帮人改作文，一天两篇（占楼时间是早上8点）我到家了……

iq28UID：2152875

规则如下：

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每天早晨八点开始，占楼前两名请贴习作贴的地址。比的是发帖时间，不是编辑时间，早期鸟儿有虫吃。每天占楼结束之后我都会回帖今天的前两名是谁，当天之后所有占楼的帖子我都会删掉。每次每次只有一篇被改的机会。习作标题格式不对的不看……

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同一个id三天之内请不要重复占楼。（如1.17改过的人下一次最早请1.21来占楼）

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习作发上来之前请自行先用word修改基本语法错误。

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修改习作以外别的问题，请不要用短消息。
请直接在此贴后面跟帖，我会尽力回答。如果没有回答意味着我不知道。
有解决问题的经验应该大家一起分享.

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别人修改只是个人作文水平提高的一个环节，我的看法也只是我个人的看法，最重要的还是自己的思考和修改。

就这些了，祝大家春节愉快，考G过程中痛并快乐着。

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2008-1-30 18:27 编辑 ]

iq28UID：2152875

1.21
huangleyi            
Issue208 (well written)
isoglucose           
Issue147

1.22
zyczuccgre
Argument5
M80
Issue144

1.23
bryanshaw
Issue17
foolg
Issue5

1.24
didinj
Argument45
我是洋葱
某范文题目

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2008-1-25 03:29 编辑 ]

iq28UID：2152875

今天没人么？

isoglucoseUID：2449346

ISSUE 147习作，请求楼主猛拍，第一次写ISSUE。。。

Must we choose between tradition and modernization, the two seemingly incompatible options in our society, as the speaker contends?  Although I agree that, in certain aspects, they are truely controversial, for most parts, tradition and modernization is reciprocal to each other rather than mutually exclusive. Moreover, there is also exist a crucial problem within this issue, that is how to define tradition and modernization?

In the first place, if we want to know whether tradition and modernization are incompatible, our prerequisite is to understand the definition of them. Our commonly unconscious assumption are always limited a fixed or a potential time to differentiate modernization and tradition. But this measurement could not run effectively and accurately when people is under reproduction that young generations and senior may have gaps between the definition of the another fixed or potential time to confine modernization and tradition. For instance, in arthitecture, the a building can be called modern or traditional due to different persons or groups. Thereby, tradition and modernization can not be claimed simply with no limitations or specification.

As mentioned above, modernization and tradition can exist toghter without disharmony. For example, in general, a cherished antique of a past dynasty is traditional, and mostly our administrator of the museum, do place them with deep caution, and often deposited along with complicated alarming systems, which is the made by the modern scientific technology. Thus, when this issue comes to antique, modern techonology must be used to protect the traditional and historical antique without any doubt or controversy.

Thirdly, in my personal observation, tradition and modernization are being both relative. Consider, for instance, the Christmas Day in western countries are customary and traditional. But in some underdeveloping countries, such as China and South Korea, peopel who vacation in Christmas Day would  be alleged to be modern and fashionable. Therefore while  in some aeras something would be recognized as modern, but in other places it can be considered as traditional.

Fourthly, in architecture, especially in the world most prestigious unversities, the style and structure of the buildings are often traditional from oxfrod to berkeley. In my view, the reason for this is that university take the traditional figure for the long lasting spirit of it. Moreover, the contemporary alumni and alumna of the university would also consider the traditional structure of the building as historical or nostoglic.

We noted earlier that a significant aspect of modern science is its contribution to the rapid pace of technological change. However, at first we must be clear that the modern science is mainly based on the conventional principles of mathematics and physics, paragon such as the plus and minus principles. Without theses theory, the technological changes would quenched by its termination. In short, in most parts, modernization can be called a modification of the traditional postulate, at least to some extent.


To sum up, tradition and modernization is not an absolute opposing things in the world. Something traditional may be modern in other areas, it is not wise to claim that tradition and modernization is incompatible or one must choose between them. A rational understanding of tradition and modernization would help us to know the them and choose between them, if we need.

iq28UID：2152875

作文发外面，这里只要贴链接就好。
请看清一楼规则，谢谢合作

huangleyiUID：2196520

谢谢！

Issue 208
"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."

We can hear of people's attitudes and interests in coversation with them. But there are occassions when no first-hand information is available. The only method we can learn about their attitudes and interest is to observe the way they look, dress, and act.

