决胜ibt小组第四周第一次作业 by gyyx

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Writing：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


With technology booming, it is definitely true that we spend less time now in cooking than our parents did 20 years ago. From this we maybe conclude that the time spending on cooking or preparing food would decrease with the technic develops. however, besides technology boosting, time-limitision is another reason people may spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.


To begin with, It is well-known that technology changes not only the speed of food preparion but also the food available in the markets. With the help of microwave we could get food prepared in a few second, even the fried food would be ready in 10 minutes. So if the development of technology could discover another appliment to heat or cook food, maybe after 20 years we could get fried chicken or toast in just a second. What's more, the development of food manufacturing and processing makes a lot of fastfood avaiable in a second after heating. A great number of food has been produced after the basic preparion such as washing, spicing. What you should do with this food is just heat them or even eat them directly.


Besides, we have to confine that nowadays we are too busy to spare time to prepare a fantastic dinner. Research says that most of the office people tend to go to the restaurants to have their lunch, as they are so busy and have to continue work after lunch right away. Maybe you will argue that in 20 years the development of technology will lead to us more leisure time. Maybe it is true, but apart from work, people in 20 years later may busy with other things, such as learning or entertainment. Moreover, through such a long time conditioned to the restaurants food, less and less people will share  the patience or interest in preparing food. Then it is just like a distribution in occupaiton, that is, someone is responsible for preparing food for others, and as this service more and more matured, you could order everyting delicious if you want.


so, to sum up, due to the development of technology, people do not need that much time in preparing food, and they may too busy with other stuff. They could still get what they want to eat without cooking in person, since someone will do this job for surviving.

[ 本帖最后由 gyyx 于 2008-4-21 18:14 编辑 ]

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With technology booming, it is definitely true that we spend less time now in cooking than our parents did 20 years ago. From this we maybe conclude that the time spending on cooking or preparing food would decrease with the technic develops. however, besides technology boosting, time-limitision is another reason people may spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.

To begin with, It is well-known that technology changes not only the speed of food preparion but also the food available in the markets. With the help of microwave we could get food prepared in a few second, [;] even the fried food would be ready in 10 minutes. So if the development of technology could discover another appliment to heat or cook food, maybe after 20 years we could get fried chicken or toast in just a second. What's more, the development of food manufacturing and processing makes a lot of fastfoodavaiable in a second after heating. A great number of food has been produced after the basic preparion such as washing, spicing. What you [TONE] should do with this food is just heat them or even eat them directly.

Besides, we have to confine that nowadays we are too busy to spare time to prepare a fantastic dinner. Research says that most of the office people tend to go to the restaurants to have their lunch, as they are so busy and have to continue work after lunch right away. Maybe you [TONE] will argue that in 20 years the development of technology will lead to us more leisure time. Maybe it is true, but apart from work, people in 20 years later may busy with other things, such as learning or entertainment. Moreover, through such a long time conditioned to the restaurants food, less and less people will share  the patience or interest in preparing food. Then it is just like a distribution in occupaiton, that is, someone is responsible for preparing food for others, and as this service more and more matured, you could order everyting delicious if you want.

so, to sum up, due to the development of technology, people do not need that much time in preparing food, and they may [^be] too busy with other stuff. They could still get what they want to eat without cooking in person, since someone will do this job for surviving

COPY到WORD里红了一片.TYPO太多.
这篇文章比上篇在结构上更自然,没有了刻意用模板的矫揉造作.这个是很大的提高.:)

目前制约你写作的主要因素是你的语法.你的语法薄弱直接导致文章中部分句子读起来不通畅,同时也会多少影响你的成绩.一星期不到的时间,迅速提高语法,难度太大,也不现实.但是个人觉得自我检查其实是一种提高的办法,我标出来的一些绿色有些是TYPO,有些是有语法问题.我帮你改,你可能下次再遇到就忘了,如果你自己去查资料,这个印象是很深刻的.
常见的就是单复数问题, 动词+to do or ing, 并列句间要有连词或者”;”, with后面不加句子等.

最后一周,有空可以系统的把戴云的TOEFL语法看一遍,多多少少还是会有帮助的.
Good luck!


er,看到你问例子和理由不充分,以及考场上的对策. 说实话,这种题目要写,例子和理由只能从平时积累的经验里找了,我觉得你的例子还行,从细节入手. 而且个人觉得类似的题目其实就是对比未来和现在的生活,算是比较难写的一类题目了,平时如果不是脑子里天马行空的小孩子,很容易写得很空洞. 至于说准备,你现在既然练习了这个题目,也算是拓宽了思路. 可以在剩下的几天时间内再准备一些自己的例子,看看什么样的题目可以用进去. 恩.

[ 本帖最后由 hyacinth 于 2008-4-23 15:48 编辑 ]