comeone作文小组-ttzzqq8月26日作文

ttzzqqUID: 2131556

The world is changing, as nothing in the universe can be dormant. The world is becoming smaller, as the globalization brings the people more closer no matter where they are.  The changing world seems to do nothing with the individual’s daily life, meanwhile, the individual's daily life are likely to have nothing interrelated to the happening event in the world. However, As a matter fact, the assertion is definitely wrong.

Any event happening at home or abroad will exert influence directly or indirect on the individual's life.  It has been admitted that particles in the world are interrelated with each other. Not to say under the circumstance of the globalization, individual’s life has been tightly linked with the world at times. For example, the increasing price of oil, food and raw material , evidently bring forth the uprising cost of daily life. The fact actually pointed out the increasing cost of the primary material has definite connection with people's daily expense. It stimulates the coming-up of inflation as well as daily life expense. Individuals' life have to be transformed because of the stress from price rising. People have to diminish the extra cost on the irrelevant stuff, moreover they have to adjust the home budget in line with the constant changes.

Knowing the happening event around the world will promote more opportunity of development in life.  The constant changes of the world
keep people alerted in seeking of more chance to convert life. It has not been assumed that the beginning of the web will
bring forth such impacts on life. The extension and development of the web contributed by the individuals, present a new era of life -to be digital.
Nowadays, when people surfing on the web, purchase products from eBay and reading news on lines, nobody has not expected 30 years ago the happening of web was a small step for scientist but a big step for everyone's life.

Generally speaking , to know the events happening around the world  is definitely provide more benefits for the people. Its influence cannot merely confine in the daily life, from the macro scope, the far-reaching consequence to society apparently acknowledged.

tclrjtclrjUID: 2517750

仁兄作业交得太晚了，下次最好两点前交不然就不会有人给你改了……正好我闲着就来借鉴一下喽

The world is changing, as nothing in the universe can be dormant（这个词在这可能有点堆砌之嫌，不是很合适的感觉，可能是我没见过这种用法吧）. The world is becoming smaller, as the globalization brings the(去掉） people more closer no matter where they are.  The changing world seems to do nothing with the individual’s daily life, meanwhile, the individual's daily life are likely to have nothing interrelated to the happening event in the world. However, As a matter fact, the assertion is definitely wrong.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREw,bhtK

Any event happening at home or abroad will exert influence directly or indirectly（这个词性一样了更好看吧） on the individual's life.  It has been admitted that particles in the world are interrelated with each other. Not to say under the circumstance of the globalization, individual’s life has been tightly linked with the world at times. For example, the increasing price of oil, food and raw material , evidently bring forth the uprising cost of daily life. The fact actually pointed out the increasing cost of the primary material has definite connection with people's daily expense. It stimulates the coming-up of inflation as well as daily life expense. Individuals' life have to be transformed（这个词用的时候多是实体的变化吧，用个能形容抽象的东西变化的词更好，alter什么的） because of the stress from price rising. People have to diminish the extra cost on the irrelevant stuff, moreover they have to adjust the home budget in line with the constant changes.

Knowing the happening events around the world will promote more opportunity of development in life.  The constant changes of the world
keep people alerted in seeking of(for) more chance to convert life. It has not been assumed that the beginning（LZ是想表达出现的意思吧，用emergence,introduction什么的可能会更合适些） of the web will
bring forth such impacts on life. The extension and development of the（去掉） web contributed by the individuals, present a new era of life -to be digital.
Nowadays, when people surfing on the web, purchase products from eBay and reading news on lines, nobody has not expected 30 years ago the happening of web was a small step for scientist but a big step for everyone's life. 我明白意思，但这里缺个标点好像也缺单词的样子，LZ看看怎么改一下

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Generally speaking , to know the events happening around the world  is(will,一句话里有两个动词原型喽) definitely provide more benefits for the people. Its influence cannot merely confine in(to) the daily life, from the macro scope（LZ想说放大镜吧，是magnifier）, the far-reaching consequence to society apparently acknowledged(这里用这个意思有点不对，但我也想不出用什么来，LZ重新想下这句话要表达的意思）.

laureljiaUID: 2440618

殁儿帮你改了语言,我就帮你看看整体吧,感觉第二部分好像不切题,说web的发明改变了人类的生活,但我个人感觉好像不是Event,更像是将技术对人类的贡献,LZ再仔细斟酌一下吧