生如夏花小组第一次作业

PapillonFoxUID: 2171945

WRITING
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Could a new restaurant be fit for building beside my house? As more and more emphases are drawn on nutrient and healthy meal, some restaurants with certain characters could be a best place for enjoying the delicious or communicating hearts. But, if I have been told that a new restaurant would be built in my neighborhood, I would totally give negative answers.

As is known to all, the smoke waste is the major killer of human health, and it could always induce the cancer. Now, there is no effective device has been developed for dealing with those dangerous smoke. So, the everyday life of my like a time bomb positioned my side at any moment. I can not breathe the fresh air; I can not see the blue sky; I can not hear the bird singing. Similarly, the water waste still has the potential imperilment of my life. The emergence of restaurant will pollute all the space around my house and it will eat them up one day.

Meanwhile, I hope my life would be quiet because I am used to reading books and listening soft music. The restaurant seems to destroy my pacific life. As a public space, people always take some wine so as to make the joyful atmosphere. They cheer, they shout, even singing. Maybe those people have a wonderful time, but they may also interfere my freedom. Once it happens, I have to stop my favorite activities and turn on the TV. If at night, how can I enjoy my sweet dream?

Next, constructing a new place would be in a likelihood to change its original mode. For the sake of acquiring attractive face and effective space structure, workers have to rebuild parts of the house. These ‘advantaged’ changes would influence my room. Whether the water would flow into my house, or the beam lose its function. In addition, the management of the restaurant should be controlled proper, I really don’t hope to negotiate with the leader everyday.

I think I will suffer more if the restaurant is built up. The pollution by the smoke waste, water waste and so on will threaten the health of mine. The noise will influence my normal life, and especially I would not like my house has been injured. Thus, I don’t agree to the decision of building a new restaurant in my neighborhood.


SPEAKING
describe the most important decision that you made in your life

Until now, I think the most important decision in my life is preparing to go abroad. It is known to all, this process needs a lot of time and spirit, such as the GRE and iBT, GPA, application materials. As a graduate, I have to prepare the materials on one side, and do some experiments on the other side. How can I do those work because of the encouragement of my advisor. He made me know the soul of science and supported me to look around the outer world. So, I wanna to achieve my scientific dream and also hope to understand the culture of other countries. I like the shout ‘I made it’ after the success of scientific experiment.

sunflowerchenziUID: 2328335

WRITING It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. Could a new restaurant be fit for building beside my house? As more and more emphases are drawn on nutrient and healthy meal, some restaurants with certain characters could be a best place for enjoying the delicious(food) or communicating hearts. But, if I have been told that a new restaurant would be built in my neighborhood, I would totally give negative answers. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- As is known to all, the smoke waste is the major killer of human health, and it could always induce the cancer. Now, there is no effective device has been developed for dealing with those dangerous smoke. So, the everyday life of my like a time bomb positioned my side at any moment. I can not breathe the fresh air; I can not see the blue sky; I can not hear the bird singing. Similarly, the water waste still has the potential imperilment of my life. The emergence of restaurant will pollute all the space around my house and it will eat them up one day. 第一句是主题句么？感觉上么有写出smoke waste和restaurant的关系。阐述理由时，最好可以联系restaurant说smoke，不然感觉上不是最扣题 ,更像是阐述smoke 的危害。 The emergence of restaurant will discharge smoke ，polluting all the space around my house，which will be eaten up one day. As is known to all, the smoke waste is the major killer of human health, and it could always induce the cancer. Now, there is no effective device has been developed for dealing with those dangerous smoke. If the restaurant builds, the water waste has the potential imperilment（我的字典比较老，么查到这单词，不知道是不是有） of my life,which makes the everyday life of mine like a time bomb positioned my side at any moment(比喻很好哇）. I can not breathe the fresh air; I can not see the blue sky; I can not hear the bird singing. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Meanwhile, the restaurant seems to destroy my pacific life.I hope my life would be quiet because I am used to reading books and listening soft music. As a public space, people always take some wine so as to make the joyful atmosphere in the restaurant(单单说as a public space并不是让人很直观地知道是在说restaurant,若加的话更完整点). They cheer, they shout, even singing. Maybe those people have a wonderful time, but they may also interfere my freedom. Once it happens, I have to stop my favorite activities and turn on the TV. If at night, how can I enjoy my sweet dream? --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Next, constructing a new place like restaurant would be in a likelihood to change its original mode. For the sake of acquiring attractive face and effective space structure, workers have to rebuild parts of the house. These ‘advantaged’ changes would influence my room. Whether the water would flow into my house, or the beam lose its function. In addition, the management of the restaurant should be controlled proper because of the above problems，I really don’t hope to negotiate with the leader everyday. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I think I will suffer more if the restaurant is built up. The pollution by the smoke waste, water waste and so on will threaten the health of mine. The noise will influence my normal life, and especially I would not like my house has been injured. Thus, I don’t agree to the decision of building a new restaurant in my neighborhood.（末端说得不错） ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ 总得来说，用词蛮好的，就是结构有点问题，我比较倾向主题句放在段首，然后再阐述；还有就是说明理由时会将问题和主题分开。第一次替人改文章，哪里说得不好或者不对多多包涵：） SPEAKING describe the most important decision that you made in your life Until now, I think the most important decision in my life is preparing to go abroad. It is known to all, this process needs a lot of time and spirit, such as the GRE and iBT, GPA, application materials. As a graduate, I have to prepare the materials on one side, and do some experiments on the other side. (How can 不用了) I do those work because of the encouragement of my advisor. He made me know the soul of science and supported me to look around the outer world. So, I wanna to achieve my scientific dream and also hope to understand the culture of other countries. I like the shout ‘I made it’ after the success of scientific experiment.

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