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发表于 2007-6-3 15:39:32 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
"Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
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Should goverment preserve publicly owned wilderness areas with few people in their natural state? It is a problem which has puzzled
many officials as the development of the cities.Determining whether government should preserve those areas or not could be weighed in many aspects.Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view.On balance,my view is that it is a best choice
for the government to preserve those publicly owned widerness areasin their natural state.
To begin with,as is known to us all, the more developed our cities are,the more pollution will happened in these central palaces and nearby.Accordingly,the main fuction of preserving those remote widerness areas is to balance the enviroment.Comparing to
the developed cities, those wilerness areas ofen have better enviroment for less exploring.As the amazing exploring in the cities,the resouces are being less and less,so most people fixed their eyes to those remote areas for further exploring ,of course,and more pollution.
At this point,government should play a role to balance the development and the enviroment.We should explore resouces more efficent rather than explore more areas.So,government should not let the foot of exploring put in these remote areas.

Main purpose of exploring those remote and wild areas may be that people need more resources for developing.As their resources in cities
are running out,most people would like to explore those wilder places for resouces,even some are unknown.Some other complicated
problems will also arise as the result of exploring in the wild places.These unknown resouces gained from those areas will be more efficent if we explore them in the future for we will have better technology to make full use of the unknown resources.Take an example,in 1983,the Research Center of China had sent a group of reseachers to the west part of China to explore some resources.As result,they found many useful metals and some of the metals were unknown.And the scientists left the unknown metals.But few years later,we have found that the unknown metals are very useful for producing electricity. It illustrates the point very well.So,the government should preserve
these remote and wild places.

Addmitedly,there is no denying that exploring those wilde place for our courntry is beneficial to our ecnomics,and we will find more and
more recources for future use.As is known to us all,Chinese government have made a plan for exploring for more gas from the west
part of China and bring these gas the to east.It will have a lasting significant influence in China.
To sum up,as all the things I have mentioned above,exploring in these wild place will bring us some useful rescources which will have
great influence on the ecnomics,and also it will bring pollution to these places.So we should find a balance poit in exploring
the wild areas and preserving these places.

这篇实在是感觉没多少话要说,但是第二篇文章,已经感觉有所入门,至少在结构方面,语言方面我想还是我的弱点,希望大家加以指正.:loveliness:
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发表于 2007-6-4 07:33:57 |只看该作者
Should goverment preserve publicly owned wilderness areas with few people in their natural state? It is a problem which has puzzled
many officials as the development of the cities.Determining whether government should preserve those areas or not could be weighed in many aspects.Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view.(这个有废话嫌疑)On balance,my view is that it is a best choice
for the government to preserve those publicly owned widerness areasin their natural state.
To begin with,as is known to us all, the more developed our cities are,the more pollution will happened in these central palaces and nearby.Accordingly,the main fuction of preserving those remote widerness areas is to balance the enviroment.Comparing(ed) to
the developed cities, those wilerness areas ofen have better enviroment for less exploring(?).As the amazing exploring in the cities,the resouces are being less and less,so most people fixed their eyes to those remote areas for further exploring ,of course,and more pollution(没写完吗?).(可以再写一写人类这样做的危害,一个more pollution 好象太少啦)
At this point,government should play a role to balance the development and the enviroment.We should explore resouces more efficent rather than explore more areas.So,government should not let the foot of exploring put in these remote areas.

Main purpose of exploring those remote and wild areas may be that people need more resources for developing.As their resources in cities
are running out,most people would like to explore those wilder places for resouces,even some are unknown.Some other complicated
problems will also arise as the result of exploring in the wild places.These unknown resouces gained from those areas will be more efficent if we explore them in the future for we will have better technology to make full use of the unknown resources.Take an example,in 1983,the Research Center of China had sent a group of reseachers to the west part of China to explore some resources.As result,they found many useful metals and some of the metals were unknown.And the scientists left the unknown metals.But few years later,we have found that the unknown metals are very useful for producing electricity. It illustrates the point very well.So,the government should preserve
these remote and wild places.(观点很好,但是好象跟主题联系不紧密,想办法使他们更有联系吧)

Addmitedly,there is no denying that exploring those wilde place for our courntry is beneficial to our ecnomics,and we will find more and
more recources for future use.As is known to us all,Chinese government have made a plan for exploring for more gas from the west
part of China and bring these gas the to east.It will have a lasting significant influence in China.
To sum up,as all the things I have mentioned above,exploring in these wild place will bring us some useful rescources which will have
great influence on the ecnomics,and also it will bring pollution to these places.So we should find a balance poit in exploring
the wild areas and preserving these places.

(这篇文章确实很难,汗,楼主的观点应该说是比较新颖,但是展开联系不明显,还有,时间有限,那种在四六级作文里的套话就不要写啦~~~~~从后文看你水平远在那个之上啦)

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