ISSUE208 飞跃 dreams小组 第二次作业

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208. "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
208. 人们的眼神、穿着和动作都反映出他们的态度和兴趣。你可以透过观察一个社会中人们的外表和行为来获知该社会的很多理念和价值观。

The speaker claims that the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, which I think it is unfairly. In my opinion, although people can observe the appearance and behavior of its people to quire much about a society’s ideas and values in some aspects, in other aspects they are not.

When it comes to that the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, I think sometimes it is right. It is true that people wearing high-quality clothes and behaving in a genteel, respectful, and politely manner indicate they are educated and exalted, while some one’s act in a hateful manner indicate he or she is lacking for tutoring. But I do not agree this point in some other aspects: the people we called Eskimo who lived in Arctic always wear warm and thick sweater, scarf and overcoat so that they can withstand the cold and snow. Can I say all Eskimos are educated well or they are lacking for it? In this situation, the weather is the most important determination, and people can not know the attitude or interests from the clothes of Eskimos. Another example, people in some agrarian countries would dress for outdoor work and their clothes may strong and durable, while people in industry countries would dress for indoor work and exposure to their skin since it may be very hot. But that can not represent any attitude and interests; they are just forced by the environment.

Next consider the author’s point that people can tell much about a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people. I concede that people would wear some traditional clothes in some conventional countries. Such as Arab, people always wear a coif which signifies their custom and belief. But people in the country which has no such conventional rules may wear very different clothes. Young people would wear some fashion clothes but cost much and do and say some popular acts and words, which people can infer the society is open and freedom, while elder prefer to wear some austerity and succinct clothes rather than the fashion one. So can we know that whether the society is luxury or austerity? And it is entirely possible that the elder ask young people to wear austerity clothes instead of the fashion one in someday, and can we infer that the young people are homeliness but not dissipation? In my view, we can not just infer the society’s ideas and values from the people’s clothes and act before we know whether the society is a free one or an oppressed one. Maybe in some societies, people would belie their real attitudes and interests for the pressure of the society.

In sum, the speaker’s points are correct in some aspects and the free society, but in other respects and the oppressed society they are not. To analysis the people’s attitude and interests and the society’s value, observe the way people look, dress, and act is necessarily but not sufficient, since they may conceal some real attitudes and some other things.  

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The speaker claims that the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, which I think it不应该有吧，which就是主语，再加个it多余了 is unfairly. In my opinion, although people can observe the appearance and behavior of its people to quire much about a society’s ideas and values in some aspects, in other aspects they are not.
首段提出了自己的论点，鲜明得表达了立场
When it comes to that the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, I think sometimes it is right. It is true that people wearing high-quality clothes and behaving in a genteel, respectful, and politely manner indicate they are educated and exalted, while some one’s act in a hateful manner indicate he or she is lacking for tutoring. 好句子！But I do not agree this point in some other aspects: the people we called Eskimo who lived in Arctic always wear warm and thick sweater, scarf and overcoat so that they can withstand the cold and snow. Can I say all Eskimos are educated well or they are lacking for it?穿着很温暖，很厚实，好像跟有没有受过教育搭不上边吧？In this situation, the weather is the most important determination, and people can not know the attitude or interests from the clothes of Eskimos. Eskimos的例子举得很好Another example, people in some agrarian countries would dress for outdoor work and their clothes may be strong and durable, while people in industry countries would dress for indoor work and exposure to their skin since it may be very hot. But that can not represent any attitude and interests; they are just forced by the environment.
本段论述了通过外貌不一定能看出人的态度和兴趣Next consider the author’s point that people can tell much about a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people. I concede that people would wear some traditional clothes in some conventional countries. Such as Arab, people always wear a coif which signifies their custom and belief. But people in the country which has no such conventional rules may wear very different clothes. Young people would wear some fashion clothes but cost much and do and say两个动词连用?什么意思？ some popular acts and words，which people can infer the society is open and freedom, while elder prefer to wear some austerity and succinct clothes rather than the fashion one. So can we know that whether the society is luxury or austerity? And it is entirely possible that the elder ask young people to wear austerity clothes instead of the fashion one in someday, and can we infer that the young people are homeliness but not dissipation? In my view, we can not just infer the society’s ideas and values from the people’s clothes and act before we know whether the society is a free one or an oppressed one. Maybe in some societies, people would belie their real attitudes and interests for the pressure of the society.
这个段落很长，论述也很到位，可以考虑为了使层次更分明，分成两段来写In sum, the speaker’s points are correct in some aspects and the free society, but in other respects and the oppressed society they are not. To analysis the people’s attitude and interests and the society’s value, observe the way people look, dress, and act is necessarily but not sufficient,陈述内容很有力量！since they may conceal some real attitudes and some other things.

这篇文章论述得很好，所举例证也都很能支持所持观点，建议可以让文章多分几个段落，显得更有层次些，以便于阅读