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Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today,the conception of being more convenient and healthy is increasingly dominating majority of people in diets.with the development of agriculture and some relevant technology,foot has becom easier to prepare.this significant change dramatically improved the way people live in the aspects of being convenient and healthy.I will explain concretely why I sustain this opinion in the following essay.
First of all,living in the rapid pace society,no one would prefer to have dinner costing his or her one hour or even more ,although It is considerable tasty. If  you often prepared meals for yourselves,I think you will totally agree with me that preparing meal is really a time-consuming job.you will buy your needful material from supermarked than clean and slice or deal with it,at last cook it. So complex process will cost you a great amount of time and energy.however,if you choose anther way to approach youtr meal,you will saving these precious time to do other sigificant things.take KFC for exampe.you only spend some mintue to have a lunch or enve take it away and eating at workplace.
In addition to the sake of convenience,healthy is also a indispensable aspect brought by the more and more easier preparing food.nowdays,most supermarket provide vegetables and meat clean and neat.you do not have to do this tedious job by youselvs and what is the most important is that you could not clean the food absolutely especially when it involves some chemical pesticide.but the food offered by supermarked will eliminated your worries about that.becaus before the sale,all of this food will go throught some rigid process to clean up these chemical which is probably
Hazardous to people’s health.so you could eat this convenient foot without the concern of the potential threat.
    Anyway,take all the abov-mentioned elements into consideration.i can draw the conclusion that the change of food becoming easier to preparing upgrade the way people live undoubtedly in the factors of convenience and health

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Today,the conception of being more convenient and healthy [healthier] is increasingly dominating majority of people in diets[people's diets].with the development of agriculture and some relevant technology,foot [food] has becom easier to prepare.this significant change dramatically improved the way people live in the aspects of being convenient and healthy.I will explain concretely why I sustain this opinion in the following essay. [感觉有点绕]

First of all,living in the rapid pace society,no one would prefer to have dinner costing his or her one hour or even more ,although It is considerable tasty. If  you often prepared meals for yourselves,I think you will totally agree with me that preparing meal is really a time-consuming job.you will buy your needful material from supermarked [supermarket] than clean and slice or deal with it,at last cook it. [First of all, living in a rapid society, few people would prefer to have meals cost one hours or more to prepare, even considerable tasty. I think people often cook by themselves will agree that, cooking takes time. You need to buy materials from supermarket, clean and handle them, then cook. ] So complex process will cost you a great amount of time and energy.however,if you choose anther way to approach your meal,you will saving [save] these precious time [time 不可数] to do other sigificant things.take KFC for exampe.you only spend some mintue[s] to have a lunch or enve [even] take it away and eating [eat] at workplace.

In addition to the sake of convenience,healthy is also a [an] indispensable aspect brought by the more and more easier preparing food.nowdays,most supermarket provide vegetables and meat clean and neat.you do not have to do this tedious job by youselvs and what is the most important is that you could not clean the food absolutely especially when it involves some chemical pesticide.but the food offered by supermarked will eliminated your worries about that.becaus before the sale,all of this food will go throught some rigid process to clean up these chemical which is probably hazardous to people’s health.so you could eat this convenient foot without the concern of the potential threat.

    Anyway,take all the abov-mentioned elements into consideration.i can draw the conclusion that the change of food becoming easier to preparing upgrade the way people live undoubtedly in the factors of convenience and health

没有看完最后一段。
错误太多了，拼写，还有小语法错误。思路上问题不大。但是表达不够清晰。如果长句容易出错，建议可以尝试用些短句。
加油。

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非常感谢~THANK YOU FOR YOUR TIME

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Today,the conception of being more convenient and healthy in diets is increasingly dominating in majority of people .with the development of agriculture and some relevant technology,foot has becom easier to prepare.this significant change dramatically improved the way people live in the aspects of being convenient and healthy.I will explain concretely why I sustain this opinion in the following essay.

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First of all,living in the rapid pace society,no one would prefer to have dinner costing his or her one hour or even more ,although It is considerable tasty. If  you often prepared meals for(by) yourselves,I think you will totally agree with me that preparing meal is really a time-consuming job.you will buy your needful material from supermarked than clean and slice or deal with it,at last cook it. So complex process will cost you a great amount of time and energy.however,if you choose anther way to approach youtr meal,you will saving these precious time to do other sigificant things.take KFC for exampe.you only spend some mintue to have a lunch or enve take it away and eating at workplace.

In addition to the sake of convenience(other than/apart from for the sake of convenience),healthy is also a indispensable aspect brought by the more and more easier(easier and easier) preparing food.nowdays,most supermarket provide vegetables and meat clean and neat.you do not have to do this tedious job by youselvs and what is the most important is that you could not clean the food absolutely especially when it involves some chemical pesticide.but the food offered by supermarked will eliminated your worries about that.becaus before the sale,all of this(these) food will go throught some rigid processes to clean up these chemicals which is probably

Hazardous to people’s health.so you could eat this convenient foot without the concern of (worried about/afraid of ) the potential threat. Anyway,take all the abov-mentioned elements into consideration.i can draw the conclusion that the change of food becoming easier to preparing upgrade the way people live undoubtedly in the factors of convenience and health
总不错，但是简单错误太多了。