ISSUE185 请各位高手赐教,快考试了!万分感谢

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185"Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."
丑闻虽然能使人们更关注那些改革者不能提到的问题,但是, 丑闻对社会也会产生巨大的危害
The statement claims that scandals can be useful in calling people’s attention to the problems which can not be informed by speakers or reformers. For my part, I concede that in some cases scandals can serve to draw our attention to the serious situation. Yet, the scandals can sometimes distract public’s attention from more fundamental and more pressing problems as well.



1 首先,丑闻的确能是人们更关注社会的严重问题.而这些是那些改革者不会说道的.水门事件提高了职能部门的监管粒度和责任感.To begin with, scandals indeed, more often than not, can cause wide public concern for the serious problems in society, which the public speaker or reformer would not release. The Watergate scandal must be a paradigmatic modern example. Regarded as an isolated incidence of the under-the-table campaign tactics, it would have been dismissed altogether. Yet, with retrospect to the increased level of scrutiny and responsibility which the public officials are held , thereby, this scandal actually provided a significant and lasting value to the American society. Another more recent scandal in U.S., Dan Rostenkowski,pleaded guilty in 1994 to 17 felony charges, including the embezzlement of $695,000 in taxpayer and campaign funds. Actually, this scandal called widely public attentions to the Clinton-Gore Administration and sparked a renewed call for the campaign-finance reform. And it might bring the passage of a congressional bill outlawing the private campaign contribution altogether, thereby rendering the officials and the presidential candidates far less susceptible to the undue influence of the special-interest groups. And our society will be the dear beneficiary of the reform.

2 另一方面,丑闻会将我门的注意力从更为急迫的事情上移开.On the other hand, scandals can sometimes distract people’s attention from more fundamental and more pressing problems. On the societal level, Admittedly, the Enron scandal indeed have drawn our attention to the financial market regulation system and to the influence that has produced on the certified accountant profession in the United States as well as other countries. Also, this case even could serve as financial and legal precedents. However, undue attention to this surface problem would have veiled the more fundamental and potential serious situation, which had lain between the government and business departments, the bribery and miscarriage of audit, for example.

Similarly, take a scandal from academia for example would lead us to believe that, actually, scandals can sometime distract public attention from more pervasive problems. Woo Suk Hwang, a professor of Seoul National University, once researched in the fledgling world of stem cells. His acknowledgement of fabrication and the underhanded dealings has stroked the world and captured the attention from various areas, which have largely focused on the technological feasibility of Hwang’s field or his moral corruption. However, problems caused by the vicious competition among the institutions for the financial funds from corporations, which served as the driving force behind the fabrication, received petty concern. This case may serve as an enlightenment for the authorities, more profoundly, to take effective measures to resolve the deficiency of the research funds.

In sum, I agree that scandal can be useful insofar as it sometimes reveals the problems more effectively than any speaker or reformer does. However, from what has been discussed above, it seems to me that scandals, more often than not, can distract us from more fundamental and pressing problems.

[ 本帖最后由 amberyang1221 于 2008-1-27 14:26 编辑 ]

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1 首先,丑闻的确能是人们更关注社会的严重问题.而这些是那些改革者不会说道的.水门事件提高了职能部门的监管粒度和责任感.To begin with, scandals indeed, more often than not, can cause wide public concern for the serious problems in society (serious social problems), which the public speaker or reformer would not release(may fail to reveal). The Watergate scandal must be a paradigmatic modern example. Regarded as an isolated incidence of the under-the-table campaign tactics, it would have been dismissed altogether(这句话太突兀了). Yet, with retrospect to the increased level of scrutiny and responsibility which the public officials are held 没看懂, thereby, this scandal actually provided has brought a significant and lasting value to the American society. Another more recent scandal in U.S., Dan Rostenkowski,pleaded guilty in 1994 to 17 felony charges, including the embezzlement of $695,000 in taxpayer and campaign funds 语法有问题,读不通,建议这个例子重写. Actually, this scandal called widely public attentions to the Clinton-Gore Administration and sparked a renewed call for the campaign-finance reform. And it might bring the passage of a congressional bill outlawing the private campaign contribution altogether, thereby rendering the officials and the presidential candidates far less susceptible to the undue influence of the special-interest groups. And our society will be the dear beneficiary of the reform.

2 另一方面,丑闻会将我门的注意力从更为急迫的事情上移开.On the other hand, scandals can sometimes distract people’s attention from (away from)more fundamental and more pressing problems. On the societal level, Admittedly, the Enron scandal indeed have drawn our attention to the financial market regulation system and to the influence that has produced on the certified accountant profession in the United States as well as other countries 语法问题. Also, this case even could serve as financial and legal precedents. However, undue attention to this surface problem would have veiled the more fundamental and potential serious situation, which had lain between the government and business departments, the bribery and miscarriage of audit, for example.

Similarly, take a scandal from academia for example would lead us to believe that, actually, scandals can sometime distract public attention from more pervasive problems. Woo Suk Hwang, a professor of Seoul National University, once researched in the fledgling world of stem cells. His acknowledgement of fabrication and the underhanded dealings has stroked the world and captured the attention from various areas, which have largely focused on the technological feasibility of Hwang’s field or his moral corruption. However, problems caused by the vicious competition among the institutions for the financial funds from corporations, which served as the driving force behind the fabrication, received petty concern. This case may serve as an enlightenment for the authorities, more profoundly, to take effective measures to resolve the deficiency of the research funds.

In sum, I agree that scandal can be useful insofar as it sometimes reveals the problems more effectively than any speaker or reformer does. However, from what has been discussed above, it seems to me that scandals, more often than not, can distract us from more fundamental and pressing problems.
结构比较清晰,例子比较丰富.
但是存在很多问题,不一一指出.
主要三点,语法问题,用词不当,语言过于中国化.