IMPLUSE第三次作业,有拍必回

gabby19832004UID: 2461820

时间用在陪伴家人还是投入工作？
Several decades ago, when the society did not process in such a rapid pace, people have a mount of time to enjoy their life like staying with their families, or engaging in leisure activities. With the fulfillment of industrialization which has largely hastened our pace, it has bring several social problems onto surface. One of them is that people have to figure out a proper way to allocate their time. Whether to spend your time with family or to devote them into your work depends on personal interests. Well to me, I would like to stay with my family.

First of all, family is important to me. The intention of our work is to provide for our family. In other words, we work for a better life for both our family and ourselves. The greatest investment I could make into my family is time. Marriage is not a decision you made but a promise you keep. And to creat a harmonious ambiance of family I need to tender the family relationship sedulously. Among those couples who could not work on their marriages, most of them have attributed their problems to lack of time for communication.

Also, spending time with the kids is also indispensible to creat a healthy relationship. Absence of father or mother might court serious issues during young kids’ development. Parents always act as the identification or guidance of their children. It is dangerous to rise children without spending time to take care of them.

Secondly, work is sometimes boring while by staying with families we could do a varity of relaxation activities. When working, we are forced to repeat the same task time and time again, and our creativity could seldom be used. Commited time with our families, however, we could do almost anything at will. For example, we could chat with a cup of coffee, hanging around a park, plot a tour itinerary together or fix a dinner for ourselves. Such activities largely relax and unburden ourselves, and therefore prepare us a better state of working.

By and large, life is short. And we should therefore wisely allocate our time. Because I put family relationships superior to all the other stuff, I would commite most time to accompany with my family.

[ 本帖最后由 gabby19832004 于 2008-7-31 14:35 编辑 ]

迷茫者UID: 2514662

呵呵 拜学  6分
思路清晰~~语句流畅 词汇丰富生动
想问一下 你的MAJOR 好厉害的功底~~

lemon1kgUID: 2309820

同上~ 膜拜一下LZ的语言水平 还有观点很明确，例子看着也舒服~

saintjUID: 2248994

Several decades ago, when the society did not process in such a rapid pace, people have a mount of time to enjoy their life like staying with their families, or engaging in leisure activities. With the fulfillment of industrialization which has largely hastened our pace, it has bring several social problems onto surface. (it 的指代不是很明确，可改为With its fulfillment which has largely hastened our pace, industrialization has bring several social problems onto surface. )One of them is that people have to figure out a proper way to allocate their time. Whether to spend your time with family or to devote them into your work depends on personal interests. Well to me, I would like to stay with my family.

First of all, family is important to me. The intention of our work is to provide our family. In other words, we work for a better life for both our family and ourselves. The greatest investment I could make into my family is time. Marriage is not a decision you made but a promise you keep. And to creat a harmonious ambiance of family I need to tender the family relationship sedulously. Among those couples who could not work on their marriages, most of them have attributed their problems to lack of time for communication. W3Q2V6Rp

Also, spending time with the kids is also indispensible to creat a healthy relationship. Absence of father or mother might court serious issues during young kids’ development. Parents always act as the identification or guidance of their children. It is dangerous to rise children without spending time to take care of them.

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Secondly, work is sometimes boring while by staying with families we could do a varity of relaxation activities. When working, we are forced to repeat the same task time and time again, and our creativity could seldom be used. Commited time with our families, however, we could do almost anything at will. For example, we could chat with a cup of coffee, hanging around a park, plot a tour itinerary together or fix a dinner for ourselves. Such activities largely relax and unburden ourselves, and therefore prepare us a better state of working. ,C{wo:Yv#A
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By and large, life is short. And we should therefore wisely allocate our time. Because I put family relationships superior to all the other stuff, I would commite most time to accompany with my family.

传说中的强人，厉害。

gabby19832004UID: 2461820

major在上篇文章里面说过，journalism.
其实英文都是靠后来自学的，所以肯定还是有很多问题．大家多多指教我才能进步。

迷茫者UID: 2514662

你的写作功底是够了 已经到6分水准了
重点可以放在速度和 一看到题目想出几个理由这些上了

gabby19832004UID: 2461820

谢谢.8月份用一个月练速度了.我之前看李笑来的那本书感觉好象观点都不怎么实用.不知道大家怎么看.

迷茫者UID: 2514662

我手上也有笑笑的这本书~~~~那些列子 说实话 有的真的不跟取
我想也难为他了 185篇作文 要尽量不同~~~有些理由 纯熟 吓掰的~~~~~~~
对我们写做来说~~~~使用  好理解的列子 相对容易想到点~~~
太深的容易偏~~也不易说清楚~~~~~~~~~~~~~