[0806GRE奋斗小组]寒假集训1月27日作业：issue 41 by jimmy-chase

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TOPIC: ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
WORDS: 452          TIME: 02:24:07          DATE: 2008-1-27 23:10:42

The potential mean under the speaker's assert is nonmainstream culture also make right effect as the other one. I strongly agree with the speaker' assert that, in some area, haven't nonmainstream play a key role, the world surround us is so uncertain and strange to face.
  I concede that the nonmainstream make the affirmative effect based on two reasons below. First, the world we live in is need totally be explained. By reasonable ways, human try to know the mass no matter it is scientific or logical. After all, we can’t live a absolute unfamiliar "home" without the basic cognition. Using the nonmainstream way to understand some phenomenon is the complementary way. The faith from religion is the right case. Why so many people have the godly heart, without any practical and material reason, even the scientist? The reprehensive example is our greatest physical scientist -----Newton, who changed his research direction to the theology in his later years. Moreover, there is a investigation indicates that most of Nobel's winners have his religion. You can image all the things is unconversant, all the people come to your life is strangle originally, even your self! It is just a way, a way belonging to the nonmainstream, to explain the world as well as the meaning of our life.
  Second, it is impossible to cover our life with the mainstream science.As the old saying goes "all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy ". All the contribution made today is not all by the mainsteam.For instance, the FredrichA Kekule, the German chemist, in his way pursuiting the structure of benzene, face the basic suppose until the night, in which he dreamed of three snakes  bit each other's tails forming a circle. Without the nape, it is the longtime to reveal the fact, even never.Consequencely, to some extent, the nonmainstream culture that is unsubstituted, butters some tiny cream to the cake of the mainstream.
  Admittedly, the nonmainstream have the active function in some place. While we can't isolate the nonmainstream from the other one. In my observation, the nonmainstream function in favor of the maintream. As we all know, the astrology was so fashion in our age. In the form of ora, way of internet, the information message of mobile, and so forth, which are really scientific resualts of the mainstream,they diffused. They are just like the knowledge based on the practice. the wall only with adequacy rock can be invincible. In the help of mainstream science, it show its brightness to satisfy our need
  In sum, we can't ignore the effect of nonmainstream in our way of knowing the word, Although the mainstream is very important. It is also significant to recognize the way of it function with the mainstream.   
第一次，拖拖拉拉，写得不好 不好意思

hy--phenUID: 2412043

TOPIC: ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."WORDS: 452          TIME: 02:24:07          DATE: 2008-1-27 23:10:42The potential mean under the speaker's assert is nonmainstream culture also make right effect as the other one. I strongly agree with the speaker' assert that, in some area, haven't nonmainstream play a key role, the world surround us is so uncertain and strange to face.
I concede that the nonmainstream make(makes) the affirmative effect based on two reasons below.First, the world we live in is need totally to be explained. By reasonable ways, human try to know the mass no matter it is scientific or logical. After all, we can’t live a absolutely unfamiliar "home" without the basic cognition. Using the nonmainstream way to understand some phenomenon is the complementary way. The faith from religion is the right case. Why so many people have the godly heart, without any practical and material reason, even the scientist? The reprehensive example is our greatest physical scientist -----Newton, who changed his research direction to the theology in his later years. Moreover, there is a investigation indicates that most of Nobel's winners have his religion. You can image all the things is(are) unconversant, all the people come to your life is strangle(strange?) originally, even yourself! It is just a way, which belongs to the nonmainstream, to explain the world as well as the meaning of our life.
Second, it is impossible to cover our life only with the mainstream science. As the old saying goes "all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy ". (这句话对论点起什么作用？不大理解呀)All the contribution made today is not all by the mainstream. For instance, the FredrichA Kekule, the German chemist, in his way pursuiting the structure of benzene, face the basic suppose until the night, in which he dreamed of three snakes  bit each other's tails forming a circle. Without the nape, it is the longtime to reveal the fact, even never. Consequencely(consequently), to some extent, the nonmainstream culture is unsubstituted(?), butters some tiny cream to the cake of the mainstream. （类比的不错）
Admittedly（这个是个转折词）, the nonmainstream have a active function in some places. While we can't isolate the nonmainstream from the other one, in my observation, the nonmainstream function is in favor of the mainstream. As we all know, the astrology is so fashionable in our age. In the form of ora, way of internet, the information message of mobile, and so forth, which are really scientific results of the mainstream, they diffused. They are just like the knowledge based on the practice. the wall only with adequacy rock can be invincible. In the help of mainstream science, it show its brightness to satisfy our needs. 这段论证得不好，没有针对ts来论证
In sum, we can't ignore the effect of nonmainstream in our way of knowing the world, Although the mainstream is very important, it is also significant to recognize the way of its function with the nonmainstream.  
总体来说，这篇文章结构挺清晰，除了body的第三段有点让人迷糊之外；
论证还需加强；
语言也要注意下，定冠词的用法，时态等；
第一篇呀，可以说写的比较成功拉，比我当时写的好得多多了。
加油哦~