生如夏花小组--第9次作业

森林116UID: 2272614

独立写作: (学习和教育)

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer

Nowadays there is a public concern under debate about that whether should all students be required to study art and music in secondary school or not. In my opinion, it is indeed necessary to teach those students something about art and music for the following reasons.

Firstly, studying art and music in secondary school will benefits to the students themselves much. For both art and music feed students’ imagination, help them express themselves and make them become sublimately. Music is another language to express human feeling profoundly and art is another window to exhibit the world naturely.Through learing the course, students will graduallt understand that those beautiful and saint things are not far away, it may not always be music other people want to hear or art others will appreciate, but the activity itself is enjoyable.

Moreover, in this era of rapid social development in all aspects of life, people are getting rich and high in material level while still be in a low and poor level in spirit life, some people even define that we are in the crisis of spirit. Thus getting educated in artistic way is necessary for teenagers, who will present and built up what the future will be. What’s more, these students will probablt talk about what they learned in art calss with their parents, then the young ones mat influnce the adults more or less and the latter may also get cultivated artisticly, that will bring positive effect to the whole society.

All in all, by studying art and music in high school, students begin to understand themselves as well as theirown culture and other cultures. What could have more value than that?

口语:

有人认为大学应该免费，有人认为大学应该收费。你的观点是什么

Well, in my opinion, universities should be free to all students for education is a basic responsibility of each government and being educated is also a basic right of all stufents who are qualified to enter to universities. It is common to see many excellent students have to leave schools because their familied could afford them, and that will be a great loss to both universities and the whole society. If universities could be free to students, there would be more people get high educated, that will finally benefits those students and the nation as well.

[ 本帖最后由 森林116 于 2007-7-18 13:30 编辑 ]

happyheliosUID: 2361949

我也想知道！

森林116UID: 2272614

:confused: 想知道什么??

bluecathyUID: 2231215

独立写作: (学习和教育)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer

Nowadays there is a public concern under debate about that（that去掉） whether should all students（all the students should） be required to study art and music in secondary school or not. In my opinion, it is indeed necessary to teach those students something about art and music for the following reasons.

Firstly, studying art and music in secondary school will benefits to the students themselves much. For both art and music feed students’ imagination, help them express themselves and make them become sublimately. Music is another language to express human feeling profoundly and art is another window to exhibit the world naturely.（漂亮的语言！）Through learing the course, students will graduallt understand that those beautiful and saint things are not far away, it may not always be music other people want to hear or art others will appreciate（我理解你的意思是学生们会发觉那些崇高且纯美的事物并不遥远，它也许并不是我们能够日常欣赏到的音乐和艺术，如果理解对了，建议换个句子，可用more than）, but the activity itself is enjoyable.

Moreover, in this era of rapid social development in all aspects of life, people are getting rich and high in material level while still be in a low and poor level in spirit life, some people even define that we are in the crisis of spirit. Thus getting educated in artistic way is necessary for teenagers, who will present and built up what the future will be. What’s more, these students will probablt talk about what they learned in art calss with their parents, then the young ones mat influnce the adults more or less and the latter may also get cultivated artisticly, that will bring positive effect to the whole society. （很新颖的观点）

All in all, by studying art and music in high school, students begin to understand themselves as well as theirown culture and other cultures. What could have more value than that?（最后升华得有点远）
很流畅！标红色的三个单词都是你将"y"打成"t"了，注意一下，不要因为这个丢分。期待7月28日荣耀归来！

口语:
有人认为大学应该免费，有人认为大学应该收费。你的观点是什么
Well, in my opinion, universities should be free to all students for education is（到这里就两个动词了，这是说口语最常出现的问题，建议使用短句，比如and it is） a basic responsibility of each government and being educated is also a basic right of all stufents who are qualified to enter to universities. It is common to see many excellent students have to leave schools because their familied could afford them, and that will be a great loss to both universities and the whole society（这句很亮点）. If universities could be free to students, there would be more people get high educated, that will finally benefits those students and the nation as well.
建议：多使用连接词！

森林116UID: 2272614

那个第二段,我想表达的就是你那个意思...但是,,用more than..怎么表达呢???

the activity participated in learning music and art is more enjoyable than just hear or appreciate it......

是这样么???