as well as the consistent challenging to classics. Thus, socialization or not, the choice is never an easy one when we close scrutinizing our own society.

In sum, the socialization of children is no indication that what the society will be tomorrow, since no empirical evidence supports that. And what should we do to raise children in order to bring about a better society remains through discuss with everything taking into account

我比较恶心抄了一段范文 ...


TOPIC: ARGUMENT199 - There is a general idea that waiters and waitresses are more likely to receive larger gratuities from large groups of people. A recent research study suggests this is not true. The researchers examined the relationship between the size of tips in restaurants and the number of meals charged on the bill. They found that, while most tips were around 15 percent, the minimum percentage considered appropriate, people dining alone tipped consistently more (19 percent) and those dining in groups of four or more tipped considerably less (13 percent) than this 15 percent standard. These results strongly suggest that people dining in a group are less likely to feel personally responsible for leaving an adequate or generous tip.
WORDS: 392          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-2-22

The arguer concludes that people dining in a group are less likely to be responsibly for leaving generous tip. To support this conclusion, the arguer cites a research about the amount of gratuities people leave in restaurants, and the result is people dining in group left tips that less in proportion of the meal than people dining alone did. However, that evidence lends no credible support to the conclusion and the assumptions the arguer made are ambiguous as it stands.

Firstly, no evidence shows that the study is representative enough and to generalize the idea. It is very likely that the research was only conducted in a small area, even in the same restaurant. Or the researchers selected some special days to observe people tipping. Then we can reasonably suppose that there had been one group that did not leave gratuities at all which made the average unexpected low if the size of subjects was not big enough. And no information about how much a group of 2 or 3 tipped in the argument so far available. Since the evidence is so scant that we cannot be convinced about its reliability.

Secondly, the argument's proponent fails to take the significance of the base amount of the charge into consideration, which renders the conclusion further unwarranted. Although people dining together leave tipped less than people dining alone did in percentage, the total amount can be far larger than the latter, since common sense tells us that the former ones will pay more after all. Without this information, the arguer cannot conclude that waiters and waitress receive fewer(不是less) tips from a large group

Finally, even if the group of people tip less in proportion, it is no indication that they are less responsible to be generous. Perhaps the services provided by the restaurants are always at lower level than that towards the single person, in that the group of people will not regard tipping more than 13 percent is fair for themselves. And it is also entirely possible that people who always dine alone are richer than groups of people, they do not care how much the tip exact is. Any those scenarios, if true, will cast considerable doubt on the arguer's deduction that

In sum, the conclusion is based on a unreliable research and a series of unwarranted assumption which make it unconvincing. To strengthen it, the arguer should offer information such as the representativeness of the study, the exact statistical evidence about how much people tip, and is there any other reason for groups of people to pay less gratuities.

说实话我都没看出来这个ARGU有什么不对的地方:mad ，希望侠客们指教！

[ 本帖最后由 ASKFORTROUBLE 于 2007-2-22 21:24 编辑 ]

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This statement consists of two claims: (1) The destiny of a society is determined by how well the children are socialized; (2) It is quite a disappointing thing that we have not known how to raise children to better the society. However, I cannot agree either the former or the latter one, for reasons discussed below:开头分析的不错，赞！形式上很像作文大讲堂里的

First of all, socialization is a process that people, especially children learning which behavior is acceptable to the generality and which is not during communicating, playing, and studying with other people. It is more a nature procedure in developing both moral and faculties of an individual rather than a special lesson that should be imposed on one by teachers or parents. Everyone learn to socialize all through his life, and how well one has socialized does not exert extremely significant influence on society.
Consider Martin Luther King Jr. and Roosevelt; the former never subdued to the discrimination existed hundreds of years towards American Blacks. And the latter has ascended to social-activist presidency despite the aloofness, odd manner and isolation throughout his childhood例子本身没有问题，但与你的论点得联系不大，显得有点牵强，应把例子往论点上拉，更深剖析一下

Besides, neither too socialized nor standing out will benefit a society as the common sense tells us. Too much emphasize on socialization leads to compromising. People merely agree upon each idea which the majority think so and no innovations can be put up. And underscoring non-socialization probably results in confusion of whole society, which will crack the relationship that bonds each other. Therefore, we cannot conclude that how children are socialized today indicates how well the society will be.这里既然提到不是孩子的社会化完全决定社会进步，可以顺着列几个其它的因素，看起来既完整，又可增加字数，呵呵！

Then turn to the next claim that we do not know how to make children to better society, which is considered unfortunate by the speaker. If we hastily generalize the idea of socialization in educating children without regard of the status quo of each society, the outcome is entirely possible to be unexpected or even astonishing.
Two sharply contrasted examples can bolster my sentiments: America and Japan后面加‘s education as illustrations; All Japanese have been brought up in almost the same atmosphere. Since the government allocates money to each school, they receive the same idea, the same knowledge, and even the same way to behavior, they can be considered completely socialized from the very early age. In the business realm, every decision is made from the rank and file to the top of companies, no one will be neglected or his supposition been ignored. Such socialized atmosphere around Japan ends up a distinctly united and competitive country.
Yet  the American do the opposite: Suspicion to the authority is always the pillar of American life, and every young man has been taught to asserts themselves, to stick out and excel in whatever area they are specially gifted. Few will deny a characterizing feature of America is diversity. However the result of such non-socializing concept, instead of something "unfortunate", is hard working people in every workplace, boundless and innovative ideas abound in both laboratories and business field, as well as the consistent challenging to classics. Thus, socialization or not, the choice is never an easy one when we close scrutinizing our own society.我觉得例子之后有必要在总结一下，尤其这是两个对比的例子，可以更清楚得让人知道你的想法

In sum, the socialization of children is no indication that what the society will be tomorrow, since no empirical evidence supports that. And what should we do to raise children in order to bring about a better society remains through discuss with everything taking into account

呵呵，第一次改作文，之前包括自己的烂文也没碰过，所以改的不好不要怪啊，我的水平也能只帮lz看了一下文章的整体思路。结构很清晰! 你限时的字数很不错的，能给我讲讲经验么？

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