ibt凤凰涅磐小组 第二次作业

ibt凤凰涅磐小组UID: 2308768

3月16日布置第二次作业
writing:
Most people like other people to make decision for them. but other not.which do you perfer?Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Speaking:
1.   Describe a place you have never been to but like to go someday.
2.   Do you agree that childhood is the happiest (or precious) time in life



[ 本帖最后由 ibt凤凰涅磐小组 于 2007-3-17 16:27 编辑 ]

janesnowUID: 2272881

沉那么下面……  找得辛苦

ibt凤凰涅磐小组UID: 2308768

writing:
In our lifetime, we have to make million decisions. Whether you believe it or not, we all the end of decision. although lots of decisions are not made by ourselves, but it effect our life indeed. With the time going, we are growing. Now it is the time to make decisions for ourselves.
Only I know myself the most. It sounds very comfortable that others help you making decisions, but have you ever thought the decision made by others is really suitable for you? Only you know what you are, what the condition of you now, what you really need. Others, even your parents, the people who know you most, can not read what are you thinking, what are you really prefer. In china, there is an story.
One day, a men was so busy that he haven’t any spare time to buy a new shows. So he made his wife to do this task. And his wife took him a shows, not suitable; 30minents after, his wife took another shows back, not suitable; one hour went by, his wife took him the third shows, still not suitable. From this story, we can knew that: only one people know himself the most. So just make decision for yourself and handle your life by your owns decisions.
However, you also need others give you advise, not decision. We can not predict the coming future. So we also can not make sure that our own decisions are the best choice to our future. If you just do what you want, maybe you will make lots of mistake choice which you can never realize the defect of you choice without others remind you. I have the experience. Once l want to buy a new cellphone, my friend remind me that the cellphone I’m going to purchase is not suitable for me while it’s price is so high. I just thought I know what I need. No body can make the decision which it should be made by myself. I paid the money and got the trash. This event impressed me deeply. And it appear in my mind every time I make a choice
Last but not least, how to deal with the relationship about our own choice and others advice. Lots of people can not handle the relationship well. Some people just make his decision and take little attention of others remind, such as Bush attack Iraq, make world turbulent. opposite, Some people can not make his decision because he can not appraise others advices is good or bad, and at the last, the people lost morale.
All in all, we need to make decision by ourselves, but we also need to absorb others advice, think whether others remind is advisable.

Speaking:
1.   Describe a place you have never been to but like to go someday.
There is a place I never been to but I like to visit someday. It’s name is the MIT. When I was a child, I have known the fame of MIT. I thought it was a place that the cleverest people in the world lived in. when I grow up, I still wanna visit MIT. It is the place that can make my dream come true. And now, I am sure that MIT is the place I must go to someday, because I am preparing for TOEFL and GRE to get in MIT. So MIT is the place I really want to visit.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                         
2.        Do you agree that childhood is the happiest (or precious) time in life
Yes, I agree that childhood is the happiest time in people’s life. In adult’s life, people have to work for his family, while child just need to enjoy his life. People have to deal the relationship with families, colleague, wife or girlfriend, while child can tell what he thought, do what he want. People have to worry about things here or there, while child make his parents worried and child feels it is funny.

[ 本帖最后由 ibt凤凰涅磐小组 于 2007-3-17 17:54 编辑 ]

横行泡沫UID: 2267226

writing
Eveytime i  come to a problem , i like to make decisions myself. I am grown up, i am old enough
to be responsible for what i decided. I have to face any result which from my decision.

Make a decision alone does require a lot of courage.It is also significant to develop your own
ability to make decisions .When we step into the society ,we get to face many difficult situation
.We have to be independent from our parents.Sometimes you can not rely on anybody,you are forced to decide what to do.For example,you travel alone when a emergency occurs,you have no one around you If you be hesitate,the situation may become worse.What work is just making your own decision.

Make decisions alone do not need discussion.It can be efficient compared with meetings.What is more,you could choose wahtever you like to do ,when making decision yourself,such as shopping in the mall.

