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Is imagination more important than knowledge as the speaker asserts? In my point that the imagination plays an important role in science and academic fields, however knowledge is the essential part in science rather than imagination. (清楚)
Admittedly, Einstein once said "Imagination is more important than knowledge". Though I do not agree with it, this saying really indicates the importance of imagination in science. (加个to some extent吧,前面都反对了,这里尽量委婉) Imagination promotes the development of science, (空洞无用的话) or on other word, imagination create the development of science in some extent. (还是空) As far as I can conjure, all discoveries or break-throughs in science history are born of the imaginary minds. (虽然空,但是看到这句终于知道下面要来实例了) Without the crazy idea of traveling around the world, America may never appear in our world. (不是想象力的典型) Without the fantastic dream of flying as birds, planes may never built by Wright Brother. (这个倒是很典型,不错) Imagination is the resource of creativity. (这话放前面多好) "I see, I come, I conquer”. (这句话用意何在?) If we never dream of the future, we just bogged down in today's realistic world (不错.应该放前面.前面的怎么都是空话) and how can we achieve in the roads to the future. After all, the imagination creates the new idea in science. (总结很烂...但总比没有好)
However, only imagination is not enough (转折不错.一个enough摆平问题.最近很多人转折的时候直接一棒子把前面的论证全部否定掉,看了我很无语) to promote the development in science at all, (删了吧...前面刚夸你转折流畅的...) and knowledge is the essential part in success. Imagination only provides a possibility, which may lead to both success and failure. What kinds of dream have may be achieved successfully? (删,后面一句就够了.) How to make the dream come true? Only the knowledge does. (构思很漂亮,没有知识支撑的想象力只能是空想) Knowledge is the key to judge such dreams and lead them to success. (感觉如果你下面能按照judge和lead分成顺序两层来说,这段思路就完胜了) In our histories, there are so many hypothesis exist, while only a few of them are true natural laws. As some people describe the world is flat, the others describe it is round. (...和知识判定和引导想象不是很match...来个永动机做反例可能还好吧~个人现想的...) The imagination creates such ideas, but which one of them is true? (重复了!删) After Magellan sailed aournd the world, people begin to trust the round-world model. That is to say only verifying by knowledge, we can establish the actually fact in our world. (无语了,这个哪里是知识检验想象,简直就是实践出真知嘛...) Without knowledge, we would be missing in numerous possibilities and lost the truth. (前面的开头很吸引人,到了这里的论证基本是完败...) Different people may hold different dream. (没头没脑来了这么一句,前不找村后不着店.) How to achieve such dreams? Still by knowledge, as the plane, we have to first know the physics and machines then realize the flying dream. (这个才是你要重点阐述然后再抽象升华论证的.) The sequence may never be altered. (又来没头没脑了...) In short, the knowledge provides us to testify the idea and make it come true. (这一段实在太可惜了)
Beside, science is to promote our lives, so how to apply science into our realistic world is the most important. (没看出和knowledge v.s. imagination有什么关系~) Thus, why I say the knowledge is more important than imagination. (你今天没头没脑的话怎么这么多?没看懂) Nowadays our world is full of masterpiece created by that intelligence. (又扯到艺术跟智力上来了...看来是要迷路了...) Thanks to the computers, scientists can easily stimulate their experience. Thanks to the auto-machines, the workers only need to sit in the controlling room. Those scientific masterpieces may be born of imagination, however, if the scientists and workers lack the knowledge how to use them and then the great discoveries at all are meaningless and take no effect in our society. (请在前面表明观念,没有知识就不能用这些想象力的产物.前面不表明态度看了非常晕的) After all, knowledge teaches us how to use the advanced equipments and make our lives more convenient. (又是一个失败的段落...)
In sum, imagination may create an idea of future, while the knowledge make the idea come true and serve for our society.
有一个很好的思路
可以第一段来讲到想象力的作用
然后按照知识发挥作用的时间顺序,现judge,然后lead,最后utilize
可惜你组织的太差.
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