issue171 oceanus4月作文小组4月2日作业

oceanusUID：2283238

TOPIC: ISSUE171 - "People who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for the public good."
WORDS: 436          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-4-2
提纲：
1、开头：追求个人兴趣的人能对社会有贡献，但社会同样需要为社会服务的人
2、追求个人兴趣的人能对社会有贡献
3、如果人人都追求个人兴趣利益，社会经不适于人类生活。
4、社会学要为任命服务的人。
5、总结

It is true that during the process that people purse their own intellectual interests, they can contribute a lot to the world, but we also need a lot of people who try to act for the public good.

On the one hand, common sense tells us that almost everyone pursues their aims for purely personal reasons. When people begin to do affairs, they always put their own benefits on the first place. To some extent, no one will do a free work for another one; no one will give his process, money, house, and so on, to others without a reason. Yet, it may seem ruthless, but it is the true and reasonable, and in the process they purse their own benefits, they also create merit to the society. When workers work for their salary, they also products productivities; when a writer writes a book, the book also enrich the reader's life. In short, everyone pursues his own benefits is at its most commonplace and during the process they also create merit.

On the other hand, if everyone in the word all considers themselves, the world will be another scenery. Maybe the world will be full of violence, war and quarrel, rather than pleasure, blessedness, affection and hope. Everyone can do anything in order to achieve his aims. People cannot open their hearts to others. There is no communication, cooperation, development and we live in the word without any happiness. That's so fearful.

However, just because there are still many people who try to act for the public good, the world is in a good condition now. Those people affect those around them or even the whole country. Take Leifeng, who regard helping others as pleasure, as an example. He is helping others in every minute during his life and has never stopped till he leaves us. His heroical storys moved several generations and the whole Chinese adore him; everyone study from him. Even now he is also our hero in our hearts. Besides, Zhou Enlai, Chinese prime minister whose aim of study is for the growing up of China, served people during his life. In his mind, the first-rate importance is the benefits of people. Because of the existence of those people, people study from them and begin to consider others' benefits when they do affairs. In a word, without those people who try to act for the public good, we can never have a stable living environment.

To sum up, people can create benefit when they pursue their aims, but we can never depart from those who try to act for the public good.

[ 本帖最后由 oceanus 于 2007-4-3 09:38 编辑 ]

寂寞樱花UID：2306511

It is true that during the process that people purse their own intellectual interests, they can contribute a lot to the world, but we also need a lot of people who try to act for the public good.(观点基本是明确的，没什么问题，但是开头可以写的更吸引人一点。）

On the one hand, common sense tells us that almost everyone pursues their aims for purely personal reasons. When people begin to do affairs, they always put their own benefits on the first place. To some extent, no one will do a free work for another one; no one will give his process, money, house, and so on, to others without a reason.（我知道这里是想说人们一般做事情都是有自己的目的的，但是和主题扣的不是非常紧，有点喧宾夺主。） Yet, it may seem ruthless, but it is the true and reasonable, and in the process they purse their own benefits, they also create merit to the society. When workers work for their salary, they also products productivities; when a writer writes a book, the book also enrich the reader's（writer？） life.（这个论据有点牵强，特别是后面一个，说也只说了一个方面，可以换成具体一点的例子，比如某个作家写名著写发了之类的。如果一定要这么写，后面一个也要兼顾一下作者和读者两方面的受益。） In short, everyone pursues his own benefits is at its most commonplace and during the process they also create merit.（这一段没什么其他的大问题，如果论据再加强一点会更有说服力的。）

On the other hand, if everyone in the word all considers themselves, the world will be another scenery. Maybe the world will be full of violence, war and quarrel, rather than pleasure, blessedness, affection and hope. Everyone can do anything in order to achieve his aims. People cannot open their hearts to others. There is no communication, cooperation, development and we live in the word without any happiness. That's so fearful.（这一段怎么说呢，论据肯定是缺了，感觉和我那段说适度追求的内容差不多，但是只给了反面的结果，如果有东西支持一下会比较好，比如希特勒，可以用来写一写。）

However, just because there are still many people who try to act for the public good, the world is in a good condition now. Those people affect those around them or even the whole country. Take Leifeng, who regard helping others as pleasure, as an example. He is helping others in every minute during his life and has never stopped till he leaves us. His heroical storys moved several generations and the whole Chinese adore him; everyone study from him. Even now he is also our hero in our hearts. Besides, Zhou Enlai, Chinese prime minister whose aim of study is for the growing up of China, served people during his life. In his mind, the first-rate importance is the benefits of people. Because of the existence of those people, people study from them and begin to consider others' benefits when they do affairs. In a word, without those people who try to act for the public good, we can never have a stable living environment.（这段和上一段的承接上如果再自然一点会更好的，其他感觉还不错。）

To sum up, people can create benefit when they pursue their aims, but we can never depart from those who try to act for the public good.（结尾和开头差不多，一般开头结尾加起来一共一百字吧，表明观点没有问题，不过可以写的稍微多变一点，但是这个不是很重要，重要的还是中间的部分，最好写的充实一点。）


回应LZ要求稍微看了一下，呵呵，请改作业的同学还是要认真的改哈~
恩，感觉写issue思想问题不是很大，因为可以借别人的用，考试之前把提纲都整理出来就行。但是论据的准备还是要的，这个不能抄别人的，要不雷同就麻烦了，建议看一看作文百宝箱之类的东西，多准备一些例子什么的，只要知道大概就可以，看看什么人做了什么事就行，然后能套进作文里就OK，反正后面的评论是要自己扣着题目写的。
其他的没什么问题，而且是限时写的我觉得已经不错了，如果再充实一下的话应该会更好的。
加油哦~