issue38 [Aero作文组]第四次作业 by beetle1986

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Issue38 by beetle1986

In this era of digital, people can get knowledge from all kinds of media, especially by watching TV, rather than only by reading books before. Albeit the importance of reading is declining, the books still are necessary and much more important than any other media.

Admittedly, people can learn much by watching television. Be different from books, television can provide visual video and voice that make things much more apprehensible. For instance, students who are studying physics may lose in obscure functions and equations on books. And with a television which has visual programs that show the physics meaning of functions, physics could be much easier for students to study. Another typical example is that people who is learning dance. All of tenors printed on the books and every step has a picture to illustrate, but only by reading dance books one cannot succeed because that dance is a serious of coherent action, on contrary, television can solve this trouble well.

Books are still necessary. TV program indeed more visual than books, but it is not totally similar that TV program cannot replace books completely. Not everything in books can be transform into visual program. For example, in archaic China, there were a lot of brilliant arguments about all fields of our society such as education, diplomacy, strategy et al. People can learn how to handle the problems they met today by reading these classic. The fascination of a novel is that it offers people infinite space to imagine, Shakespeare once said: “There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes.” On television, it is just the editor’s hamlet.

For some reasons, books are much important than other media. First, thousands years of human civilization, which is the most important heritage of human, are recorded in books. The only way people exploit this imponderable treasure is reading. Second, books are portable that one can carry it to everywhere he wants and read whenever he wants. Additionally, all reading needs are that light and books, but watching TV is affect by a lot of factors such as TV set, electricity, signal, type of program et al. Finally, reading costs little, read in library could be free, but watch TV cost a lot, one want to watch TV should pay much on TV set, channel and so on.

To sum up, owe to the huge advance of digital technique and Integrated circuit, people can get any information they want from various ways. Reading books is not as important as it once before. But it is still the most important way that for people to learn. We should take the each advantage of reading and watching to defeat the disadvantage of another, and then we can study most effectively.

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Issue38 by beetle1986
[ ]表示可以省略。。。一部分( )里的是我觉得是不是好一些的。语法我是靠读着顺来看的。
In this era of digital, people can get knowledge from all kinds of media, especially by watching TV(television,对应media), rather than [only by reading] books before（in the past）. Albeit（gre词汇） the importance of reading is declining, the books still are（are still） necessary（much more important 还会不necessary?..。会不会重复了呢？） and much more important than any other media.
恩。。比较专业的开头。

Admittedly, people can learn much by watching television. Be different from books, television can provide visual video and voice that make things much more apprehensible. For instance, students who are studying physics（呵呵） may lose in obscure（gre词汇） functions and equations on books. And（换一个逻辑关系更强的词） with a television which has visual programs that show the physics meaning of functions, physics could be much easier for students to study. Another typical example is that people who is learning dance. All of tenors（gre词汇，但是不知道这里这样勇士不是很地道。） printed on the books and every step has a picture to illustrate, but only by reading dance books one（still） cannot succeed（acquire the ….） because that dance is a serious of coherent action, on contrary, television can solve this trouble well(perfectly..这样子论证就更有力度了。或者后面还加一点by。。。。来突出television有多强。。).


Books are still necessary. TV program indeed more visual than books（不知道这里要不要谓语哦。。）, but it is not totally similar that TV program cannot replace books completely.（这句话要表达的意思和句式有点不太契合额。。） Not everything in books can be transformed into visual program. For example, in archaic China, there were a lot of brilliant arguments about all fields of our society such as education, diplomacy, strategy et al（这个很少人会用的。好像是拉丁语里演化来的吧。）. People can learn how to handle the problems they met today by reading these classic.（这个例子证明了什么？我有点confused） The fascination of a novel is that it offers people infinite space to imagine, Shakespeare once said: “There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes.” On television, it is just the editor’s hamlet.（这个例子好好的。）
你好像把几个论点杂糅到这一段里了。例子很好啊。。但是要把几个论点放在一段就要表明它们之间的关系。要不然分开写还充分一些。清楚一些。

