9T小组第五次作业Byxulifengbee

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Do you agree or disagree that people should do things they do not enjoy doing?




There is argument that whether one should do thing which is not one’s hobby. I personally hold that everyone will have to do something they don't like to do.

First of all, the modern time is a global competing era. People not only try to be a winner of a single room but also have to complete with all the talents from the whole world. As a famous book’s name-------“The World is flat”, we have to be ready to compete even we are sleeping. So you have to do many things you do not like, even what you hate. But for surviving, you have to do it, or you will be a loser in a Darwin world.

Secondly, it’s possible that you supervisor ask you to complete some project you do not enjoy. But you have to make it. It’s a order. Rice is so wise a woman, but she have to follow the Bush’s wish to do something she claims to be a wrong thing.

Last but not least, the thing which you do not enjoy maybe has a great outcome. You will never know a thing’s result until you have completed it. So what you should do before the ending is to conquer it even you don’t enjoy it.
Consequently, there is no denying that people should do things they don’t like to do. It will be beneficial to our surviving or our career success.

我作文一直都很差，希望大家多多指教，刚刚加了那个组，也不是很清楚该请谁改，该去改谁的。把自己的发上来先:-)
口语搞了一下惨不忍睹..........
                                                                                         

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问什么没人帮我改啊

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一、thing => things 小问题一定要注意；
      everyone 有点绝对了，可以用sometimes之类的；
      两个to do 有点近，可以用从句。

二、People not only try to be a winner of a single room but also have to complete with all the talents from the whole world. 这句实在觉得很别扭。。。
      第二段例子不够specific，说服力不强。

三、you supervisor => your supervisor  sak => asks or asked
      个人认为，Rice的例子不是很好，可以换个很伟大或者很平凡的例子，极端一点。

四、denying => denial

我也不太会评，只是稍表拙见，发现lz的小错误很多，一眼就能找出来了。

建议写之前做个提纲，充实内容，不要车轱辘话来回说，我都看郁闷了，别说考官了。

加油加油！ 可以就这个题目再写一篇~ !^-^!

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There is argument that whether one should do thing which is not one’s hobby. I personally hold（？有这么讲的？） that everyone will have to do something they don't like to do.First of all, the（去掉） modern time is a global competing era. People not only try to be a winner of a single room but also have to complete with all the talents from the whole world. As a famous book’s name-------“The World is flat”, we have to be ready to compete even we are sleeping. So you have to do many things you do not like, even what you hate. But for surviving, you have to do it, or you will be a loser in a Darwin world.去和其他的人竞争，和要做自己的不喜欢的事情有必然的联系吗？也可以用自己喜欢的事情去竞争阿。如果笔者觉得有很大联系，应该清晰的写出，不可以一笔带过。这个段落写的不够具体，建议大改Secondly, it’s possible that you supervisor ask you to complete some project you do not enjoy. But you have to make it. It’s a order. Rice is so wise a woman, but she have to follow the Bush’s wish to do something she claims to be a wrong thing. 这段例子具体，但似乎字数太少，感觉还没有展开就戛然而止了，建议增加些内容，充实一下Last but not least, the thing which you do not enjoy maybe has a great outcome. You will never know a thing’s result until you have completed it. So what you should do before the ending is to conquer it even you don’t enjoy it.Last but not least这个短语强调这个段落非常的重要，有这个词的段落在文中一般都是最大的篇幅，请笔者注意。另外，这个段落写的太不具体，一定要重写

Consequently, there is no denying that people should do things they don’t like to do. It will be beneficial to our surviving or our career success.
这篇文章看下来给人的感觉是你还不太了解TOEFL的写作要求，建议去看看OG上的要求，然后再写，会好得多，加油！！！

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;d: 谢谢，一定努力。作文一直是我的弱项;d:

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I personally hold
这个东西有的我倒是确定，XDF刚学的句式