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amyxu1985UID: 2204482

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time because valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.

The title statement is the focus in these days and speech about it would surely the top lines of most newspapers. To agree or disagree with it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons.
But if one has considered the following perspective, he/she could only agree with the title statement as I do.

The first reason can be seen by every person if we have the experience before we do something, we will understand the process clearer than before, we will know how to avoid the barrier. To illustrate this , there is an examples that is very persuasive . Last year, I interned in a foreign trade company, I am a new person there, so I don’t familiar with the own computer system of the company, and other collages were very busy at that time, I didn’t want to disturb them, then I tried to learned it by myself. Suddenly, I’m uncertain which puch-button I have touched. The computer turned to black .Not only my computer, but all the colleges’ computer were turned to black. I was so embarrassment at that time. Then an elder kind college came to me and teached me how to use it. So I am sure of that I won’t make the same mistake next time. This is a useful experience in my daily life.

The second reason for my propensity for the experience seemed difficult is valuable for our future. Math used to be a very difficult subject to me, but once I learned how to identify and distinguish equations it become a whole lot easier. Since that time, I am not so bored with math.

While both things may have their advantages and disadvantages, they can be applied under different circumstances. Of course, some experiences that we learned before may be no use for our future. There is a good evidence to show that the periodic table of elements is the difficult thing when we studied Chemistry, and it is no use for the people who do not use Chemistry in their later job. Thus it is no valuable for our future.

But if all these factors are contemplated , I agree with the difficult experiences may value to our future carry more weight than do not have value to our future. From what has been discuss above, we may finally draw the conclusion that we should experience as more as we can in our daily life, and we will do better later.

Br嗳UID: 2298776

呵呵,,
三段
   三行,,我觉得应该是I m not familiar with.. 八..  
   倒数第三行末尾,,我觉得是  I was so embarrassed ..
   倒数第二行,,older好像会比elder好点,, elder好像是形容兄弟姐妹之间的..
末段
   二行,, what has been discussed..

呵呵,, 也许是我懂得太少了,,没见过你那种说法..

amyxu1985UID: 2204482

谢谢!!!

Br嗳UID: 2298776

还有吖,,我觉得末端第一句话是错的.. 语法很乱..
你改改八.. 谓语太多了..

应该说 I believe that the idea that... carry more weight than that...
我就是在语法上说一下,, 没有语言润色哈.. LZ把语法改对之后再修饰一下..嗯..

小小建议..

[ 本帖最后由 Br嗳 于 2007-5-14 22:03 编辑 ]

homejeopardUID: 2268073

有的话的逻辑....太汉语了, 比如第二段第一句, 你看是不是换一个顺序?