For some reasons, books are much important than other media. First, thousands years of human civilization, which is the most important heritage（legacy不知道好一些不） of human, are recorded in books. The only way people exploit this imponderable treasure is reading. Second, books are portable that one can carry it to everywhere he wants and read whenever he wants. Additionally, all reading needs are [that] light and books, but watching TV is affect(limited好些不) by a lot of factors such as TV set, electricity, signal, type of program et al. Finally, reading costs little, read in library could be free, but watch TV cost a lot, one want to watch TV should pay much on TV set, channel and so on.
这一段感觉像提纲。。。其实不用面面俱到。抓住有力的有话说得几个点就好了。这就是为什么湖北菜没有入选八大菜系。


To sum up, owe to the huge advance of digital technique and Integrated circuit（呵呵。集成电路原来是这样说得。）, people can get any information they want from various ways.（加一个Therefore。吧。关联词总能显得自己比较有逻辑。哈哈。） Reading books is not as important as it once（was） [before]. But it is still the most important way that for people to learn. We should take [the] each advantage of reading and watching to defeat（offset） the disadvantage of another, and then we can study most effectively.


总体来说。
觉得这篇基本的结构已经有了。但是谋篇布局的方式我比较不习惯。特别是我觉得在内容方面要作一些取舍。
论证方面。要议论的点也都找得很好。例子好。。但是。。要让好的例子为论点服务。例子摆出来有很多方式。关键是怎么样让它最好的为论点服务。
语言方面。我觉得基本功已经ok了。。可以让语言更加有说服力。像是在议论。而且还要注意更加正式。。
差不多了。就写这么多了。你已经上路了。假以时日。必修成正果。

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In this era of digital, people can get knowledge from all kinds of media, especially by watching TV, rather than only by reading books before. Albeit the importance of reading is declining, the books still are necessary and much more important than any other media.

Admittedly, people can learn much by watching television. Be different from books, television can provide visual video and voice that make things much more apprehensible. For instance, students who are studying physics may lose in obscure functions and equations on books. And with a television which has visual programs that show the physics meaning of functions, physics could be much easier for students to study. Another typical example is that people who is learning dance. All of tenors printed on the books and every step has a picture to illustrate, but only by reading dance books one cannot succeed because that dance is a serious of coherent action, on contrary, television can solve this trouble well.

(应该加个however就连贯了）Books are still necessary. TV program indeed more visual than books, but it is not totally similar that TV program cannot replace books completely. Not everything in books can be transform into visual program. For example, in archaic China, there were a lot of brilliant arguments about all fields of our society such as education, diplomacy, strategy et al. People can learn how to handle the problems they met today by reading these classic. The fascination of a novel is that it offers people infinite space to imagine, Shakespeare once said: “There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes.” On television, it is just the editor’s hamlet（这个比方很好，我觉得）.

For some reasons, books are much important than other media. First, thousands years of human civilization, which is the most important heritage of human, are recorded in books. The only way people exploit this imponderable treasure is reading. Second, books are portable that one can carry it to everywhere he wants and read whenever he wants（可以合并，略显啰嗦）. Additionally, all reading needs are that light and books, but watching TV is affect by a lot of factors such as TV set, electricity, signal, type of program et al. Finally, reading costs little, read in library could be free, but watch TV cost a lot, one want to watch TV should pay much on TV set, channel and so on（这段写得有点像argument）.

To sum up, owe to the huge advance of digital technique and Integrated circuit, people can get any information they want from various ways. Reading books is not as important as it once before. But it is still the most important way that for people to learn. We should take the each advantage of reading and watching to defeat the disadvantage of another, and then we can study most effectively.

行文比较流畅，而且思路清晰，不过后两段没有第二段好，无论是遣词还是造句，有点中式英语了。