argument15

hziu2UID: 2326409

argument15
The editorial recommends advise Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares and another investors not to purchase stock in this company.  To support this recommendation the editorial cites a recent survey about desiring to reduce fats and cholesterol in the food and nowadays low-fat products are popular around the market, but Old Dairy markets high-fat food. On the basis of this evidence the author infers that the company’s sales are likely to diminish greatly and decrease profits. The argument is logically flawed in several critical respects.
To begin with, the argument unfairly assumes that the respondents who desire to reduce the fats and cholesterol in food would not to buy the food full with fats and cholesterol. As we know that most of popular food contain high fats and cholesterol, such as McDonald, KFC. Their food even is named with dumped-food unhealthy to people for their high-calorie, high fat and high oil. But we all could see that KFC still increase their chain-store in china. So the argument can not judge that the high-fat food will have no market. And then the respondents accepted survey may be the people on diet, so the survey has no representation for the whole people.
The argument also assumes unfairly that when low-fat products abound in many food stores, the high-fat products will go out from the market. We can not make all the food with low-fat, in other word, some food must have high-fat and we have to eat them in every day life. And even some food with high fat is very delicious. Take chocolate for example, it is famous for its high-fat but also widely spread for its romantic mean and nice taste. So the author can not conclude that the products from Old Dairy will have no market.
Even if the low-fat products can influence the high-fat products greatly, the argument rests on the further assumption that Old Dairy only product high-fat food. No evidence shows that the company only product high-fat food. May be high-fat food is just a little part of the products in Old Dairy. Even the recommendation says that the company products many high-fat foods, the author does not give the proportion of high-fat food among the products.
Finally, even the company’s sales are likely to diminish and profits will decrease, author’s advisement that the investors should not purchase stock in this company is unwise.  A good investor may keep many stocks through low-price and control this company. And then through transformation the company will profit.
In sum, the editorial’s author cannot justify the recommendation on the basis of the scant logic evidence provided in the editorial and make a unwise advisement in the end.

zhuzhiweiUID: 2438616

argument15
The editorial recommends advise(删去) Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares and another investors not to purchase stock in this company.  To support this recommendation the editorial cites a recent survey about desiring to reduce fats and cholesterol in the food and nowadays low-fat products are popular around the market,(这句改改表达方式吧，总觉得and前后的内容最好分开来说。ABOUT的只是DESIRING) but Old Dairy markets high-fat food. On the basis of this evidence the author infers that the company’s sales are likely to diminish greatly and decrease profits. The argument is logically flawed in several critical respects.
To begin with, the argument unfairly assumes that the respondents who desire to reduce the fats and cholesterol in food would not to buy the food full with fats and cholesterol. As we know that most of popular food contain high fats and cholesterol, such as McDonald, KFC. Their food even is named with dumped-food unhealthy to people for their high-calorie, high fat and high oil. But we all could see that KFC still increase their chain-store（可以不加连号） in china. So the argument can not（切记这里的CAN NOT 要写成CANNOT连在一起） judge that the high-fat food will have no market.（整个这句话有问题，不是ARGUMENT来JUDGE而是人来通过ARGUMNET来JUDGE。自己想改怎么样表达吧） And then  （what’s more , it is very likely that）the respondents accepted survey may be the people on diet, so the survey has no representation ( is not representative )for the whole people.
The argument also assumes unfairly that when low fat products abound in many food stores, the high fat products will go out from the market. We cannot make all the food with low fat, in other word, some food must have high fat and we have to eat them in every day life. And even some food with high fat is very delicious.(这里是否想表达，我们一定需要高热量食品，更何况有些高热量食品很好吃？呵呵，中国式表达太严重了。) Take chocolate for example; it is famous for its high fat but also widely spread for its romantic mean and nice taste. So the author cannot conclude that the products from Old Dairy will have no market.
Even if the low-fat products can influence the high-fat products greatly, the argument rests on the further assumption that Old Dairy only product high-fat food. No evidence shows that the company only product high-fat food. May be high-fat food is just a little part of the products in Old Dairy. Even the recommendation says that the company products many high-fat foods, the author does not give the proportion of high-fat food among the products.
Finally, even the company’s sales are likely to diminish and profits will decrease, author’s advisement that the investors should not purchase stock in this company is unwise.  A good investor may keep many stocks through low-price and control this company. And then through transformation the company will profit.(同学，你是不是也炒过股啊？呵呵)
In sum, the editorial’s author cannot justify the recommendation on the basis of the scant logic evidence provided in the editorial and make an unwise advisement in the end.


建议多看看范文，逻辑问题不大，中国人大家都比较聪明，关键在把你想的能够明确的表达出来。中国式的句形让老美看会比较糊涂的。

liuyingbnuUID: 2321970

The editorial recommends advise(去掉) Old Dairy stockholders to (should) sell their shares and another(you mean other?) investors not to purchase stock in this company.  To support this recommendation the editorial cites a recent survey about desiring(consumers' desiration) to reduce fats and cholesterol in the food and nowadays low-fat products are popular around the market, but Old Dairy markets high-fat food. On the basis of this evidence the author infers that the company’s sales are likely to diminish greatly and decrease profits (profits will decrease? should not be the company decease profits). The argument is logically flawed in several critical respects.
To begin with, the argument unfairly assumes that the respondents who desire to reduce the fats and cholesterol in food would not to buy the food full with fats and cholesterol. As we know that most of popular food contain high fats and cholesterol, such as McDonald, KFC.(I am wondering here whether the examples are too specific.) Their food even is named with dumped-food unhealthy to people for their high-calorie, high fat and high oil. But we all could see that KFC still increase their chain-store(感觉increase在这儿有点别扭) in china. So the argument can not judge(predict) that the high-fat food will have no market. And then the respondents accepted (responded to)survey may be the people on diet, so the survey has no representation for the whole people.
The argument also assumes unfairly that when low-fat products abound in many food stores, the high-fat products will go out from the market. We can not make all the food with low-fat, in other word, some food must have high-fat and we have to eat them in every day life. And even (and even 一般是表让步的说)some food with high fat is very delicious. Take chocolate for example, it is famous for its high-fat but also widely spread for its romantic mean and nice taste. So the author can not conclude that the products from Old Dairy will have no market.（表示因果的时候，so用得太多了，可以换其它表达方式）
Even if the low-fat products can influence the high-fat products greatly, the argument rests on the further assumption that Old Dairy only product high-fat food. No evidence shows that the company only product high-fat food. May be high-fat food is just a little part of the products in Old Dairy. Even the recommendation says that the company products many high-fat foods, the author does not give the proportion of high-fat food among the products.
Finally, even（assuming） the company’s sales are likely to diminish and profits will decrease, author’s advisement that the investors should not purchase stock in this company is unwise.  A good investor may keep many stocks through low-price and control this company. And then through transformation the company will profit.
In sum, the editorial’s author cannot justify the recommendation on the basis of the scant logic evidence provided in the editorial and make a unwise advisement in the end.