【born to win】小组第9次作业 by blade0706

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It may be a pleasant thing for many people that they can own some land, and use the land according to their wish. Apparently, different wish will bring different usage to the land. As far as I am concerned, I will grow some fruit, such as tomatoes and grape trees, on the land, making it as my orchard. In the following essay, I will give my explanation.

In the first place, an orchard will provide me with one more access to approaching the natural world. In a city, we usually keep busy on making money. Even though we may spend our vacation on farmland or natural scenic areas, the time and chance of enjoying the pleasure nature brings are still limited. Nevertheless, possessing a orchard, I will have more time and opportunity to touch green plants closely. When the tomatoes sprout, bloom and subsequently bear red fruit, I can personally feel the vitality of the natural world. When summer comes, I can enjoy cool air in the shade of grape trees. Besides, I can breathe fresh air in the orchard, and relax my mind.

Secondly, cultivating fruit will help me become more patient. For example, during the growth of a grape tree, I need build a lattice to supplying it with more living space. Watering the tree is indispensable. Fertilizing the land is important. I also need protect the tree from the damage comes from pest and plant diseases. To guarantee the harvest of grape, I pay not only my labor but also my patience. I think improving patience will provide me with a more optimistic attitude to the pressure on my life and work.

Finally, when all kinds of fruit in the orchard are ripe, it will bring me pleasure. For some people, especially young people, they are used to enjoy watching a comedy movie or playing video games. But this kind of pleasure usually is transient, or impassive. Comparatively, when I cultivate the fruit in the orchard, I can enjoy the pleasure of paying labor, and I am creating the pleasure-future harvest as well. Tasting fruit is the material pleasure to me, and then achieving harvest is the mental pleasure.

The enjoyment of growing fruit is larger than simply owing some land. Especially, the process of cultivate the plants will bring me more enjoyment.

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It may be a pleasant thing for many people that they can own some land（to own some land）, and （to）use the land according to their wish. Apparently, different wish will bring different usage to the land. As far as I am concerned, I will grow some fruit, such as tomatoes and grape trees, on the land, making it as my orchard. In the following essay, I will give my explanation（explanations）.

In the first place, an orchard will provide me with one more access to（to可以去掉） approaching the natural world. In a city, we usually keep busy on making money. Even though we may spend our vacation on farmland or natural scenic areas, the time and chance of enjoying the pleasure nature brings are still limited. Nevertheless, possessing a orchard, I will have more time and opportunity to touch green plants closely. When the tomatoes sprout, bloom and subsequently bear red fruit, I can personally feel the vitality of the natural world. When summer comes, I can enjoy cool air in the shade of grape trees. Besides, I can breathe fresh air in the orchard, and relax my mind.

Secondly, cultivating fruit will help me become more patient. For example, during the growth of a grape tree, I need build a lattice to supplying it with more living space. Watering the tree is indispensable. Fertilizing the land is important. I also need protect the tree from the damage comes （comes去掉）from pest and plant diseases. To guarantee the harvest of grape, I pay not only my labor but also my patience. I think improving patience will provide me with a more optimistic attitude to the pressure on my life and work.

Finally, when all kinds of fruit in the orchard are ripe, it will bring me pleasure. For some people, especially young people, they are used to enjoy watching a comedy movie or playing video games. But this kind of pleasure usually is transient, or impassive（？？）. Comparatively, when I cultivate the fruit in the orchard, I can enjoy the pleasure of paying labor, and I am creating the pleasure-future harvest as well（这个pleasure和前面的pleasure对比不明显阿l. Tasting fruit is the material pleasure to me, and then achieving harvest is the mental pleasure.

The enjoyment of growing fruit is larger than simply owing some land.（这句的比较和主题没什么关系） Especially, the process of cultivate the plants will bring me more enjoyment.
结尾段有些突兀，别的总体来说不错，细节很充分，例子生活化。
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