生如夏花小组作业帖--by sljlj

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独立写作，汗一个，超时了，而且居然开始字数都不够，看来aw考过太久狠狠退步了
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer
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I strongly oppose the plan that building a new restaurant in our neighborhood. Although it may bring some convenience, it also brings serious troubles such as large numbers of customers and then noise and unsafety. I believe disadvantages overweigh advantages of building a new restaurant in my neighborhood. I will express my opinion as follows.

Admittedly, a new restaurant will help to make my life more convenient than before. For example, when I have had a really big day in the company and want to have something delicious for supper and I am too tired to make it myself, restaurant is a good option, especially a one just in my neighborhood. I can enjoy my supper in the restaurant without effort. So such a restaurant can serve me in this level.

However, numerous problems would come with the building of a restaurant. The most obvious one is that the restaurant would have a large number of customers. All kinds of persons, maybe some criminals, are included. This may seriously weaken the safety condition for me and my family. What is more, even if crimes do not happen, the customers do will make noise and have significant negative effect to my life.

In addition, usually restaurants are open for long hours, so a one in my neighborhood will undoubtedly influence my life greatly. The restaurant may close very late everyday or even never close at all, and possibly I cannot have a good rest in its open hours due to its noise and shining light. It may also happen to my families. And without a good rest we cannot work or study with our best efforts. So such a restaurant may bother our lives seriously.

All in all, I oppose building a new restaurant in my neighborhood in that it may bring great troubles to me and my families. For a quiet and safe environment, I prefer not to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood.


口语
Describe the most important decision that you made in your life
录了6遍，后来的四遍一不小心删掉了，基本都是惨不忍睹
In fact, I don’t think I’ve made lots of decisions in my life so far. And among the limited ones, I think the most important one is that I decided to study abroad. You know, I have taken lots of time to prepare for the GRE and TOEFL test, and of course this helped me made great progress in English. Further more, if everything’s OK, I will go to USA to get Ph. D next fall. I believe that will have significant influence in my life. So I think deciding to go abroad to do my further study is the most important decision I’ve made so far in my life.

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I strongly oppose the plan that building a new restaurant in our neighborhood. Although it may bring some convenience, it also brings serious troubles such as large numbers of customers and then noise and unsafety. I believe disadvantages overweigh advantages (用的不错,有强烈对比~~)of building a new restaurant in my neighborhood. I will express my opinion as follows.(用following by好些吧~~开头不错,很简洁而有内容)
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Admittedly, a new restaurant will help to make my life more convenient than before. For example, when I have had(可以不要或者用finished吧~~) a really (really a) big day in the company and want to have something delicious for supper and I am too tired to make it myself, restaurant is a good option, especially a one (it is) just in my neighborhood. I can enjoy my supper in the restaurant without effort. So such a restaurant can serve me in this level. (这个让步貌似太详细了,,,而且让步最好放在结尾前面说,不要放在这么前面,,)

However, numerous problems would come with the building of a restaurant. The most obvious one is that the restaurant would have a large number of customers. All kinds of persons, maybe some criminals, are included.(最好写成一句话) This may seriously weaken the safety condition for me and my family. What is more, even if crimes do not happen,(what) the customers do will make noise and have significant negative effect to my life.

In addition, usually restaurants are open for long hours, so a one in my neighborhood will undoubtedly influence my life greatly(badly).The restaurant may close very late everyday or even never close at all, and possibly I cannot have a good rest in its open hours due to its noise and shining light. It may also happen to my families. And without a good rest we cannot work or study with our best efforts. So such a restaurant may bother our lives seriously.(以上两段可以合成一段,我听说IBT作文只要3段也就够了,,合成一段的话可以显的你的这段说理更充实些)

All in all, I oppose building a new restaurant in my neighborhood in that it may bring great troubles to me and my families. For a quiet and safe environment, I prefer not to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood. (结尾不错)

没什么多说的,AW遗风啊,,,个人小小的建议是你可以把几个句子合并成一个从句,显得结构紧凑,整篇文章里出现那么几个长句会让老外刮目相看的哦^^~~加油~~


口语
Describe the most important decision that you made in your life
录了6遍，后来的四遍一不小心删掉了，基本都是惨不忍睹
In fact, I don’t think I’ve made lots of decisions in my life so far. And among the limited ones, I think the most important one is that I decided to study abroad. You know, I have taken lots of time to prepare for the GRE and TOEFL test, and of course this helped me made great progress in English. Further more (futhermore,恩,不错,层次感一下出来了~~), if everything’s OK, I will go to USA to get Ph. D next fall. I believe that (it) will have (be) a significant influence in my life. (这个中间可以说说为什么重要啊,比如你觉得美国的学术很尖端~去美国是你的梦想之类拍拍老美马屁,,,,呵呵) So I think deciding to go abroad to do my further study is the most important decision I’ve made so far in my life.(整体很流利,不过是不是可以再多说点啊??比如说说为什么这个决定是如此的important呢?稍微把语速放快点,据说老外比较看重信息量大的哦~~)

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偷偷的用生入夏花的主题来练习一下,用了28分钟，只憋出如下内容，很多单词还是错的,用词感觉也很浅显,看来水平差的远啊。哎
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in my neighborhood. I regard it as a good news. The reasons are below:
At first, It can give big  convinece to the people live nearby. As we all know, the steps of modern  life are more and more rapid. People save each minute to work, to earn and to rest.  After a hardworking day, a one hour or more cooking work exhaust people’s last energy and treasure time. If after off-duty, people  don’t go to kitchen ,directly go  to restaurant to order the favourate food, then just wait and talk. How wonderful it is!
Secondly,If a restaurant is built nearby, people will had another important  dinner room besides the one at home. The outside dinner room plays an unreplacable role .For example ,if many friends visited at the same time, and the dinner room cannot hold so many people, taking them to a restaurant is a good idea .Also,  if some visitor are not welcomed by household or children ,entertaining  them in restaurant is a good choice.
So, I welcome the restaurant being built in my neighborhood. I hope I can have dinner at the restaurant as soon as possible.