Issue17 【0710G Victors互助小组】 puzilong

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Issue17
"There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
   
For one thing, actually you can never say that it is just or unjust, because anything is a double-edged sword, which have advantage and disadvantage, so is law. To some people, some law is just, while to other people, it is not. But most of laws are accepted by us, this only prove that law is just for most of us. Regulating our society rely on law is what we do all the times, from early time of mankind to now. In almost all the people eyes, law equals fairness. To law, we definitely believe it will let us live in a just society. It seems to never be aberrancy, then what drive us amending and changing our laws in order to maintain our so-called fairness? Private property and moral.
Totally, our desire to private property create moral. To be frank, moral is a very socialized thing, which embody as mental norms. To human beings, as a kind of animal, the prime mission is survival, but when their food is enough, protecting private property is the most important thing. That time, a group of people, usually a tribe, would come to consensus to maintain their belongings. Gradually moral took shape.
Moral, as social basic norm, is what regulate our society and our behavior no matter past or now. It is accepted and recognized by most people, which tell people what they can do, what can be not done, what is just, what is not. In original society, without real law, moral became the norm of society. The universally acknowledged sages or leader distributed the food and land all the members of the tribe got equally. They did not think the sage and leader themselves is fair, while the moral rule planted in their brain let them believe that equal distribution was right. Later, moral, the thinking existed in people’s brain, was written down, that is, law. Of course, not all moral norms are recorded on the papers, therefore some unjust laws are enacted which benefit a few part of people. That time, moral started to work. Most of people would require amend or abolish those unjust laws through uprising or insurgence. Hereby, although maintain our justice is every individual’s responsibility, it is a spontaneous process due most partly to moral is accommodating.
In a word, our thoughts decide our behavior, we will disobey and resist those unjust laws, but in the world, many things we can not control, like change of laws, is a natural process with social development.


[ 本帖最后由 puzilong 于 2007-6-18 12:45 编辑 ]

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For one thing后面没有对应的信号词, actually you can never say that it is just or unjust, because anything is a double-edged sword, which have advantage and disadvantage, so is law. To some people, some law is just, while to other people, it is not. But most of laws are accepted by us, this only prove that law is just for most of us. Regulating our society rely on law is what we do all the times, from early time of mankind to now. In almost all the people eyes, law equals fairness. Toas for law, we definitely believe it will let us live in a just society. It seems to never be aberrancy, then what drive us amending and changing our laws in order to maintain our so-called fairness? Private property and moral.第一段缺少了一点与本issue的连接，应该由原论题引出自己的观点。上来就自说自话让人感觉有点突然，而且不利于读者明确你的论证思路
Totally, our desire to private property create moral. To be frank, moral is a very socialized thing, which embody as mental norms. To human beings, as a kind of animal, the prime mission is survival, but when their food is enough, protecting private property is the most important thing. That time, a group of people, usually a tribe, would come to consensus to maintain their belongings. Gradually moral took shape. 这一段单独拿出来谈Moral，感觉很孤立，最好能用几句话提炼出与论题的关系。
Moral, as social basic norm, is what regulate our society and our behavior no matter past or now. It is accepted and recognized by most people, which tell people what they can do, what can be not done, what is just, what is not. In original society, without real law, moral became the norm of society. The universally acknowledged sages or leader distributed the food and land all the members of the tribe got equally. They did not think the sage and leader themselves is fair, while the moral rule planted in their brain let them believe that equal distribution was right. Later, moral, the thinking existed in people’s brain, was written down, that is, law. Of course, not all moral norms are recorded on the papers, therefore some unjust laws are enacted which benefit a few part of people. That time, moral started to work. Most of people would require amend or abolish those unjust laws through uprising or insurgence. Hereby, although maintain our justice is every individual’s responsibility, it is a spontaneous process due most partly to moral is accommodating.
In a word, our thoughts decide our behavior, we will disobey and resist those unjust laws, but in the world, many things we can not control, like change of laws, is a natural process with social development.
感觉Lz的这篇文章整体上有些问题，首先观点不是很明确，层次也不是很分明；另外，只就moral进行了论证，论据过于单一，不是很充分；这篇Issue与Issue48写的结构上有很大变化，个人感觉应该一定程度上模式化，这样在规定时间内易于把握全局。加油！！

[ 本帖最后由 唐诗三百首 于 2007-6-18 16:24 编辑 ]