But with others suggestion,we do make a better decision.Different people have different view
when face a problem .And your own decision may be not the best one to solve it.Insist on your
opinion could be possiblely leading you to a wrong way. As is konwn to all,teamwork is often
important.why is it so important,because it consist of different dicisions from which the best one is selected .Our parents could be helpful when we come to a important decision.They have more experience ,they went through more tough things,they have a better understanding of life.

Even though making decisin alone is contribute to one's independent .It is recommendable to share your idea with your friends and parents.


speaking

1.the place I like to go is hangzhou where I have never been to before.
   hangzhou  is a beautiful city ,it has many amazing sight such as west lake .
   hangzhou is a modern city ,the city 's life stily is atrractive ,there has the enjoyable life
   which I am dreamed of long before.
   living in hangzhou we could get much jobs offers ,It is easy to find the favourite one.
   so after graduate from college I would like to work there.

2I agree that the childhood is the happist time during the life
  when you was young ,you did not have much to considerate. what is important everyday  is just
  keep quiet. During the childhood, we could play all day long without worry about the homework
  when grow old ,the troubles come. the older the harder the life become.many thing gone when we
  grow up such as friendship .But something we have to face is time does not went back.What we get to
  do is never wasting any time again.

[ 本帖最后由 横行泡沫 于 2007-3-17 18:14 编辑 ]

豌豆毛毛虫UID: 2289272

In our lives, there are millions of things we should consider and decide, sometimes I am very determined, sometimes are not, however, I guess I would like to decide by myself.

I am still a student, the biggest thing in my life until now is that where I choose and decide to study . Many friends and relatives, teachers were going to give me advices when I faced these choices, but I did not accepted them, you may say I missed some very precious chances because of rejecting people's suggestions. In my eyes, I feel I learned more than I lost. I really appreaciate my own choices, from which kowning how to consider different situations and communicating with people arround me. In fact, the process of determining is an extramly good way to study.

Determining by oneself doesn't mean that one never ever listens to others. Talking over one's own situation with somebody else, he may get inspiration from talking and arguing, find what his interests are and watch things more objectively. In the end, he should decide and accept the result of his decision whether it would be good or bad.

Although making decision by yourself may rather difficult, try and You will learn a lot from that.

janesnowUID: 2272881

It is said that our life is made up of choices. Most persons like others to make decision for them while others prefer to do by themselves. In my view, it would better for me own make decision, referring other’s advices.

Most vitally, it is the life that I live and I myself should take on, not others. If I ask others to decide important problem for me, it means this decision may lead to an various bad road when there is a mistake. Then they may reluctant to run the risk of sever results and under the responsibility. So it’s only me that can afford the result whatever it is. On the other hand, if I ask other people to help me make decision on little thing, I may regarded as lacking capability or dependent, and that’s of no goods for me to grow up.

Another reason for me to decide by myself is make decision spend lots of time and efforts. For instant, to choose one University to apply for is a complex work and is vital in my life. It spent much time and effort for me to decide. My friends have various events to deal with; I can’t imagine how busy and nervous they’ll be when I let them to decide for me.  As a result, it’s me that should spend time to decide on what University I’ll apply for.

However, as three minds brighter than genius, it’d better to ask for other people’s advice. Experts can sometimes give me golden suggestion when they get enough information of my situation, such as how can I be able to dwell on Australia. In terms of my friends, they are quite know about me and can keep objective, so their advice is of great use. And as I just ask them for some ideas, they will be relaxed. Besides, we don’t afraid of the relation or friendship of us, as they’re no need to make decision what means they don’t take the responsibility for the results.

As mentioned above, I would like to reference the suggestion from my friends and experts. Nevertheless, I’ll make decision by myself.

[ 本帖最后由 janesnow 于 2007-3-18 13:08 编辑 ]

janesnowUID: 2272881

1.   Describe a place you have never been to but like to go someday.
The place I like to go someday but never been to be is UC Berkeley. It has been years that I know it is a place supports academic free. And the smart people there are not lack passion. As located in California, the scent there is great, blue sky, wonderful sea and warm sunshine. I love blue sea and sunshine, so I hope I can enjoy the sunshine in Berkeley and the vivid wisdom there someday.
2.        Do you agree that childhood is the happiest (or precious) time in life
I do agree the childhood is the precious time in life. No worry about complex things, no need to making money, childhood is light time. As lots ability needs to be bred in one’s childhood, early time in one’s life is of great precious to let children attach things in wide area and develop their different ability. Apart from it, childhood is important time for children form good personality.

