issue159 [0806G-desperado小组]第十五次作业by hongdan

hongdanUID: 2228730

TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."


The speaker asserts that the human mind will always be superior to machines in that machines are merely human's tools. I agree insofar as machines are designed and invented by humans, however, in my view, the determination of superiority largely depends on the content of the definition of "superiority". Moreover, machines serve the current society as the denomination of "tool", but they have placed an indispensible role in almost each area.

With regard to the ability of concerning mechanical jobs, the machines are obviously superior than human minds. From the ancient time until now, machines, the first spinning wheel, the steam engine, the diesel engine, even today's computer and such like show their numerous superiority than humans. Consider, for example, the advantages of  computers. Since the advent of computers, the quick settlements of plethora of complicated works, number-crunching problems, and rote celeral tasks become possible. Just take the calculation of a mathematical polynomial for instance,  computers will cost no less than one of tens of thousands of  minutes to solve while humans will take more than ten minutes, even longer time. Also we look no need further than the performance of large machines in industry. It is these machines that shape the products and resist on the extreme high or low temperature environment or other environments. In other words, machines can deal with mechinical jobs efficiently and effectively.  In this sense, machines are superior to humans.

On the other hand, with regard to the ability of other areas, such as independent thinking, subjective judgement, and emotional response, human minds are definitely superiority to machines. When an emergency occurs, human minds can make decisions according to their empirical experiences or their acute thinking. But for machines, what they can do is just do what they are instructed to do. 这一段中的以下部分是后来补充全文的。觉得写得很乱，没有想到好的例子。Were there no prescribed programmes to a problem, the machines would not response when it happens. On the contrary, human minds are not constrained and instead have ample imagination and creativity. Humans can form a group, share each other's opinion, and discuss with each other, which can easily give birth to new ideas, concepts and ideas. An aptly example involoves the invention of today's high-tech products, all of which never exsited before and are the oucome of human minds. In addition, another factor that distingushes humans from machines relies on the emotional ability of humans. Humans will laugh or cry when something happy or sad happens while machines remain unchanged at all as long as their designed programmes are not changed.  Humans' complex and deep emotions make the whole world harmonic. However, all the above abilities are not owned by machines. Human minds here are more superiority.

However, the event that the supercomputer "Deep Blue" of IBM beat the world chess champion Gary kaspevo in 1997 might arouse the controversy that machines have excelled humans. However, further familiarity with the issue would reveal that the reason why the robot"Deep Blue" will win lies in the fact that behind the superficial phenomona the programmers have constantly changed the respondent programmes with reference to the suggestiions of hundreds of chess players. While Gary kaspevo thinks with his sole mind, the robot is still attributed to other human minds. Therefore, we cannot take the opinion of machines have transcended humans for granted. Yet in such case, it does not mean that machines will never transcend humans, especially the growing scientifical advancement, such as the reasearch area of artificial intelligence and the genes. What we humans should do is to deal with the relationship between humans and robots in an appropriate and reasonable way.

In the final anaysis, machines, in the name of humans' tool, have become part-and-parcel of we humans' day-to-day life. It is really hard-pressing to imagine what will the world will be like without the performance of machines. The only result is that we are deemed to go back to the primitive stage. Therefore, we should endeavor to develop the techniques of machines, as well as our humans' self mind.

[ 本帖最后由 hongdan 于 2008-1-10 01:22 编辑 ]

gaojiehahaUID: 2149729

The speaker asserts that the human mind will always be superior to machines in that machines are merely human's tools. I agree insofar as machines are designed and invented by humans, however, in my view, the determination of superiority largely depends on the content of the definition of "superiority". Moreover, machines serve the current society as the denomination of "tool", but they have placed an indispensible role in almost each area.(开头的中心不很明确.你表明了题目不完全对,需要对superiority定义,机器不可替代.但是最好用一句概括你的观点)

With regard to the ability of concerning mechanical jobs, the machines are obviously superior than human minds. From the ancient time until now, machines, the first spinning wheel, the steam engine, the diesel engine,(你能在限时的情况下写这些专业词汇,让我好生佩服!) even today's computer and such like show their numerous superiority than humans. Consider, for example, the advantages of  computers. Since the advent of computers, the quick settlements of plethora(这个词可以这样用吗,希望看到能回复一下) of complicated works, number-crunching problems, and rote celeral(?没有查到这个单词) tasks become possible. Just take the calculation of a mathematical polynomial for instance,  computers will cost no less than one of tens of thousands(是one of ten thousans of 吗) of  minutes to solve （the problem）while humans will take more than ten minutes, even longer time. Also we look no need(去掉need，不然双谓语了) further than the performance of large machines in industry. It is these machines that shape the products and resist on the extreme high or low temperature environment or other environments. In other words, machines can deal with mechinical(mechanical) jobs efficiently and effectively.  In this sense, machines are superior to humans.(例子挺多的，但是展开的不充分。一句话一个例子使得叙述没有深入下去。建议少一个例子多一点展开。不过，你总能想到很多例子，这点比我强多了)

