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[求助] 帮忙改一下作文,谢谢~~ [复制链接]

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发表于 2007-6-11 17:58:00 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
问题Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of
mmoney, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living >
Analyze each view point and take a stand >Give specific reasons for
your position.

How much money to earn disturbs many poeple as the money not only
presents the wealth you have but influnces you a lot in your daily
life as well. Some one

like to have a large sum of money  while others are just  willing to
have the mount that suits for their life. In my opion, each way has
pros and cons, and

you should decide on your own.

A great deal of money will enable you to do what you want to do.
Imagining you have earned lots of money every month, you can go to the
concert to

apprieciate the music, have dinner with your girlfriend or boyfriend
in a expensive restaurant, and travel around the world to experience
diferent ways of

life. You can even go to the outer space if you have money to pay the
NASA. Things will change as you have lots of money , and you can have
a fantabulous

life that you never imagine before. I think that is why that now a
large number of  people chase the money all the time.

On the other hand, money is not always effective, and large amounts of
money may bring many problems. For one thing ,You can buy flowers to
your friends but

you can not buy their heart. Many wealth holders have suffered some
women who just like their money but not themselves. For another thing,
money will get you

in some troubles which will hurt you a lot. You may be hijacked in the
streat , or you may be asked for money when your parrents are kidnaped
by the

criminals, and you may be suspious to earn money in a illegal way.
Sometimes, money will make you be crazy. So money do not serve you all
the time.

In a word,large amounts of  money will bring happiness and annoyance
alike, so you should decide acounting for your own business. According
to my case, I would like to have sufficient but not too much money as
I do not concern about the comfortable life.
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发表于 2007-6-11 18:31:07 |只看该作者
把格式改好看点吧
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帮忙改一下作文,谢谢~~
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