issue11 (503) 飞跃小组disyoo 第 1 次作业

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TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 503          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-2-24

提纲：＋，－，－
1。由于很多社会问题是由于意见不统一的矛盾导致，global大学能够化解这些矛盾，从而解决一些社会问题
2。但是由于国家之间存在这巨大差异，如伊斯兰教，在习惯和信仰上与其他国家不一样，很难在全球大学里作为支持者，而其他国家也会相应排斥这些异教徒。（驳all nations）
3。即使存在这种大学也不一定公平的解决社会问题，因为矛盾问题总是存在着利益的冲突，比如联合国，并不能解决一些问题。（由于时间不够没写完，想举日本捕鲸的例子，联合国干预但是没能制止。）


Is this possible and necessary that all nations should help support the development of a global university? The speaker claims so, because a global university which can be designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems? However I concede that a global university is not possible been built because of some difference between some nations, and otherwise in my view, if such university has been built, some social problems will still make trouble in the world without being solved.

First, a global university will do some benefit in different mind between science and religion because it is designed to engage students to solve the world's most persistent social problems. In hundreds years, people argue the knowledge and facts by different angle, and troubles and struggles will not stop unless the difference suggestion becomes together. Here is an example to well support this point: Copernicus, a Polish astronomer and mathematician, who was the proponent of the view that the Earth about its axis in daily motion and in yearly motion about the sun, but this understanding is difference with the religion understanding, which makes the death of Copernicus. If a global university is designed in that time, this problem may be solved in peace. So a global university is necessary to solve some of the social problems.

In the other hand, it seems not all the nations have the ability and the possibility to support the global university. They have difference in culture and religion, and that even lead to struggle and non-corporations, it is hardly possible to develop such university. Some countries with different culture are difficult to be accepted by other countries because of they have different religion or background. In the Islamic country, some old custom are still available and even keep in law, for example, a man in Islamic country can marry 3 wives in his life, and that is a block to solve the problems of women's liberation, also, the Islamic countries are hardly to support the global university either. So it is difficult to exclaim all the nations to support such university.

In addition, even though such a global university has been built, some social problems still trouble people. Or to say, the social problems will not be solved fairly. Now a days a organization named UN seems useless to solve problems in international, it is just like what the global university designed to do. But is it fairly that the way all the problems are solved? Simply answer, no. Some problems are always solved in the way that can product benefit, or have benefit to one side of the difference. So a global university is not useful to solve the problem.

In the sum, not all the nations have the ability or willing to support a global university, even if it has some benefit to the social problems. But in order to solve the most persistent social problems, it will do little even if a global university is developed.

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issue11 (503) 飞跃小组disyoo 第 1 次作业（修改后）

TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."WORDS: 503          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-2-24提纲：＋，－，－1。由于很多社会问题是由于意见不统一的矛盾导致，global大学能够化解这些矛盾，从而解决一些社会问题2。但是由于国家之间存在这巨大差异，如伊斯兰教，在习惯和信仰上与其他国家不一样，很难在全球大学里作为支持者，而其他国家也会相应排斥这些异教徒。（驳all nations）3。即使存在这种大学也不一定公平的解决社会问题，因为矛盾问题总是存在着利益的冲突，比如联合国，并不能解决一些问题。（由于时间不够没写完，想举日本捕鲸的例子，联合国干预但是没能制止。）Is this possible and necessary that all nations should help support the development of a global university? The speaker claims so, because a global university which can be designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems? (应该是句号)However I concede that a global university is not possible been（应该省略） built because of some difference between some nations, and otherwise in my view, if such university has been built, some social problems will still make trouble in the world without being solved.First, a global university will do some benefit in different minds between science and religion because it is designed to engage students to solve the world's most persistent social problems. In(For) hundreds (of)years, people argue the knowledge and facts by (from)different angles, and(but) troubles and struggles will not(never) stop unless the difference(different) suggestions becomes(mix) together. Here is an example to well support this point: Copernicus, a Polish astronomer and mathematician, who was the proponent of the view that(不错！) the Earth about its axis in daily motion and in yearly motion about the sun, but this understanding is difference(different) with the religion understanding, which makes the death of Copernicus. If a global university is designed in that time, this problem may be solved in peace. So a global university is necessary to solve some of the social problems.In(On) the other hand, it seems that not all the nations have the ability and the possibility to support the global university. They have difference in culture and religion, and that even lead to struggle and non-corporations, it is hardly possible to develop such a university. Some countries with different cultures are difficult to be accepted by

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issue11 (503) 飞跃小组disyoo 第 1 次作业（修改后）

TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."WORDS: 503          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-2-24提纲：＋，－，－1。由于很多社会问题是由于意见不统一的矛盾导致，global大学能够化解这些矛盾，从而解决一些社会问题2。但是由于国家之间存在这巨大差异，如伊斯兰教，在习惯和信仰上与其他国家不一样，很难在全球大学里作为支持者，而其他国家也会相应排斥这些异教徒。（驳all nations）3。即使存在这种大学也不一定公平的解决社会问题，因为矛盾问题总是存在着利益的冲突，比如联合国，并不能解决一些问题。（由于时间不够没写完，想举日本捕鲸的例子，联合国干预但是没能制止。）Is this possible and necessary that all nations should help support the development of a global university? The speaker claims so, because a global university which can be designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems? (应该是句号)However I concede that a global university is not possible been（应该省略） built because of some difference between some nations, and otherwise in my view, if such university has been built, some social problems will still make trouble in the world without being solved.First, a global university will do some benefit in different minds between science and religion because it is designed to engage students to solve the world's most persistent social problems. In(For) hundreds (of)years, people argue the knowledge and facts by (from)different angles, and(but) troubles and struggles will not(never) stop unless the difference(different) suggestions becomes(mix) together. Here is an example to well support this point: Copernicus, a Polish astronomer and mathematician, who was the proponent of the view that(不错！) the Earth about its axis in daily motion and in yearly motion about the sun, but this understanding is difference(different) with the religion understanding, which makes the death of Copernicus. If a global university is designed in that time, this problem may be solved in peace. So a global university is necessary to solve some of the social problems.In(On) the other hand, it seems that not all the nations have the ability and the possibility to support the global university. They have difference in culture and religion, and that even lead to struggle and non-corporations, it is hardly possible to develop such a university. Some countries with different cultures are difficult to be accepted by other countries because of they have different religion or background. In the Islamic country, some old custom are still available and even keep(kept) in law, for example, a man in Islamic country can marry 3 wives in his life, and that is a block to solve the problems（应该省略） of women's liberation, also(thus), the Islamic countries are hardly to support the global university either. So it is difficult to exclaim all the nations to support such university.In addition, even though such a global university has been built, some social problems still trouble people. Or to say, the social problems will not be solved fairly. Now a days(Nowadays) a organization named UN seems useless to solve problems in international(international problems), it is just like what the global university designed to do. But is it fairly that the way all the problems are solved? Simply answer, no. Some problems are always solved in the way that can product benefit, or have benefit to one side of the difference. So a global university is not useful to solve the problem.In the（应该省略） sum, not all the nations have the ability or willing to support a global university, even if it has some benefit to the social problems. But in order to solve the most persistent social problems, it will do little even if a global university is developed.(这一段最后一句话感觉逻辑上有点不对劲，但又有点不好改)

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先占个座吧，明天来看看，困了。。。

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TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."

改后：

Is this possible and necessary that all nations should help support the development of a global university? The speaker claims so, because a global university which can be designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems? However I concede that a global university is not possible been built because of some differences between some nations, and otherwise in my view, if such university has been built, some social problems will still make trouble in the world without being solved.

First, a global university will do some benefit in different mind between science and religion because it is designed to engage students to solve the world's most persistent social problems. In hundreds years, people argue the knowledge and facts (by)-from different angles, and troubles and struggles will not stop unless the (difference)-different suggestions becomes (together)-unanimous. Here is an example to well support this point: Copernicus, a Polish astronomer and mathematician, who was the proponent of the view that the Earth about its axis in daily motion and in yearly motion about the sun, but this understanding is (difference with)-contrary to the religion‘s understanding, which (makes)-leads to the death of Copernicus. If a global university is designed in that time, this problem may be solved in peace. So a global university is necessary to solve some of the social problems.

感觉例子和观点结合不是很紧密，没能说明世界大学如何能带来好处，解决冲突问题，只有最后一句稍微点了一下，如果能再多加论述会更有说服力

(In)-On the other hand, it seems not all the nations have the ability and the possibility to support the global university. They have differences in culture and religion, and that even lead to struggle and non-corporations, it is hardly possible to develop such university. Some countries with different culture are difficult to be accepted by other countries because (of)去掉 they have different religion or background. In the Islamic country, some old customs are still available and even keep in law, for example, a man in Islamic country can marry 3 wives in his life, and that is a block to solve the problems of women's liberation, also, the Islamic countries are hardly to support the global university either. So it is difficult to exclaim all the nations to support such university.

论述似乎没能说明所有国家对建设世界大学的能力问题，只说明了可能性，感觉应该删掉论点的“ability”

In addition, even though such a global university has been built, some social problems still trouble people. Or to say, the social problems will not be solved fairly. Now a days (a)-an organization named UN seems useless to solve (problems in international)-international problems, it is just like what the global university designed to do. But is it fairly that the way all the problems are solved? Simply answer, no. Some problems are always solved in the way that can product benefit, or have benefit to one side of the difference. So a global university is not useful to solve the problem.

这段很不错，论述比较充分，正如lz所说，由于时间限制没能写完，如果再能举点具体实例就跟好了

In the sum, not all the nations have the ability or willing to support a global university, even if it has some benefits to the social problems. But in order to solve the most persistent social problems, it will do little even if a global university is developed.

总结：lz语病似乎问题不小（也可能是我错了哈，不一定对），应该注意，还有论述再贴近论点就更好了，而且能在限时内写出这么多字，很强啊！反正我现在还没限时成功过，最后多谢lz对我文章的仔细批改，还希望以后多多指教
                                                                                                                                  ——Torero_L

disyooUID: 2223964

恩太棒了谢谢 限时论证的时候总是思维混乱不知道怎么克服 所以前几段无论是语言还是内容都有很大漏洞……