arguement51[076G飞跃小组]skysijie第二次作业

SkysijieUID: 2233317

第一次限时的阿狗，真的是一塌糊涂，大家使劲拍吧。。。:funk:

TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appearedin a medical newsletter.
"Doctors have long suspected thatsecondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severemuscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of astudy of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treatedfor muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sportsmedicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Theirrecuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected.Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a generalphysician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they weretaking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantlyreduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would bewell advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
WORDS: 292          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-2-25

In this argument, the author concludes thatall patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain should take antibiotics toheal quickly in respect of two groups experiments. At the first glance,author's reasoning seems logical, while clearly examining the reasoning; we mayfind some flaws as follow.

To begin with, author asserts that allpatients who have muscle strain have to take antibiotics; meanwhile, doctors'suspects are that some patient who have severe muscle strain can heal quicklyprobably. Obviously, author is ambiguous about the meaning between some andall. Doctors' statement only stand for a tiny proportion of a whole group, whoill with muscle strain, we should not be so sure about the conclusion that thewhole group are fit for the treatment as same as the single severe one.

Further, author has no evidence to supportthe assertion that every patient, who have muscle strain, should treated assevere ones.  Many people, includingmyself, believe that it is totally different about ordinary and severe. Asimple example can illustrate this statement profoundly. A person, who catchesan ordinary cold, cannot treat as a person who has severe cardiopathy. Similarly,we should not put severe and common patient together.

Moreover, the experiment which proved bytwo groups of people have no capability to support author's conclusion.Firstly, author gives no information about the two types of patient. Secondly,we get no idea about how long does this experiment lasts. As we know, it cannotconvince public if a experiment only lasts a few time. Thirdly, the conditionof these two doctors is totally differently. Dr. Newland is a specializeddoctor in sport medicine; at the same time, Dr. Alton is a general physician.We have to suspect about the result of one symptom diagnosed by two kinds ofdoctor.

To draw a conclusion, author’s assertioncannot convince us unless author can provide detail information about twogroups of patients, the experience of two doctors and scientific evidence aboutdoctor’s suspect.

disyooUID: 2223964

第一篇都这样 不要上火慢慢来 以后每次都会提高一点点的 我就是这样 然后慢慢稳定在400左右 然后回在慢慢升的 加油练吧 练习才是王道！

我觉得lz应该看看例文然后熟记一套属于自己的模板

juneteaUID: 2294208

In this argument, the author concludes that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain should take antibiotics toheal quickly in respect of two groups experiments. At the first glance,author's reasoning seems logical, while (after?)clearly examining the reasoning; (,)we mayfind some flaws as follow.

To begin with, (the) author asserts that all patients who have muscle strain have to take antibiotics; meanwhile, doctors'suspects are that some patient (s) who have severe muscle strain can heal quickly probably. Obviously,( the) author is ambiguous about the meaning between some and all. Doctors' statement only stand(S) for a tiny proportion of a whole group, who (is )ill with muscle strain, (and) we should not be so sure about the conclusion that the whole group are fit for the treatment as (as 该成 the)same as the single severe one.

Further, (the) author has no evidence to support the assertion that every patient, who have muscle strain, should treated as severe ones.  Many people, including myself, believe that it is totally different about ordinary and severe. A simple example can illustrate this statement profoundly. A person, who catches an ordinary cold, cannot treat as a person who has severe cardiopathy. Similarly,we should not put severe and common patient together.

Moreover, the experiment which( is) proved by two groups of people have no capability to support (the )author's conclusion.Firstly, (the) author gives no information about the two types of patient. Secondly,we get no idea about how long does(去掉） this experiment lasts. As we know, it can not convince (the) public if a experiment only lasts a few time. Thirdly, the condition(S) of these two doctors is (are) totally differently (different). Dr. Newland is a specialized doctor in sport medicine; at the same time(while,更好把，有转折的意思), Dr. Alton is a general physician.We have to suspect about（去掉） the result of one symptom diagnosed by two kinds of doctor.

To draw a conclusion, author’s assertion can not convince us unless(untill will be better) (the) author can provide detail(ed) information about two groups of patients, the experience of two doctors and scientific evidence about doctor’s suspect.

思路还可以，只是语法错误太多了些．多练习，加油！