[ 本帖最后由 janesnow 于 2007-3-18 13:08 编辑 ]

huohuozhuUID: 202762

该了几个人的
不知道怎么能上传

huohuozhuUID: 202762

In our lifetime, we have to make million decisions. Whether you believe it or not, we all the end of decision.这句话无谓语 although lots of decisions are not made by ourselves, but it effect our life indeed. With the time going, we are growing. Now it is the time to make decisions for ourselves. 逻辑不严密，有now，只有我们要做自己的决定，要有之前，我们因为年龄小不能自己做觉得这样的话
（这样一上来显得很唐突，而且你连最基本的作文格式都不懂？2段之间要空1行，下面几段一样）Only I know myself the most. It sounds very comfortable that others help you making decisions, but have you ever thought the decision made by others is really suitable for you? （个人感觉，这样的文章中，最好不要反问句，即使问了，你自问自答好不？）Only you know what you are, what the condition of you now, what you really need. Others, even your parents, the people who know you most, can not read（这个动词用的好） what are you thinking, what are you really prefer. In china, there is an story.最好这个和下面写为1段
One day, a men was so busy that he haven’t any spare time to buy a new shows. So he made his wife to do this task. And his wife took him a shows, not suitable; 30minents after, his wife took another shows back, not suitable; one hour went by, his wife took him the third shows, still not suitable. From this story, we can knew that: only one people know himself the most. So just make decision for yourself and handle your life by your owns decisions.你是要说淋浴头么？还是什么？应该是shower吧，没查，查了告诉我
However, you also need others give you advise, not decision. We can not predict the coming future. So we also can not make sure that our own decisions are the best choice to our future. If you just do what you want, maybe you will make lots of mistake choice which you can never realize the defect of you choice without others remind you. I have the experience. Once l want to buy a new cellphone, my friend remind me that the cellphone I’m going to purchase is not suitable for me while it’s price is so high. I just thought I know what I need. No body can make the decision which it should be made by myself. I paid the money and got the trash. This event impressed me deeply. And it appear in my mind every time I make a choice
Last but not least, how to deal with the relationship about our own choice and others advice. Lots of people can not handle the relationship well. Some people just make his decision and take little attention of others remind, such as Bush attack Iraq, （有争议的例子不要用，你用的这个例子是最最忌讳的例子）make world turbulent词不错，但用法我不是很详细的知道，有些词是在特定情况下才用的，虽然是个看起来难的词，是否用的准确呢？. （opposite, Some people can not make his decision because he can not appraise others advices is good or bad, and at the last, the people lost morale.这个用在这里有些显得冗余，和本段的主旨无关了。）
All in all, we need to make decision by ourselves, but we also need to absorb others advice, think whether others remind is advisable.
你的段落分的不清晰
基本上大的结构是对的。我的观点和你一样。

huohuozhuUID: 202762

Eveytime i  come to a problem , i like to make decisions myself. I am grown up, i am old enough
to be responsible for what i decided.这句有语法错误吧 I have to face any result which from my decision.这句与主题有关么？

Make a decision alone does require a lot of courage.It is also significant to develop your own
ability to make decisions .When we step into the society 步入社会是这样子说么？我不晓得，感觉像中式英文，查完告诉偶哈,we get to face many difficult situation.We have to be independent from our parents.Sometimes you can not rely on anybody,you are forced to decide what to do.For example,you travel alone when a emergency occurs,you have no one around you If you be hesitate,the situation may become worse.What work is just making your own decision.主题句写在第一句，不然很容易认为你跑题了。而且我觉得你第1句话没用。

Make decisions alone do not need discussion.It can be efficient compared with meetings.What is more,you could choose wahtever you like to do ,when making decision yourself,such as shopping in the mall.？？？？是不是应该加上1笔，在某些情况下。。。？

But with错了吧 others suggestion,we do make a better decision.Different people have different viewwhen face a problem .And your own decision may be not the best one to solve it.Insist on your opinion could 这个地方直接用lead 就可以了吧be possiblely leading you to a wrong way. As is konwn to all,这样的废话加上不错，很好~~~teamwork is often important.why is it so important,这个问句太搞笑了。because it consist of different dicisions from which the best one is selected .Our parents could be helpful when we come to a important decision.They have more experience ,they went through more tough things,they have a better understanding of life.

