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In this analysis, the arguer attempt to convice us that the conclusion in a recent article of a national newspaper on corporate downsizing in the United State is misleading.To substanciate this claim, the author cites the points of a recent report on the United States economy, that the jobs created are far more than that have been eliminated, two-thirds of the newly created jobs are of above-average wages and most of them are full-time and many of those who suffer the downsizing fate have found new employment. While several important concerns has some merits, some conspicuous flaws seriously undermine the line of reasoning.

First of all, the arguer cites the point from a recent report which found that the number of jobs which have been created are far bigger than that have been diminished. Lacking of the specific information on the extend of number of created jobs beyond that of eliminated jobs, it is impossible to access to the reliablity of the result of the report's result or make an informed recommendation. We can imagine that if this extend is far beneath our hope, it is impossible for the downsized workers to started their new jobs quickly. Moreover, although we admit the fact that the extend is far beyond our imagination, the new vacant positions may not satisfied of the need of downsized staff. The reason for this is that the argument ignores the factors -- such as the suitability between the vacant position and the technique of the downsized worker, the distance between the working place and that of workers' residence and the satisfaction on the salary of the new position -- that are the more decisive factors in resolving this problem. Supposing that the downsized workers are unsatisfying with the salary, the working enviroment and the extend for individual development, how can they get their new jobs in a short time?

Additionally, the saying of the report about two-thirds of the newly created jobs are full-time and can pay above-average wages does not support that the conclusion in article on corporate downsizing in the United States is somewhat misleading. It is conspicuous for us to deduce that the other one-third of the newly created jobs are neither high-waged nor full-time. Some of the downsizing employer are excellent worker who obtain loyalty to his career. Therefore, his bad destine only attribute to the society and the whole career enviroment. Obviously, he can not tolerate the lifestyle of low wages or part-time job and the only result is to face the serious economic hardship and living pressure, maybe for years, untile he finally get a satisfying job of suitable employment, comfortable enviroment and satisfying salary. The situation narrated by the article in the national newspaper is , in some sense, reasonable and this evidence author provides is groundless.

Last but not least, the arguer fails to take into account several other factors that might weaken the reasoning in this argument. The report demostrates that many of those who lost their jobs have found new employment. The account above is obsecure. The number of people who have refound their job are unreported and it might be much lower than we supposed. The similar flaw exits in the assumption that “vast majority ” – which is another obsecure statistic--of the newly created jobs may meet the end of the large amount of downsizing staff. All the flaws analyzed fail to illustrate that the editor’s opinion on downsizing is misleading.

As it stands, the argument is not well reasoned. Unless the author can demonstrate clearly that suitable employment, comfortable enviroment and satisfying salary are offered in the newly created jobs, the author’s concern about this issue is unfounded.

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In this analysis, the arguer attempts to convince us that the conclusion in a recent article of a national newspaper on corporate downsizing in the United State is misleading. To substantiate this claim, the author cites the points of a recent report on the United States economy, that the jobs created are far more than that have been eliminated, two-thirds of the newly created jobs are of above-average wages and most of them are full-time and many of those who suffer the downsizing fate have found new employments. While several important concerns has some merits, some conspicuous flaws seriously undermine the line of reasoning.
First of all, the arguer cites the point from a recent report which found that the number of jobs which have been created are far bigger中文习惯说大小，英文还是more更好吧 than thatof jobs which这样是不是更好 have been diminished. Lacking of the specific information on the extend of number of created jobs beyond that of eliminated jobs, it is impossible to access to the reliability of the result of the report's result or make an informed recommendation.这句问题较大，make an informed 这部分和哪里并列，result 还是reliability, 另外the result of the report's result？什么意思的表达啊 We can imagine that if this extend is far beneath our hope, it is impossible for the downsized workers to started their new jobs quickly. Moreover, although we admit the fact that the extend是不是extent is far beyond our imagination个人感觉不如写具体点的好, the new vacant positions may not satisfied of the need of 中文说满足某某的需要，英文可以直接satisfy sbdownsized staff. The reason for this is that the argument ignores the factors -- such as the suitability between the vacant position and the technique of the downsized worker, the distance between the working place and that ofthat代place吗，和residence重复 workers' residence and the satisfaction on the salary of the new position -- that are the more decisive factors in resolving this problem. Supposing that the downsized workers are unsatisfying with the salary, the working environment and the extend for individual development, how can they get their new jobs in a short time?
Additionally, the saying of the report about two-thirds of the newly created jobs are full-time and can pay above-average wages does not support that the conclusion in 为区分清楚，加个newspaper更好 article on corporate downsizing in the United States is somewhat misleading. It is conspicuous for us to deduce that the other one-third of the newly created jobs are neither high-waged nor full-time. Some of the downsizingdownsized employers are excellent workers who obtain loyalty to his career. 从句是什么意思？Therefore, his bad destine这个词是不是有点大 only attribute to the society and the whole career environment. 可以前面一直说they,后面有转为he? Obviously, he can not tolerate the lifestyle of中式英文，有点累赘，直接用tolerate low wages如何 low wages or part-time job and the only result for them is to face the serious economic hardship and living pressure, maybe for years, untill he finally get a satisfying job of suitable employment, comfortable environment and satisfying为避免重复建议换个词 salary. The situation narrated by the article in the national newspaper is , in some sense, reasonable and this evidence author provides is groundless.
Last but not least, the arguer fails to take into account several other factors that might weaken the reasoning in this argument. The report demonstrates that many of those who lost their jobs have found new employment. The account above is obscure. The number of people who have refoundrefind我不记得英语中有这个词，虽然能猜到它的意思 their job are unreported and it might be much lower than we supposed. The similar flaw exits in the assumption这个题目中有提到吗 that “vast majority ” – which is another obscure expression in statistics--of the newly created jobs may meet the nend of the large amount of downsizing staff. All the flaws analyzed fail to illustrate that the editor’s opinion on downsizing is misleading.
As it stands, the argument is not well reasoned. Unless the author can demonstrate clearly that suitable employment, comfortable environment and satisfying salary are offered in the newly created jobs, the author’s concern about this issue is unfounded.
1、建议不是很有把握的长句少用，你的长句已经够多，无需可以追求长句。
2、far beyond our imagination及类似的用法，指代模糊。不如用具体的专业词汇表达。
3、body1抽丝剥茧，论证严密。Body2避重就轻，力度不够。body3有些空洞，建议举例充实一下。
4、有个问题我不知道怎么解决，就是题目中的最后一句，作者认为公司裁员是审慎的，你的做法是直接忽略它，妥当吗？