argument180 [spring小组] 第4次作业

shanxinhpUID: 2311857

argument 180 The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company. "Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee-a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."

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In this argument, the arguer recommends that all the employees of Acme should take Easy Read course thus will benefit greatly. This recommendation is based on the observation that many employees from other companies have greatly improved productivity after taking this course, besides the arguer take two examples to support oneself. In several aspects, however, the evidence lends little credible support for the argument.

A threshold assumption upon which the recommendation relies is that Acme is similar to other companies which inferred in this paper, however, we could not find any evidence to identify the difference between them. It is true that one can make oneself improve more or less in certain area after training, but there exist fundamental difference, as we know difference situation may help to bring about a different result: comparing with other companies, Acme may does not require efficient reading in routine, for its major work is handicraft, maybe it is a car factory in that case they need training on how to use and how to kill use machines. Without accounting for the difference between them to assume after such course employees of Acme will efficient is unreasonable.

Secondly, the assumption that the companies have greatly improved productivity is due to their employees taking the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course is unjustification, for it is entirety possible that one or more other factor responsible for this condition, perhaps these companies bought numbers advanced equipments, by using which can promote product. As well as these companies induced plenty of workers with high knowledge level and experience can lead to the same result. According to argument fail to provided strongly evidence we cannot make sure this recommendation is correct.

Thirdly, we cannot get the information that those employees get efficient after such course. All our know that the greatly different between “able to read” and “understand”, a person may able to read a novel of thousands pages during a day on surface, but he/she could not elicit useful information from 50 pages research paper. What is more, these example the argument use is too poor to support one’s mind, from the example we can get know is that only one graduate can read a five-hundreds page report in only two hours, as well as only one graduate was promoted to vice president from an assistant manager one year later. However the reasons responsible to these may be different: the one with fast reading speed may have talent in reading, he could read 500 pages a hour even in the shorter time without taking such course, moreover the other graduate make a soar of position may be due to his/her diligence when doing all the work, from which accumulate fine fruit and imagine. Since the argument fails to rule out this and other alternative explanation for two examples, the argument’s conclusion was unwarranted.

Even assuming all above is true we cannot agree to the arguer that all the employees should benefit from such course. Furthermore, the fact is that the argument reported that many companies instead of all companies get greatly improved productivity this course may be helpless.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To strengthen it the arguer’s proponent must provide evidencesthat other factors affecting improve productivity. What is more every company should make plan based on individual condition, in addition before any final decision are made we should evaluate all possible alternatives and causes.

atshineUID: 2411331

In this argument, the arguer recommends that all the employees of Acme should take Easy Read course thus will benefit greatly. This recommendation is based on the observation that many employees from other companies have greatly improved productivity after taking this course, besides the arguer take two examples to support oneself. In several aspects, however, the evidence lends little credible support for the argument.

A threshold  名词 assumption upon which the recommendation relies is that Acme is similar to other companies which inferred in this paper看好半天看懂了,有点乱,however, we could not find any evidence to identify the difference between them. It is true that one can make oneself improve more or less in certain area after training, but there exist fundamental difference, as we know difference -different situation may help to bring about a different result: comparing with other companies, Acme may does not require efficient reading in routine, for its major work is handicraft, maybe it is a car factory in that case they need training on how to use and how to kill use machines. Without accounting for the difference between them to assume after such course employees of Acme will efficient is unreasonable.

Secondly, the assumption that the companies have greatly improved productivity is due to their employees taking the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course is unjustification, for it is entirety possible that one or more other factor responsible for this condition, perhaps these companies bought numbers advanced equipments, by using which can promote product. As well as these companies induced plenty of workers with high knowledge level and experience can lead to the same result. According to argument fail to provided strongly evidence we cannot make sure this recommendation is correct.

Thirdly, we cannot get the information that those employees get efficient after such course. All our know that the greatly different between “able to read” and “understand”, a person may able to read a novel of thousands pages during a day on surface, but he/she could not elicit useful information from 50 pages research paper. What is more, these example the argument use is too poor to support one’s mind, from the example we can get know is that only one graduate can read a five-hundreds page report in only two hours, as well as only one graduate was promoted to vice president from an assistant manager one year later. However the reasons responsible to these may be different: the one with fast reading speed may have talent in reading, he could read 500 pages a hour even in the shorter time without taking such course, moreover the other graduate make a soar of position may be due to his/her diligence when doing all the work, from which accumulate fine fruit and imagine. Since the argument fails to rule out this and other alternative explanation for two examples, the argument’s conclusion was unwarranted.

Even assuming all above is true we cannot agree to the arguer that all the employees should benefit from such course. 应该适当的展开论证。Furthermore, the fact is that the argument reported that many companies instead of all companies get greatly improved productivity this course may be helpless.感觉这句多余。

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To strengthen it the arguer’s proponent must provide evidencesthat other factors affecting improve productivity. What is more every company should make plan based on individual condition, in addition before any final decision are made we should evaluate all possible alternatives and causes.

LZ的词汇积累真的很不错，还是好多单词我不认识啊，不过要注意下词性。第3，4 段论证不错，第2段的攻击点个人觉得有点牵强，从题目中不能作那样的推断。第5段只是一笔带过而不做论证的话，还不如不写。蓝色的部分是感觉不对的地方，但个人水平限制又不能确定。后面看的没那么细了，因为实在困了。哈哈。共勉。加油~！

liyue24UID: 2350787

原帖由 atshine 于 2007-11-20 00:31 发表
第2段的攻击点个人觉得有点牵强，从题目中不能作那样的推断。第5段只是一笔带过而不做论证的话，还不如不写。

第二段的关于别的company的经验不见得能照搬到A的论述还是可以的。只是那个car factory的说法我没看懂……
第五段虽然不是核心问题，但是捎带说一下也是好的，毕竟也算一个小逻辑纰漏。

lz的文章确实不错，内容多信息量大覆盖比较全面。学习ing～～

稍微注意点语法就更好了。可以copy到word里自己检查一下再改改。  :)
加油～～

shanxinhpUID: 2311857

谢谢二位的批评,大家一起加油了