On the other hand, with regard to the ability of other areas, such as independent thinking, subjective judgement, and emotional response, human minds are definitely superiority to machines. When an emergency(这个词用在这里十分恰当) occurs, human minds can make decisions according to their empirical experiences or their acute thinking. But for machines, what they can do is just do what they are instructed to do. 这一段中的以下部分是后来补充全文的。觉得写得很乱，没有想到好的例子。Were there no prescribed programmes to a problem(prescribed problem in programmers)（这个倒装句能这样写吗，希望看到回复一下）, the machines would not response when it happens. On the contrary, human minds are not constrained and instead have ample(这个词不错，学习。关于丰富的词汇我掌握的太少了) imagination and creativity. Humans can form a group, share each other's(each other是副词，改成share and discuss opinion with each other) opinion, and discuss with each other, which can easily give birth to（词组，学习！） new ideas, concepts and ideas. An aptly example involoves the invention of today's high-tech products, all of which never exsited before and are the oucome of human minds.（这是个不错的例子） In addition, another factor that distingushes humans from machines relies on the emotional ability of humans. Humans will laugh or cry when something happy or sad happens while machines remain unchanged at all as long as their designed programmes are not changed.  Humans' complex and deep emotions make the whole world harmonic. However, all the above abilities are not owned by machines. Human minds here are more superiority(用形容词，superior). （你补充的挺好的，不要担心）

However, the event that the supercomputer "Deep Blue" of IBM beat the world chess champion Gary kaspevo in 1997（我也想到这个例子） might arouse the controversy that machines have excelled humans. However, further familiarity with the issue would reveal that the reason why the robot"Deep Blue" will win lies in the fact that behind the superficial phenomona the programmers have constantly changed the respondent programmes with reference to the suggestiions of hundreds of chess players. While Gary kaspevo thinks with his sole mind, the robot is still attributed to other human minds. Therefore, we cannot take the opinion of(that) machines have transcended humans for granted. Yet in such case, it does not mean that machines will never transcend humans, especially the growing scientifical（scientific） advancement, such as the reasearch area of artificial intelligence and the genes(technology). What we humans should do is to deal with the relationship between humans and robots in an appropriate and reasonable way.(最后这一句发散思维，不知这一段中心是什么)

In the final anaysis, machines, in the name of humans'(human beings') tool, have become part-and-parcel(请教下，这个词组的意思？) of we humans' day-to-day life. It is really hard-pressing to imagine what will the world will be like without the performance of machines. The only result is that we are deemed to go back to the primitive stage. Therefore, we should endeavor to develop the techniques of machines, as well as our humans' self mind.（最后一句说机器是人类的好朋友，但是issue题目里讨论是谁更super，好像有点偏题了）

总的来说，限时文章写成这样我非常佩服。里面用了无数的精彩词汇，包括还需要像你请教的。字数也相当可观。
但是，我认为这篇文章的中心你内心是模糊的。
从文中可以看出。首先，开头没有给出明显的观点。而且提到superfical的定义，但下文没有继续定义的事情。
body3写发散了。结尾也有点偏题。
我觉得你再明确文章中心，把开头，结尾重新总结，一定是一篇好文章。
你对我的文章轻拍，赫赫！

hongdanUID: 2228730

gaojiehaha 真的改得很认真，说得很对，我再修改修改。
我总是写完文章后感觉不知道自己在写了什麽，思维很混乱。我会根据你的意见好好改改的，呵呵。
一起努力。
（Were there no prescribed programmes to a problem(prescribed problem in programmers)（这个倒装句能这样写吗，希望看到回复一下））这句我想表达的意思是，没有相应设定的程序，机器不能解决相关的问题。我是想用虚拟语气来着，这样写应该能行吧。
part-and-parcel(请教下，这个词组的意思？)我看到挺多范文中直接这么用的。相当于一个名词词组吧。是“重要组成部分”的意思。