A lawyer representing a black man in a case would prefer a jury made up of people of color, who, more likely show mercy on his client; A hostess could expect a female guest who wears a veil and a loose-fitting dress to be Muslim and thus take an aversion for pork; Moreover, we have generally accepted such body language as a frown suggesting frustration, a shrug indicating uncertainty, and etc.

As a matter of fact, we lean heavily on observation of the way people look, dress, and act to acquire their attitudes and interests. The police owe a lot to observation of people's look, dress, and act, which plays an important role in discerning guilt or innocence, and eventually cracking criminal cases. So does the service industry which perceives its customers' preference by observing the way they look, dress, and act, and accordingly offers high quality sevices catering to individual taste. Furthermore, what we regard as acumen or considerateness in our daily life, is often coexistent with a keen sense of observation over the way people look, dress, and act and an excellent ability to analyze the evidence for their attitudes and interests.

However, we can not correctly judge people's attitudes and interests from the way they look, dress, and act every time. Sometimes what people look, dress, and act outside is totally different from the inside, especially when they have sordid motives or are driven by vanity. What we get from outside -- look, dress, and act, then, is merely an illustion which distorts the overall picture of people's attitudes and interests. Besides, different cultural background may as well lead to misunderstanding in interpreting people's look, dress, and act. Americans, for instance, take it for granted that head-nod indicates yes, while in Nepal it means no in effect.

When it comes to people within a society, in some sense, you can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people. This effect has been reinforced by knowledge of social background and cross-social comparisons.

There are some parts of the world where even now people, wrapped in leaves, furs and feathers, ditribute food, which comes mainly from hunting and gathering, uniformly among the community. Based on observation of their simple clothing, tool kit, and lifestyle, we could reach a tentative conlusion that they are a very primitive people and share acommon set of ideas and values prevailing in primitive societies.

Women's garment today is given much more bold dashes of design than even one hundred years ago. Such a change in the style of dress also indicates women's liberation in general. Obviously we now live in a society which puts on more emphasis on gender equality than ever before.

Taking a look at the behavior - involvement in social activities, for example - of black people in America in early nighteen century and nowadays, from slaves in plantations to citizens with the right to vote, the social and economic status of the black people has been upgraded significantly, which suggests that racial discrimination has been withdrawn from mainstream American ideas and values at present.

This advantage, however, is gradually being undermined with a growing trend of individuality and the third wave of globalization. Instead of conforming to certain criterion, appearance and bebevior of people today appear to be rich and varied. Besides, people with different social background dress themselves in the same fashion  and share the similar experience of work, study, entertainmen with the helpe of modern communication technology and mass global media. All these facts manifest that now it has become more and more difficult to find in appearance and behavior of people similarities within one society and distinction between different ones and consequently abstract a society's ideas and values.

While the way people look, dress, and act does reveal their attitudes and interests to some extent and by observing the appearance and behavior of its people you can, indeed, tell much about a society's ideas and values, no one can hope to arrive a full and true understanding of people's attitude and interest as well as a society's ideas and value by only observing people's appearance and behavior. It merely provides a possible access to them. And for in-depth look, other aspects of people and society such as speech, publication, legal system, historical background should also be taken into account. All in all then observation of people's appearance and behavior, together with other approaches, contributes to our understanding of people and society profoundly and significantly.

lytlUID：2298939

还是新手，请斑竹多多指教！

Argument117
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-790348-1-1.html

bryanshawUID：2239455

issue17 http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-792519-1-1.html

谢谢老大

iq28UID：2152875

6楼，习作链接，不是在这个帖子里面发习作，谢谢合作。
过会儿不改过来的话今天就不会改你的了。

huangleyiUID：2196520

issue20
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

对不起，谢谢

treesUID：82785

;d: 我来水一楼，辛苦辛勤劳作的iq28
你好伟大撒

billy4everUID：2375586

原帖由 trees 于 2008-1-21 19:15 发表
;d: 我来水一楼，辛苦辛勤劳作的iq28
你好伟大撒

那小的斗胆紧接着吹丝水一下，
斑竹的铺子开的太晚了，
可怜我今天才考完，铺子才开
:funk:

iq28UID：2152875

囧楼上的和楼上的楼上……
今天改的是huangleyi的和isoglucose的，别的占座的同志抱歉了。

life2008UID：2401740

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