生如夏花小组第一次作业 sunflower

sunflowerchenziUID: 2328335

写作：
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer


The neighborhood I live has well facilities, such as table tennis room, library, but no restaurant. From my point of view, it is advisable to support building a restaurant near my community rather than oppose it.My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

In the first place, residents can derive more time for relaxation from the proposed restaurant. We always feel tired and boring to cook after a busy day, but have to prepare for it. After dinner, dishes and bows on the table should be washed. It is a tough process for a person who is really overworked. If the restaurant builds nearby, we will not only save our time for enjoyments but also have a more delicious dinner.

In the second place, amounts of jobs can be offered by the restaurant and the local economy will be increased. A restaurant needs cooks, waitresses, manager and so on, which gives some opportunities to those who are unemployed. The restaurant will purchase a great deal of fresh food everyday, which impulse the food trade in local area. What is more, the restaurant will provide the place for negotiating the business, which can bring investment to our community.

Finally, the restaurant will pay tax which can be used to improve the environments of the society. Tax is one of the most important incomes of a country. According to the law, the restaurant must be taxed to develop our society. We can use it to broaden our streets, which help the traffic less heavy. It will also be available to guarantee the right of the restaurant and our community.

Admittedly, establishing a restaurant has it own disadvantages, such as pollution and expensive cost. However, eating out do more benefit than harm, like saving residents’ time, offering jobs and paying tax to the country. I therefore reinforce my standpoint to support building a restaurant beside my community.

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口语：
discribe the most important decision that you made in yourlife

I made a lot of dicisions in my life. Among them, the most essential one is going abroad for further study. I made it when i was 18.  On one hand, it is the first dicision i made by myself. Before that, my parents always control my life.On the other hand, it is the dicision which will give me a different future.I will touch different culture,which will probably change the way I think of things.That's   why i say it is important.

[ 本帖最后由 sunflowerchenzi 于 2007-7-1 18:42 编辑 ]

ernest81888UID: 2247639

看了口语，我觉得很棒，长短正好。羡慕！~

森林116UID: 2272614

的确很精炼,,,,但我以为稍微少了点呢,,,LZ读完要多少S啊?

sunflowerchenziUID: 2328335

>45。。
本来是想说三个理由的，但是发现时间来不及

PapillonFoxUID: 2171945

写作：
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer


The neighborhood I live (+in) has well facilities, such as table tennis room, library, but no restaurant (but已经表示转折，有否定的意思，所以貌似不应该加no). From my point of view, it is advisable to support building a restaurant near my community (是不是和neighborhood有点区别啊) rather than oppose it. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

In the first place, residents can derive more time for relaxation from the proposed restaurant. We always feel tired and boring to cook after a busy day, but have to prepare for it. After dinner, dishes and bows (bowls) on the table should be washed. It is a tough process for a person who is really overworked. If the restaurant builds (被动) nearby, we will not only save our time for enjoyments but also have a more delicious dinner.

In the second place, amounts of jobs can be offered by the restaurant and the local economy will be increased（developed经济不能增加能发展）. A restaurant needs cooks, waitresses, manager and so on, which (定语从句中的which指代不清) gives some opportunities to those who are unemployed. The restaurant will purchase a great deal of fresh food everyday, which impulse the food trade in local area. What is more, the restaurant will provide the place for negotiating the business, which can bring investment to our community (这个句子好像不太恰当，前后没有必然联系，在这个饭店吃饭怎么会给这个社区带来投资呢？).

Finally, the restaurant will pay tax which can be used to improve the environments of the society. (和前面的句子转折过大，加上It is known to all好些) Tax is one of the most important incomes of a country. According to the law, the restaurant must be taxed to develop our society. We can use it to broaden our streets, which help the traffic less heavy (再想两个例子，然后写成排比句式，那句子就会漂亮的多). It will also be available to guarantee the right of the restaurant and our community (此句有点莫名其妙了，句意跨度太大).

Admittedly, establishing a restaurant has it own disadvantages, such as pollution and expensive cost. However, eating out do more benefit than harm, like saving residents’ time, offering jobs and paying tax to the country (前后一致，去掉吧). I therefore reinforce my standpoint to support building a restaurant beside my community.

意思和结构还是比较清楚的，但是有些句子表达的还不够好，所以整个文章看起来比较生硬。
也就是说所有的句子完全按照我们学习的语法进行书写的，用几个其他的用法效果会更好。
语法错误就自己注意吧，哈哈。
我的水平也不高，大家共同进步！



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口语：
discribe the most important decision that you made in yourlife

I made a lot of dicisions in my life. Among them, the most essential one is going abroad for further study. I made it when i was 18.  On one hand, it is the first dicision i made by myself. Before that, my parents always control（这个词好像不太恰当）my life.On the other hand, it is the dicision which will give me a different future. I will touch different cultures, which (改成and it, 前面有一个定语从句了) will probably change the way I think of things. That's   why i say it is important.

语法错误不说了，你把它贴到word里就都看到了，反正说的时候那边也不知道。
口语没什么经验，我个人觉得挺简单清楚的，不过我们作出的重要决定都是一样的啊！
我再去看看别人是怎么写的。