雅思作文第三篇，谢谢大家指导：）

啦啦啦qlmUID: 2283407

3. The rising levels of congesition and air pollution found in most of the world’s cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in the quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more.
Discuss possible ways to encourage the use of public transport.

There is no denying the fact that the traffic congestion and air pollution are extremely serious problems to most cities, which should be taken strong measures to deal with by the government. But on account of the rapid development of the economy, there is(is or are?) growing number of private cars, and these problems tend to be much worsen. In my opinion, the proper solution is to encourage the use of public transport.

The first way to encourage the use of public transport is to make the use of private cars more inconvenient in city. It is obvious that parking fees and limit area for parking conduce to this measure. Provided that parking cost highly and there is no place to park, a large number of people will like to choose the buses or trains. In addition, the tolls of motorways and elevated road, which are beneficial to decrease the number of private cars, have been use in many cities.

Furthermore, the reason that so many people would not like to use the public transport is its dirty and always crowded with a large number of passengers. The better way to encourage people use it is to change the condition of the public transport. For instance, we can make the bus more comfortable and convenient. Also we can increase the number of times of the buses every day in order to make people take buses on whatever time they want. Thus, it will attract more passengers.

To summarize, from my point of view, if less people use the private cars, not only more efficient the public transport will be, but also the air pollution will decrease. So we ought to take into account the public transport and encourage increasingly people to use it.

总是觉得自己论述的时候语言很单薄，总觉得自己的观点有点站不住脚~而且有种一篇不如一篇的感觉~呜呜~
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夜空的彼方UID: 159120

呵~刚写完的？
占楼先！:loveliness:

夜空的彼方UID: 159120

There is no denying the fact（觉得有些多余了） that the traffic congestion and air pollution are extremely serious problems to most cities, which should be taken strong measures to deal with by the government. But on account of the rapid development of the economy, there is(is or are?) growing number of private cars, and these problems tend to be much worsen. In my opinion, the proper solution is to encourage the use of public transport.

The first way to encourage the use of public transport is to make the use of private cars more inconvenient in city. It is obvious that parking fees and limit area for parking conduce to this measure. Provided that parking cost highly and there is no place to park, a large number of people will like to choose the buses or trains. In addition, the tolls of motorways and elevated road, which are beneficial（helpful ?） to decrease the number of private cars, have been used in many cities.

Furthermore, the reason that so many people would not like to（应该试着变化一些用词，表示喜欢和倾向的词语有很多啊，譬如prefer to ） use the public transport is its dirty and always crowded with a large number of passengers. The better way to encourage people use（encourage sb. to do sth.） it is to change(changing) the condition of the public transport. For instance, we can make the bus more comfortable and convenient. Also we can increase the number of times of the buses every day in order to make people take buses(make sb. doing sth.) on whatever time(whenever) they want. Thus, it will attract more passengers.

To summarize, from my point of view, if less people use the private cars, not only more efficient the public transport will be, but also the air pollution will decrease. So we ought to take into account the public transport and encourage increasingly people to use it.

好好加油！注意一下自己常犯哪些错误，另外多看看范文，很多错误其实在写完之后花几分钟时间都可以检查出来。

啦啦啦qlmUID: 2283407

make people take buses(make sb. doing sth.)   make不是可以直接加动词原型？

There is no denying the fact。。这是我今天才看到的~就直接用上了~

这么晚还帮我看~谢谢~:loveliness: 我会加油加油~~~~~~~~~~~~

夜空的彼方UID: 159120

嗯，刚好好查了一下，make是使役动词，后边加动词原型~

呵呵，我也是根据自己的看法啊，你做参考就行了，there is no deny that这种句型本来大家都已经用滥了，你这样用其实也可以。

我这会在看下载的范文呢，刚写了一篇task1，今晚不想写task2了，休息休息！:)

67169619UID: 2320695

:victory:

啦啦啦qlmUID: 2283407

:loveliness: 现在怎么能休息~呵呵

djconanUID: 2257634

:)
呵呵，和67学的，;d:

啦啦啦qlmUID: 2283407

:rolleyes: 不要学他~帮我看看作文吧~嘻嘻~~好发愁现在~

夜空的彼方UID: 159120

呵呵，你昨晚睡的也挺晚啊？
这点别学我哦，我习惯了~;)

还有，给你一点建议，现在看你也写了好多篇了，我觉得你可以抽时间把以前写过的再仔仔细细的看一遍，按照版里朋友给你的建议和修改，自己看看哪些地方还应该改进，哪些地方自己“屡教不改”，呵呵 :p

futuremanUID: 2327059

大家都早睡
精神充足才能完成一天的任务呵;)

67169619UID: 2320695

原来你也是好人

牛肉伢子UID: 197768

加油了阿 支持

啦啦啦qlmUID: 2283407

恩~我的生物钟有点乱现在~每天四点睡十一点起呵呵~
到目前写了三篇作文，最怕没有长进~~~

67169619UID: 2320695

你这样的睡眠不好啊
但不知真的适合不适合你哦
blessing