Issue51--Thrive小组第1次作业

z12y12l12UID: 2452277

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."


Today, people who went to a school or university all around the world benefit from education. It is always necessary for us to establish an effective education system, which can make people learn much more without paying much time and money. The speaker emphasis that an education system and only the one which is specifically designed for meeting the individual needs and interests of each student will be truly effective. Seemingly, it is reasonable based on the idea that if everyone can get access to the education of the type they need, people will learn fast and happily. As a matter of fact, creating this type of education is not a choice.

First, it is almost impossible for the contemporary people to establish an education system like this. One reason behind this is we actually can not know what every individual exactly need from the education system. One example support this is the story of Einstein, he, when was young, was not considered as a smart boy at all, he can't even speak a word until five. By contrast, he has showed his unique talent after he became an adult. What education did he need? Did he need a system for a common child or for a talent? We, even himself, do not know what would be the best choice for him. It is possible that it is just the regular education discovered his talent.

Another reason, supporting the impossibility, is that designing and creating this kind of education will cost people a huge amount of money, time, and labor. As we can anticipate, when establishing this type of education, basically, we need at least one teacher for one student, since every student is different, and this cost much. And even more, not all teacher can make the accurate decision that what is the truly need of his or her student, because human, even an individual, is complex and unpredictable. The huge cost actually does not meet the object of "effective".

Second, even if one day, we can create an education system which can exactly meet individual needs and interests, it is possibly a two-side weapon. As an instance, each student is receiving a suitable education, and this, will possibly eliminate the competition among students, since the education are different from one student to another, and it is not possible to compare the scores or achievements of the students. Thus, when the students graduated, they will come to a world full of competition, and they surely will not be accepted by the society, and eventually, they must pay much to learn the way to compete in the society, or fail to find an suitable place in this world. This indicates that this education system may cause damage to students' lives.

In a sum, for the above reasons, establishing a education that meets individual needs and interests for every student is impossible, and granting that it is possible, the education system could not be truly effective, but do harm to the students in their future lives.



感想：
应该算是第3次写了吧，但是这是第一次能把思路理清晰而且自己稍微满意一些的。但是很明显差距还很大，请大家随意拍转。
自己先拍：

感觉自己的例证方面，对比方面还是没有任何感觉，不知道为什么举的例子总觉得比较牵强而且很少能举出像样的例子，另外没有可做对比的东西，总觉得理由不够充分。语言方面也欠缺，词汇还是太少，就那么个establish, create,用的烦了都，build没敢用，似乎不是很贴切。


小组的同志改作业要好好拍拍哈哈！谁看不顺眼了也来拍~




提纲:
People are trying to find an effective edu-sys, the author said <what he said>, it is not acceptable. reason is:
1. It's impossible to create an edu-sys like the author said, for 2 reason:
  a. We do not know the exactly need of a student.
  b. Establishing such an edu-sys costs too much, and is not effective.
2. Even we can establish it, It still is an two-side weapon, for that an absence of competition will make student unable to adjust himself/herself to the competitive society.
Conclusion: it is not our choice to build such an edu-sys.

[ 本帖最后由 z12y12l12 于 2008-2-1 12:46 编辑 ]

z12y12l12UID: 2452277

...刚发现有一点点写成argu的倾向...

z12y12l12UID: 2452277

晕，等了好久，没人拍......

vic_rainUID: 2304309

你写的太快了，佩服！
但是内容我还没敢看，因为自己还没写好。

icerainyfengUID: 2436324

Today, people who went to a school or university all around the world benefit from education. It is always （这个问题已经困扰我好久，不是说always这样绝对话的语言不要用吗？可是在满分范文里都有的啊！！）necessary for us to establish an effective education system, which can make people learn much more without paying much time and money. The speaker emphasis（emphasizes） that an education system and only the one （only是不是有点绝对？）which is specifically designed for meeting the individual needs and interests of each student will be truly effective. Seemingly, it is reasonable based（basing） on the idea that if everyone can get access to the education of the type they need, people will learn fast and happily. As a matter of fact, creating this type of education is not a choice.

First, it is almost impossible for the contemporary people to establish an education system like this（另起一段这个this要不要指明是什么）. One reason behind this is we actually can not know what every(可以删掉吧) individual exactly need from the education system. One example support this is the story of Einstein, he, when was young, was not considered as a smart boy at all, he can't even speak a word until five（这句话有点别扭，断了）. By contrast, he has（可以删掉吧） showed his unique talent after he became an adult. What （kind of）education did he need? Did he need a system for a common child or for a talent? We, even himself, do not know what would be the best choice for him. It is possible that it is just the regular education discovered his talent.

Another reason, supporting the impossibility, is that designing and creating this kind of education will cost people a huge amount of money, time, and labor. As we can anticipate, when establishing this type of education, basically, we need at least one teacher for one student（一定吗？有点绝对，而且看到了argu的影子）, since every student is different, and this cost much有点唐突. And even more, not all teacher can make the accurate decision that what is the truly need of his or her student, because human, even an individual, is complex and unpredictable. The huge cost actually does not meet the object of "effective".

Second, even if one day, we can create an education system which can exactly meet individual needs and interests, it is possibly a two-side weapon. As an instance, each student is receiving a suitable education, and this, will possibly eliminate the competition among students, since the education are different from one student to another（是指每个学生接受的教育不同吗？education for each students are different）, and it is not possible to compare the scores or achievements of the students. Thus, when the students have graduated, they will come to a world full of competition, and they surely will not be accepted by the society,（逻辑前后反了吧？因为是一个充满竞争的社会所以才难以被社会接受） and eventually, they must pay much to learn the way to compete in the society, or fail to find an suitable place in this world. This indicates that this education system may cause damage to students' lives.

In a sum, for the above reasons（一边倒的样子，越来越有argu的味道）, establishing a education that meets（meeting？） individual needs and interests for every student is impossible, and granting（granted） that it is possible, the education system could not be truly effective, but do harm to the students in their future lives.
第一次改，脑袋有点混乱，总体觉得有点argu的倾向，一边倒还是比较的危险吧。语言方面自个儿也比较薄弱，新手上路，多多指教~