IMPULSE-----19811010316-生活类-周一作业

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2006 年1 月6 日
在当今这个社会，人们越来越重视外貌及时尚。你是否同意？给出例子及原因(周一作业)。

There is a increasing number ofpeople are concerned about their appearance in present. No matter what reason it is, it is believable that different people hold different perspectives on the issue that whether it is agreeable and reasonable. From my point of view, Paying much attention to outside is fair and sensible for every person. I will list a few of reasons as follows.

First of all, people become more and more focusing on personal appearance is a essential symbol of the development of our society. Only if the economical condition is better enough, our people could have time and energy to make up themselves. Moreover, it is undeniable that the more people adorn themselves, the more development our society is. If we contrast different cities of country, we can discover that people who live in big cities are more inclined to embellish themselves than who live in small cities or towns. When we recall the living condition of our people just two decades ago, we can find it is so arduous for them to sustain their families not to mention caring their appearance. Therefore, economical situation and social environment play a crucial part of people' actions.

Second, appearance is a important way to express a person. We can distinguish one person's quality and whether he is successful or failed. Generally speaking, a people who has outstanding achievement frequently tend to express self-value and dress tidy suits, comb fashion hair and act elegently. For example, when we talk with or contact with a person who has bad exterior, we will become depressed and disencouraged. However, if we communicate with on-fashioned person, we will be active and motivated and then it is benefical to our personal development and acchievement of business.

Finally, Our dress style, living style and working way  are more or less inflenced by celebrities and entertaining stars. Hoewever, their influence not only positive but also negative. It makes childern absent from their classes as a result of shopping fashioning clothes, playing popular games and watching concerts. Nevertheless, there are a lot of a advantages of these modern notions, for example, helping children set up self-confidence, open their mind, communicate with society, and understand the development of society. when keeping up with fashions that some excellent people prefer, children will be motivated by them. Through concentrating on fashion, children can feel the development of our society.

To sum up, I think it is so significant for us to accentuate appearance and fashion because they are meaningful to us. First, they can faciliate us to build up self-confidence and sense of value, second, they make us know our social development.

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IMPULSE-----19811010316-生活类-周一作业
2006 年1 月6
在当今这个社会，人们越来越重视外貌及时尚。你是否同意？给出例子及原因(周一作业)。
There is a(an) increasing number of people are concerned (concer??) about their appearance in present. No matter what reason it is与whether it 重复, it is believable that different people hold different perspectives on the issue that whether it is agreeable and reasonable. From (In may be better?) my point of view, Paying much attention to(on) outside is fair and sensible for every person. I will list a few of reasons as follows.

First of all, people become more and more focusing on personal appearance is两个谓语 a(an) essential symbol of the development of our society. Only if the economical condition is better enough, our people could have time and energy to make up themselves. Moreover, it is undeniable that the more people adorn themselves, the more development our society is. If we contrast different cities of country, we can discover that people who live in big cities are more inclined to embellish themselves than who live in small cities or towns. When we recall the living condition of our people just two decades ago, we can find it is so arduous for them to sustain their families not to mention caring their appearance. Therefore, economical situation and social environment play a crucial part of people' actions.

Second, appearance is a important way to express a person. We can distinguish one person's quality and whether he is successful or failed. Generally speaking, a people who has outstanding achievement frequently tend to express self-value and dress tidy suits, comb fashion hair and act elegently. For example, when we talk with or contact with a person who has bad exterior, we will become depressed and disencouraged. However, if we communicate with on-fashioned person, we will be active and motivated and then it is benefical to our personal development and acchievement of business.

Finally, Our dress style, living style and working way  are more or less inflenced by celebrities and entertaining stars. Hoewever, their influence not only positive but also negative. It makes childern absent from their classes as a result of shopping fashioning clothes, playing popular games and watching concerts. Nevertheless, there are a lot of a advantages of these modern notions, for example, helping children set up self-confidence, open their mind, communicate with society, and understand the development of society. when keeping up with fashions that some excellent people prefer, children will be motivated by them. Through concentrating on fashion, children can feel the development of our society.
这段与主题的关联显得不是很明显，如果想写名人对青少年的影响，可以不用详细写出负面影响，只谈正面就ok了

To sum up, I think it is so significant for us to accentuate appearance and fashion because they are meaningful to us. First, they can facilitate us to build up self-confidence and sense of value, second, they make us know our social development.
结尾把first，second去掉。

从文章的题目来看，人们越来越看重外表。首先看重是一方面，“越来越”这个趋势也是一方面。个人觉得你这篇文章中 重点谈得是看重，而“越来越”没有涉及到。
文章结构还可以。拼写还是要看一下的。个人建议，水平有限，仅供参考----------------ktury批改
还有个问题想问问：fashion都包括什么？
                  Appearance包括什么？

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有道理，没有重视more and more 可能判为跑题。