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argument161 【today is the day小组】第九次作业 紫薇花开
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The following appeared in the summary of a study headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia
‘”Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as ………………..in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of mentia

In this analysis ,the arguer establish a relationship between headache and the rise of salicylates to conclude that the cause of decline in the average number of headaches is the rise inn the use of salicylates to food support the argument ,he cites a survey over twenty-year that this rise in the commericial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches In addition the arguer point out that recently food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods that means it could be used as flavor additives for foods .However ,the arguer constitute a wrong relationship between the survey and the conclusion

In the first place ,the arguer masks the kind of food containing salicylates ,at the same time ,he doesn’t point out that the food-processing companies add salicylates to which kind of food and fail to speak whether the food is added salicytes are rich in salicylates, under this condition ,we can’t assert that the study number of headaches is due to addition of salicylates .In addition the study cited by the arguer is insufficient to support the conclusion for the time when companies do the study is too long during twenty-year the aspect influencing the decline of number of headaches are countlessness whether the level of life have improved greatly leads to decline on headaches whether the level of medicine have made a great progress reduce the decline on headaches or the diet adjusted reasonably to make people health cuts down the number of headache patients .All in All ,the arguer don’t explain precisely why the number of headache decline and exclude other relevant aspects influencing the cause of decrease of number of headaches

In the second place ,the arguer made a wrong assumption ,salicylates could be used as flavor additives for foods the arguer assume that a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia, we all know that ,To much used in one thing can lead to a contrary result .for example ,food have already been added salicylates as preservatives than companies addition salicylates used as flavor addition for foods ,as a result ,whether the does is too much and threaten the healthy of people even make life in danger .In another words , there is no limit for use of salicylatea

In sum ,the arguer made a unpersuasive analysis , Before we can accept the argument ,the arguer should provide more precise result on the study .To solidity the argument the arguer could make a persuasive study on the salicylates as flavor additives whether it will lead to the decline on the number of headache

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