Even though making decisin alone is contribute to one's independent .It is recommendable to share your idea with your friends and parents.本段算让步么？那你前边写太多正的段了。

把你的作文，放进word里，你会发现很多错误，请自己修改这些问题。
觉得没展开，哪段都没展开

janesnowUID: 2272881

批了那么多人，真人好人~~~！

huohuozhuUID: 202762

说了N遍。。终于稍微能见人了：（

huohuozhuUID: 202762

ibt凤凰涅磐小组UID: 2308768

批毛毛虫：

In our lives, there are millions of things we should consider and decide(好像我的阿，呵呵), sometimes I am very determined, sometimes are（I am） not, however, I guess I would like to decide by myself.

(第二段的主题句貌似放在第一段的结尾,最好放在第二段首，看起来明晰) （when）I am(was) still a student, the biggest thing in my life until now is that where I choose and decide to study(where to study chose and decided by myself.) . Many friends and relatives, teachers were going to give me advices when I faced these choices, but I did not accepted(adopted) them, you may say(think) I missed some very precious chances because of rejecting people's suggestions. (语句比较单调，多用连接词) However,In my eyes, I feel I learned more than I lost. I really appreaciate my own choices, from which kowning how to consider different situations and communicating with people arround me. In fact, the process of determining is an extramely(extremely) good way to study.(这里逻辑貌似有点不是很清楚)

Determining by oneself doesn't mean that one never ever listens（listen） to others. Talking over one's own situation with somebody else, he may get inspiration from talking and arguing, find what his interests are(in) and watch things more objectively. In the end, he should decide and accept the result of his decision whether it would be good or bad.

Although making decision by yourself may rather difficult, try and You will learn a lot(lots) from that.

(文章短的可以，这个貌似太简单了发。希望下次认真点)







批SNOW:
It is said that our life is made up of choices. Most persons（person意重在个人，用persons读起来怪怪的） like others to make decision for them while others prefer to do by themselves. In my view, it would better for me own make decision, referring other’s advices.（观点明确！）

Most vitally, it is the life that I live and I myself should take on, not others. If I ask others to decide (the way to solve the) important problem（不通） for me, it means this decision may lead to an various bad road when there is a mistake. Then they may reluctant to run the risk of sever results and under the responsibility. So it’s only me that can afford the result whatever it is(would be). On the other hand, if I ask other people to help me make decision on little thing, I may regarded as lacking capability or dependent, and that’s of no goods for me to grow up.

Another reason for me to decide by myself is make decision spend lots of time and efforts. For instant, to choose one University to apply for is a complex work and is vital in my life. It spent much time and effort for me to decide. My friends have various events to deal with; I can’t imagine how busy and nervous they’ll be when I let them to decide for me.  As a result, it’s me that should spend time to decide on what University I’ll apply for. (第二点创意不错，至少我没想到，最好段首中心句能写的更清楚)

However, as three minds brighter than genius （这个是自创的还是国外固有的？有空PM告诉我）, it’d better to ask for other people’s advice. Experts can sometimes give me golden suggestion when they get enough information of my situation, such as how can I be able to dwell on Australia. In terms of my friends, they are quite know about me and can keep objective, so their advice is of great use. And as I just ask them for some ideas, they will be relaxed. Besides, we don’t afraid of the relation or friendship of（between） us, as they’re no need to make decision what means they don’t take the responsibility for the results.

As mentioned above, I would like to reference the suggestion from my friends and experts. Nevertheless, I’ll make decision by myself.(整篇文章写的比较清晰，读起来也比较顺，不错；末尾段再丰满丰满吧)

huohuozhuUID: 202762

批一下莫雪的口语,你口语的误区就是用复杂句.口语要简练,所以用简单句
而且,词要用简单的词.